A week has passed after the canterlot wedding. When a living pile of black slime appears at twilight's house. It reminds her of when her friends, her brother, spike, and her mentor did not believe her when she know that something was up with cadence. Now the monster makes her believe that one day they will turn away from her and leave her all alone. Anger will become her weapon, Anger will make them pay. Soon all will know to never turn there back on...VENOM!!!
Story inspired by vampdash's venom rising
edited by King of Kings
Chapters (7)
So many new Venom Pony stories. Is there some originating point for this trend, or is it just random factors aligning?
EVERY first letter of a name and secnencte begins with a capotoal letter.
4528885 ya my bad
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4528754 will he is my most favorite marvel villein plus he is spider man's most dangerous enemy as i have read.
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Most dangerous? What about Carnage?
4529252 he's just will crazy.you could say it's even among all symbiotes.
Hm not a bad concept and not a bad way to start it. My only complaint would be to get a grammar editor but other than that this is looking like a solid Venom story.
Ah an Eight-Legged Freaks reference. I like this story, the grammar needs to be fixed a bit but aside from that it's a great story.
Woah...
Horror! THE HORROR!!!
Were Doomed!!!
Wut?
Oh Crap start again...
4534490 glad you cough it. At I saw it at school one time. It's good for a spider horror film.
The concept is interesting but until you polish up the grammar, I'm not reading it
OOooookay?
4546565 that's not nice
I really like this story
and can't wait to see the sequel
5293048 You can like it, it doesn't matter. But if you like it now, it'd be ten times better when polished up by a decent editor
5293286 ok
but still be nice
You mentioned a sequel. Is there a sequel? If so, would you post the link to the sequel in the story's description please? If not, would you remove the chapter mentioning the sequel from the story, either until you make the sequel (if you plan on making the sequel) or permanently (if you do not plan on making the sequel) please? Thank you very much. However, if you do not plan on making a sequel, then shame on you! Shame on you for dangling a promise of a sequel like that in front of our faces and then taking it away!
After going to your page, I have found out why the sequel is not made yet. I have also found out that the story that the sequel has been put on hold for is incomplete and has been since 19th Aug 2014. Is there any plans for completing that story in the future? If not, then expect me to get back on your case for the sequel to this story. Also, if you are looking for an editor for this story, I would be happy to do that for you.
5423535 sure........uh how do i do that? do i post my email or something.
5423535 i have started work on the sequel but I've been too busy working( in real life) to write stories.
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Oh. Okay. Well, I understand that real life takes up time and doesn't leave a lot of time to write stories. Also, how do you do what? If you are talking about the editing of your story, I was just going to post comments on the chapters that have incorrect spelling and grammar.
5423716 oh okay.
5423716 also i'm still trying to figure out the grammar, but if you can help with the spelling it would be very helpful. and i'll try and work more on the sequel if it will make everyone happy.
This should be A meteor could be seen hurtling towards the ever peaceful land of Equestria. (The reason for this change is because the definition of too is in addition; also, or to a higher degree than is desirable; permissible; or possible; excessively.) This one however is very different from any other meteor in recorded Equestrian history. (This change is to make the sentence more descriptive, however, as it is a sentence change and not a spelling or grammar change, you can decide for yourself whether or not it, after all, it is your story.)
This should be The meteor hit in a matter of seconds.
This should be An unknown black liquid-like could be seen making its way oddly to a tree-like house. (The reason for this change is because it's is the contraction meaning it is and the definition of the word its is belonging to or associated with a thing previously mentioned or easily identified.)
This should be Twilight, who was the student of Princess Celestia, was sleeping soundly, but within her dreams a horrible nightmare was taking place. (The reason for the complete overhaul of the sentence shown here is because [according to several books] the way that you had it the first time was a sentence fragment that could be avoided by combining the two sentences together as shown. The reason for the capitalization of the word princess in that sentence is because it was a proper noun. For example, Princess Leia is the newest Disney princess. When the word princess is preceding Leia's name, it is part of a proper noun, but when the word princess is following the word Disney, it is not part of a proper noun [or at least, I don't think it is. Is it? Oh well, you get the point.] The reason that the phrase "at hoof" was replaced with taking place in the changed sentence is because the phrase "at hoof" is more than likely the pony version of the human phrase "at hand")
This should be "Evil evil evil..." Another voice echoed more mare like. (The reason for the two changes in this sentence are: an ellipsis has three periods in it, not two, and you shouldn't randomly capitalize words in sentences.)
