Would you desperately give everything you owned to get something back in return? Twilight sure would. After a fatal accident, Twilight is left without something very near and dear to her that she took for granted daily. Will she be able to cope with society's views afterwards? Only time will tell.
This is my first time ever writing a fic, so please, let me know what you think, or if anything is wrong.
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Chapters (1)
Now I'm wondering what it would have been like if she ended up being that teacher.
:O!!!!
WONDERFUL! LOVED IT :D
I noticed a few mistakes, but they are very minor. Wonderful story, almost made me cry ;'3
Cop oooooooooout.
For a minute, I had a feeling of a Groundhog Day reference,
but it turned out to be a plot twist. *phew!*
I wonder if that could be considered a "happy" ending... Compared to the alternative, yes. Nice story.
That......that was touching....
Absolutely despicable. I cannot believe what has just happened, it is absolutely atrocious.
HOW AM I NOT CRYING AT THIS? This was such a sweet and touching story, and I feel like a complete and total bitch for not crying! Seriously though, this story was amazing.
I like it.
Although the Inception comment was a little too obvious of a foreshadow. 
nice that was intresting ending and as someone said to me befor
WHAT A TWIST!!!
Great story. I could barley hold back my tears, an no slash? This just became one of my favorite stories, I can't tell you how glad I am that there was no slash.
Interesting concept, could use some polishing though.
Oh such a beautiful fic!
Very well written, a great story.
7.8 / 10
Nice story. Goes a bit fast but still, nice.
Holy crap. Mind blown. BUT EVERYTHING TURNED OUT BETTER THAN EXPECTED! YUS!
Was a good story, one that doesn't take 3423 hours to read, but not too short either. The only thing was you made sighs and what not in quotation marks like: " *sigh* I'll be okay "
I don't really like that, but it did not subtract from the story at all. Overall, a very good read.
I'm actually really impressed with how you portrayed Twilight's reaction to losing her horn.
She was in a bad accident, and now her horn is broken. Screaming, accusing, or freaking out won't change that, and Twilight had a clear enough head to realize that. She may also have just not fully let it sink in. Either way, it was exactly how I would see Twilight reacting.
I believe she's really good at keeping a cool head, working problems out in her mind rather than acting out of frustration. Too many people don't give her enough credit.
That was amazing.
Was loving the story, you could've done a ton with it, and you ended it like a fifth grader. This had the makings of an excellent story, and the ending was "and then I woke up and it was all a dream." I'm not bashing your writing style, the actual writing and pace of the story were wonderful, I was just hoping it would keep going.
Not a bad short story, I felt it could have used some expansion in parts and more focus on Twilights inner challenges of dealing with the problem. Overall, a good story and thank you for posting this to read.
you pulled the it was a dream card...
never pull that card.
aside from the cliche message (the title of your story) that ive heard countless times, the multiple grammar/spelling errors, and the annoying use of *sigh* and *gasp* (which are not even supposed to be used in writing. just say, twilight sighed.) aside from all that, its a touching story and isnt executed extremely well but isnt executed poorly.
in my personal opinion, pullin the dream card is just lazy, and there is only one instance in this story id forgive you for it. let me read your summary:
Would you desperately give everything you owned to get something back in return?
twilight didnt willingly give up anything to get something in return. if you ask me