This should more than likely be "W-what's going on g-girls?" Twilight said with more fear then she thinks.
This should be Twilight then turned from fear to terror as they all looked like they were about to tear her apart, when a black looking thing appears in front of her. (the reason for this change is because the definition of where is (in its adverb form): At or in what place, or In what situation or position, or From what place or source, or To what situation; toward what end; (in its conjunction form): At, to, or in a place in which, or At, to, or in a situation in which, or At, to, or in any place in which; wherever, or At, to, or in any situation in which; wherever, or Whereas, or That; (in its pronoun form): At, to, or in a place in which, or What place, source, or cause, or In which. Now, none of these definitions will get across the point that you are trying to make however were you to use the word were in place of the word where, the word were would get across the point that you are trying to make. I would say what the definition of were is, but I don't happen to have a dictionary with me at the moment, and when you look it up, you get a really confusing definition. As for the second change, it is a sentence change and not a spelling or grammar change, you can decide for yourself whether or not it, after all, it is your story.)
This should be "H-hello." Twilight said trying to figure out what just happened. (Twilight's name needs to be capitalized, and the rest of the changes to this sentence are sentence changes and not spelling or grammar changes, you can decide for yourself whether or not them, after all, it is your story.)
This should be "It seems I have come at the best time." (the reason for this change is because as it stands, it seems that the symbiote has come at the best what, exactly?
This should be "I take it that these beings are your friends." It said with yet another hiss, while Twilight just nodded. (The first change is a sentence change and not a spelling or grammar change, you can decide for yourself whether or not it, after all, it is your story, however Twilight's name needs to be capitalized.)
This should be and I can give you the power you want...no...that you deserve to make them pay."
This should be "I don't know..." Twilight said as she was almost giving in. (Remember, ellipses have three periods, not two.)
This should be "The power you would gain is twice the power of that of the elements, and besides without your element they will be easy prey."
This should be Twilight just gave an evil grin as it continued.
This should be "You'll gain the strength to overpower a Pegasus, the agility to move faster than an Earth Pony and a Pegasus combined, become smarter than any Unicorn, and have more power than an Alicorn." (The reason that I replaced the word Pegasi with Pegasus is because Pegasus is the singular form of Pegasi.)
This should be "Now what do you say?"
This should be Twilight said in a dark tone.
This should be "Good." It said as it wrapped itself around Twilight. (The contraction
is not needed here.)
This should be Spike was still sound asleep. He was probably dreaming about Rarity again.
This should be Then a sound of crawling that he could hear clear as day woke Spike up, and he looked for what could've made the noise. (sorry about that, I just now realized that would've made more sense)
This should be "Twilight is that you?" The dragon said with a yawn, when he heard hissing.
This should be "T-Twilight come on now t-this is not f-funny!" Spike said with fear in his voice, when suddenly....
This should be AAAAAAHHHHHHH!"
This should be Applejack said as she glances to the picture of all them at the wedding with Shining armor and Cadence, now with Twilight torn out from the rest of them.
This should be "Don't worry Rarity we'll get her back one way or another."
This should be "we'll tell you soon but right now we need you to send a letter to Celestia." Fluttershy said
This should be "Anyway what just happened where's twi?" Spike said,still blushing from earlier.
This should be everypony knew
This should be him. "What?"
Sorry about the fact that the corrections are split into multiple comments for the other chapters, I am currently using a PS3 to access the internet. Now that I've got that out of the way, on with the corrections!
This should be "Ah wonder where Twilight is, ah haven't seen her all morning." Applejack said as she walked to the library tree.
This should be "Oh you worry too much the egghead is probably just doing more of her studying." Rainbow said with a eye-roll after the word "studying" was said.
"Well I..um..wouldn't hold..um..against her it has been a week since the wedding."
This should be "And besides I'm sure the darling is just catching up with all the studying." Rarity said.
"Even after the super duper fun wedding last week?" Pinkie Pie said, hopping all the way as usual.
This should be "Hmm, no answer, that's weird. We almost always hear Spike groan or Twilight go "Spike, get the door" which is silly since Spike would have to tear the door off in order to complete the order." Pinkie said and finished with a squee.
This should be All the others just gave Pinkie blank looks.
This should be "Looks like the egghead really let the place go." Rainbow said as she flew
This should be to want find a reason to leave, but her worries for Twilight keep her from doing that.
This should be "My word this place needs to be kept clean more often remind me to get Twilight to hire an exterminator when we find her."
This should be Suddenly they all hear a low "groan" from inside Twilight's bedroom.
This should be "Now that was what I was waiting to hear." Pinkie said somehow knowing it was Spike.
This should be They all run/fly up to the bedroom, where they find Spike in a web, still groaning.
This should be "Hold on partner we'll have ya out as soon as possible."
This should be Applejack said as she, Rainbow, and Pinkie are tearing up the web.
This should be Fluttershy said with a hint of sadness in her voice.
This should be "Whoever did this must have got to Twilight too." Rainbow said angrily.
This should be while pointing a hoof to what looks like Twilight walking in from who knows where.
This should be "Do you not see all the webs everywhere?"
I will combine all of the comments when I get access to a computer.
This should be Twilight said without even flinching at Rainbow's outburst.
This should be "Are you alright sugarcube, you don't seem to be your normal self." Applejack said with a raised eyebrow.
This should be "Yeah we've heard that before, now what are you hiding Twi." Rainbow said with her hooves crossed.
This should be Twilight shouted with a dark tone.
This should be Everypony froze from what they heard.
This should be Rainbow said in defense with Applejack standing next to her.
This should be until Twilight did what they all didn't expect.
This should be A black liquid moved over Twilight revealing something worse than any other enemy the elements had ever faced.
This should be It had white dagger like teeth in rows
This should be what looked like a spider logo that was pure white on its chest.
This should be The rest of its body was colored pitch black.
This should be It let out a menacing roar that felt like daggers hitting your face.
This should be All frozen now completely in fear, Rainbow and Applejack broke away from their fear and charged at the monster.
This should be Applejack said, circling the beast, Twilight had none of it and slammed Applejack into the door.
This should be "Whatever you call yourself
This should be NOPONY ATTACKS MY FRIENDS AND GETS
This should be AWAY WITH IT!" Rainbow shouted, which Venom
This should be didn't even flinch
This should be which only made Rainbow angrier, she swoops down to take the
This should be thing out but to her surprise the beast take in its horn and grows out wings
This should be and takes off towards Rainbow with some as a "whaa" Venom gets a hold of Rainbow and throws her into the wall.
This should be She hissed as she revealed her true face.
This should be "Twilight..." Fluttershy said only to be cut short by Venom.
This should be Twilight/Venom shouts making Fluttershy shrink.
This should be "Why are you doing this Twilight?"
This should be Rarity said both with worry and anger.
This should be Rarity and Fluttershy facehoofed in the background.
This should be Ignoring Pinkie's question, Venom answered Rarity's question
This should be that we know that the changeling queen was imposing as Cadence
This should be "Is that what this is about I thought
This should be Venom shouted bucking Rainbow back into the wall.
This should be "Anyway...now that we have the power we will make sure that day will never happen AGAIN!!" Venom growled as she stomped her hooves on the ground with enough force to create a tidal wave. "Now all of you will pay a great price for that day with your lives." Venom said while hissing.
This should be first you attack Spike then you attack both Rainbow Dash and Applejack, and now you threaten us for something that was already put behind us. I'm sorry Twilight but you've left me no choice." She said in a angry tone that everypony knows too well.
This should be shouted, putting down Spike in Rarity's hooves.
This should be "ENOUGH!!"
This should be Fluttershy then then walked to Venom but stopped right in front of her.
This should be Fluttershy then closed her eyes and opened them back up revealing what all thought she would never have to use on another pony.
This should be Venom soon was overcome by this unknown force but she then roars at Fluttershy who doesn't move a muscle, when suddenly a orange blur whams into Venom sending her out the window where they all hear a loud thud.
This should be "Hey sugarcube didn't know you had in you." Applejack said as she comes back to Fluttershy.
This should be "Ya..um...neither did I." Fluttershy said trying to attract anymore eyes to herself.
This should be "Uh girls Twi is gone!"
This should be "Well I think it's to late to say that this whole room reminds me of a movie where radioactive waste is dumped and mutates spiders into Giant pony-eating spiders."
This should be "What are you talking about Pinkie and more importantly what the buck are movies?"
This should be "But in all seriousness I for one think we should get Spike to send a letter to Celestia to tell her what maybe she knows what that thing is that must have control of Twilight."
This should be As soon as she said that Spike suddenly woke up. "Oh my head feels like it was thrown to Canterlot and back."
This should be "But in all seriousness I for one think we should get Spike to send a letter to Celestia to tell her what maybe she knows what that thing is that must have control of Twilight."
This should be As soon as she said that Spike suddenly woke up. "Oh my head feels like it was thrown to Canterlot and back."
This should be Applejack came to support her.
This should be after much talk with Spike about the whole Twilight and Venom thing. Spike finally sends a letter to Princess Celestia. soon enough they receive letter back telling them to get on a train to Canterlot as fast as possible.
This should be Location: Canterlot
This should be in the throne room Celestia can be seen pacing with worry. Luna, on the other hoof, was just as worried, but did not really show it.
This should be "Is there anything I can do for you, Tia?"
This should be "I'm afraid not my sister." Celestia stated, when they heard a guard approach with news.
This should be "Your Highnesses they have arrived." stated the unicorn guard, while the five ponies and dragon came in right behind.
This should be "good." Celestia said while turning to Luna. 'Sister I wish to speak to them alone." stated Celestia.
This should be "It seems Celestia is in need of me, it says it has to do with my....sister."
This should be "What is it dear?" said Cadence with worry.
This should be "Hmm what’s this?" Shining said mostly to himself.
This should be "Spike if you please?" asked Celestia while Spike saluted, took the scroll and sends it on its way to Shining Armor.
This should be "Yes but I think Shining is more up to this task this his new wife, and because I think Cadence would only remind Twilight more of the "event"." said Celestia now preparing the massage to be sent.
This should be "But what about Cadence and aren’t those two on a honeymoon?" Spike asked.
This should be "Hold it. I'm going to send a message to Twilight's brother. He may want to know about this, and he may be able to help." said Celestia writing a message to Shining Armor.
This should be “Well what are we waiting for let’s go find Twilight!" said Pinkie bouncing to the exit.
This should be "It also seems to hate fire." Celestia said.
This should be "I know the feeling." said Fluttershy looking at the ground.
This should be "The Symbiote seems to hate loud noises.” Celestia said.
This should be “And why is that?” Rainbow asked.
This should be "It’s not as easy as you think, for we were only able to defeat it last by using my sister's loud voice.” Celestia said.
This should be "Anyways ah think we should do something before that thing gets somepony injured." stated Applejack while the others nod in agreement.
This should be "Well Fluttershy it is called a Symbiote as it was named when me and my sister first encountered it." Celestia said.
This should be "But what...um...is the name the creature?' Fluttershy asked.
This should be "The creature bonds with a "host" which it needs to survive. But to the host it gives power and the creature makes the host want to kill any that think otherwise.” Celestia said.
This should be "It feeds off of anger eww." Rarity said with a shiver at the thought of it feeding on her.
This should be "That is because the creature feeds off of anger and it must have sensed it in Twilight." Celestia said.
This should be "But why did it choose now to return and why did it choose Twilight?" Rainbow asked.
This should be “Well it seems a beast has returned to Equestria even though we had thought that it would not return for another million years." stated Celestia.
This should be "Now may be wondering what has happened to Twilight and what is making her act so aggressive towards others." said Celestia receiving nods from all of them.
This should be After much talk with Spike about the whole Twilight and Venom thing. Spike finally sends a letter to Princess Celestia. Soon enough they receive letter back telling them to get on a train to Canterlot as fast as possible.
This should be In the throne room Celestia can be seen pacing with worry.
This should be "Good." Celestia said while turning to Luna. “Sister, I wish to speak to them alone." stated Celestia.
This should be "Now you may be wondering what has happened to Twilight and what is making her act so aggressive towards others." Celestia said, receiving nods from all of them.
This should be "The creature bonds with a ‘host’ which it needs to survive. But to the host it gives power and the creature makes the host want to kill any that think otherwise.” Celestia said.
This should be "But what about Cadence? Aren’t those two on a honeymoon?" Spike asked.
This should be "Yes but I think Shining is more up to this task than his new wife, and because I think Cadence would only remind Twilight more of the ‘event’." Celestia said, now preparing the message to be sent.
General grammar rule to remember: New speaker means a new paragraph. Make sure to go back to all of your chapters and implement this change.
This should be Back at Canterlot
This should be Shining was arriving at Canterlot after the news about his sister.
This should be He could not help but feel he was responsible for what is happening.
This should be As soon as he enters the throne room he sees all the others including Celestia.
This should be "Alright what is this all about and what does it have to do with my sister?" Asked Shining in a calm but firm manner.
This should be "Well Shining I called you here for a reason but you must keep yourself calm for what I'm about to tell you." Celestia said.
This should be Shining Armor breathed in and out and prepared for the worst.
This should be "I'm sure that you have been told of the legend of the symbiotes." stated Celestia.
This should be "Yes, but wasn’t that just an old mare's tale?" Shining asked wondering what a myth has to do with this.
This should be "Unfortunately that tale is as real as Discord." Celestia said.
This should be Now Shining could almost know know what the bad news was as Celestia continued.
This should be "It seems as though a symbiote has come to Equestria in search of a host and I fear that host is Twilight." stated Celestia
This should be "M-my sister, we have to do something before she..." Shining said only to be cut off by Celestia.
This should be "Falls victim to the symbiote. Yes I agree. Which is why I'm sending you and the Elements back to Ponyville to confront this Venom and free Twilight from the symbiote, and if you can, to capture the symbiote." said Celestia as she prepared the things that they would need for the battle to come.
This should be "What about you, aren't you coming with us?” Rainbow asked.
This should be "I will soon but as a last resort." Celestia said.
This should be With that they all exit the throne room set on course for Ponyville
This should be Location: Ponyville or what’s still standing anyway (another way to put this is Location: The ruins of Ponyville)
This should be Once they arrived they all soon noticed the damage done along with dark clouds.
This should be "Wow Ponyville really let itself go." Rainbow stated.
This should be "No it's didn’t silly Ponyville is right here." said Pinkie, while everypony facehoofed or rolled their eyes.
This should be "Twilight most have been searching for you all after your first encounter." Shining said looking around at the damages. Then they heard a voice behind them.
This should be "well well we were about to think you had fled for your lives, glad we were wrong.” Twilight said in a dark tone.
This should be "Twi you need to get a hold yourself this thing is making you do this. Just back down now and we won’t hurt you." Rainbow said as they all got in a defensive position.
This should be "Oh but then it would not be any fun NOW WOULD IT!!" Twilight said as she shot a bolt of magic at Rainbow Dash.
This should be "Ha ya messed." smirked Rainbow.
This should be Then Twilight transformed into Venom and shifted from Unicorn to Pegasi and took off, slamming her head into Rainbow Dash who landed in a broken house.
This should be Venom then let out a loud roar.
This should be Applejack and Rarity charged at Venom who now landed.
This should be to their surprise Venom shifted from Pegasi to Earth Pony and slammed her hooves on the ground creating an earthquake which hit both Applejack and Rarity.
This should be Rainbow was back in action as she and Fluttershy tried to attack Venom.
This should be Venom then shifted from Earth Pony to Unicorn. She then used her magic to grab Fluttershy in midair and swung her at Rainbow slamming both of them on the ground.
This should be
This should be She turns to see a familiar face. "Well we did not expect to see you here." Venom said with a hiss.
This should be "Twily remember who you are..." said Shining Armor only to be cut short by a bolt of magic hitting him square in the chest.
This should be "NEVER CALL US THAT WE ARE VENOM!!" shouted Venom in anger.
This should be Shining, trying to stand back up, turned his head to Pinkie and said "go get anything loud you have." Pinkie, not knowing what he was getting at with this, just shrugged and jumped all the way to Sugarcube Corner.
This should be "I don't want to hurt you Twily, but I will if I must." said Shining as he got back up.
This should be He then shot a beam of magical energy at Venom, who in turn did the same. As both beams hit each other, Venom soon finds that she becoming overpowered and is hit and sent flying as the beam continued to hit her and slammed into a building which then falls apart on top of her.
This should be Panting, Shining and the four others approached the wrecked building.
This should be Soon a rumble was heard as Venom jumped right out and lands in front of them. As Venom landed, they all got back in defense position.
This should be "We must say we underestimated you Shining Armor, but we have one more trick up our sleeves." hissed Venom.
This should be She then started anther transformation, as her horn grew longer and grew a pair of larger wings. When the transformation was complete, she was the size of Luna.
This should be As she landed, she let an angrier roar, and thunder could be heard all around as it started to rain.
This should be all froze in fear. Shining was the first to speak, "That's impossible."
This should be With that Venom charged at them.
This should be "Alright what is this all about and what does it have to do with my sister?" Shining asked in a calm but firm manner.
This should be "Well well, we were about to think you had fled for your lives, glad we were wrong.” Twilight said in a dark tone.
This should be To their surprise Venom shifted from Pegasi to Earth Pony and slammed her hooves on the ground creating an earthquake which hit both Applejack and Rarity.
This should be as Pinkie reentered Sugarcube Corner, she rushed to her room upstairs and looked for anything useful(still wondering why Shining needed anything that makes a loud noise), she hound a horn, a trumpet, etc. once she found anything she found "useful" she made her way back down stairs along with her iconic party cannon. You can never be too sure.
This should be Loud booms could all around as buildings crumbled, and blasts of magic hit everywhere.
This should be a rainbow blur hit the ground covered in dirt, followed by an orange and white blurs both slamming the side of a house (not killing them of course,) while Venom as an alicorn had a hold of Fluttershy in her magical grasp.
This should be "We are starting to wonder how it is you five got the elements, when you can't even fight with mine missing" Venom chuckled while looking at Fluttershy. (there are six elements of harmony, not five, therefore there are five ponies that she would be wondering about, not four)
This should be "You were the one who helped us figure out who we are twilight!" Fluttershy whimpered nearly gasping for air, while Venom simply growled at her.
This should be "you always were kindest of us. But you could never make the hardest decisions!" growled Venom threatening to kill her. Until a rainbow blur hit her in the back letting go of Fluttershy.
This should be "Lay anther hoof on her and I'll buck the crap out you symbiote!" shouted Rainbow Dash in a threatening manner.
This should be "we all may have been the elements in the past but now there shall ONLY BE ONE!!” roared Venom as she raised her hooves in slow motion to crush Rainbow's skull, then a blast of magic hit Venom in the side, making her turn to Shining Armor who looked worn out.
This should be "Twily GASP this madness has GASP to end!" said Shining Armor trying to catch a breath.
This should be "WE SAID NEVER TO CALL US THAT HOW MANY TIMES DO WE HAVE TO SAY IT!!!!" shouted Venom angrier than ever.
This should be With that said Shining shot another beam at Venom, but this time Venom was ready and vanished and reappeared behind Shining who was shocked, Venom just smirked and bucked Shining, who went head first through one house and into another.
This should be "YOU CALL YOURSELVES THE ELEMENTS OF HARMONY, WITH OUT US YOU ARE NOTHI-AAAAAHHHHHH." Venom shouted only until she was hit in the back by a powerful magic blast sending her crashing into town hall.
This should be "Hope I'm not late." stated Celestia
This should be "well actually your just in time your Highness." stated Shining, as Celestia looked at all the damaged houses and buildings.
This should be all turned as they heard a loud roar coming under the rubble of town hall.
This should be Venom came charging out heading straight for Celestia with rage in Venom's eyes ramming Celestia sending her into a house.
This should be "WE HAVE HAD ENOUGH OF THIS NOW THAT ALL OF YOU ARE HERE TO WITNESS YOUR DEMISE!!!!" Venom shouted with rage filled eyes. As she was ready to start with Celestia she soon realized that one was missing. The pink one, Pinkie Pie!
This should be Without warning a really loud noise hit her eardrums, Venom then got down on the ground roaring in pain.
This should be right behind Venom was Pinkie with large speakers hooked to a microphone( how or where Pinkie got those we may never know.) while Pinkie was blowing into her instrument with all her might.
This should be "NOOOOOO!" Venom cried out in pain as the symbiote slowly reaped away from its host.
This should be Twilight was soon seen as she fell the ground unconscious.
This should be The symbiote tried to recover and started crawling back to Twilight, but just then Spike appeared with a mysterious bottle and scooped up the symbiote, trapping the creature inside.
This should be "well that went well." muttered Rainbow.
This should be "we'll keep this little guy locked away in Canterlot for the time being." stated Celestia.
This should be All nodded in agreement.
This should be "Will ah say that be a job well done." Applejack said carried by both Fluttershy and Rarity.
This should be right behind Venom was Pinkie with large speakers hooked to a microphone (how or where Pinkie got those we may never know.) while Pinkie was blowing into her instrument with all her might.
This should be They all turned as they heard a loud roar coming under the rubble of town hall.
This should be "well actually you’re just in time your Highness."
This should be Venom shouted angrier than ever.
This should be "We all may have been the elements in the past but now there shall ONLY BE ONE!!”
This should be not amused Venom bucked Rainbow off her, flew up, grabbed Rainbow's tail with her teeth, and threw her to the ground.
This should be "Lay another hoof on her and I'll buck the crap out you symbiote!"
This should be "You always were kindest of us. But you could never make the hardest decisions!"
This should be "You were the one who helped us figure out who we are Twilight!"
This should be A rainbow blur hit the ground covered in dirt, followed by an orange and white blurs both slamming the side of a house (not killing them of course,) while Venom as an alicorn had a hold of Fluttershy in her magical grasp
This should be As Pinkie reentered Sugarcube Corner, she rushed to her room upstairs and looked for anything useful (still wondering why Shining needed anything that makes a loud noise), she hound a horn, a trumpet, etc. Once she found anything she found "useful" she made her way back down stairs along with her iconic party cannon.
The second part of this includes repeats of the first part of this. However, the repeats aren't actually repeats, because there are still things that are incorrect. Sorry about that.
This should be Location: Hospital
This should be After what happened many just want to forget about it, some more than others. Celestia, Shining Armor, Spike, and the Mane 5 stand waiting and hoping for Twilight to recover, they are soon greeted by nurse Red Heart.
This should be "Well it looks as though she has some minor damage to her head, along with some broken bones, but otherwise she'll recover I'd say in a few weeks." said Red Heart.
This should be "Can we see her?" asked Shining Armor, the nurse nods.
This should be "Yes she should be awake by now." stated Red Heart.
This should be As they all enter Twilight's room, they all see how sad she looks then finally noticing them.
This should be "Hey girls, looks like I got myself into a predicament." said Twilight trying to avoid talking about the monster she had become like a few hours ago.
This should be "Twilight where just glad you’re still alive darling after what that thing did to you." Rarity said giving Twilight a hug followed by everypony else (except for Rainbow Dash of course.), when finally breaking the hug Applejack was the first to speak.
This should be "So Twilight how do you feel sugarcube after being rid of that thing?" Applejack asked.
This should be "I'm not well, but I am alive, I guess I do feel horrible after all that happened. I would not be surprised if you banish me to the Everfree Forest princess." said Twilight with a frown that never left her face and a few tears dropping on the bed that she is lying on.
This should be "Oh Twilight the symbiote was controlling you, I could never banish you to the Everfree Forest for something that you were doing against your own free will." stated Celestia .
This should be "But I destroyed nearly half of Ponyville." Twilight said.
This should be "But it was not you, the real you who was doing it Twily, the symbiote used you to do what it wanted, i know it deeply hurt you to have to remember that day at the wedding. Believe me when I say I will never forgive myself for what you went through this day, just remember that what you went through is over." stated Shining Armor giving Twilight a loving hug.
This should be "That was so beautiful." Said Rarity in the background now in tears with Pinkie and Fluttershy who were flowing with tears.
This should be "Oh boy." muttered Rainbow who just rolled her eyes, while Spike got a umbrella for such a moment giving it to Rainbow so she and Applejack can at least stay dry.
This should be "What about the symbiote princess?" asked Twilight worried that it may come back to get her.
This should be "We have taken it and locked away deep Canterlot where it won't do any harm." stated Celestia knowing that one day it may return but when that day comes they'll be ready.
This should be "Anyway it's time rebuild the damages and do tell the other citizens of Ponyville that it is safe to come back so they can help with to reconstruct Ponyville" stated Celestia as she was exiting the room.
This should be Location: Canterlot
This should be As a guard walks past the room containing the symbiote's prison, a red slime can be seen parting from the black slime making a cracking sound and the red slime exits out the room followed by a terrible psychopathic laugh.
This should be "So Twilight how do you feel after being rid of that thing, sugarcube?" Applejack asked.
This should be "Anyway it's time to rebuild the damages and do tell the other citizens of Ponyville that it is safe to come back so they can help with to reconstruct Ponyville" stated Celestia as she was exiting the room.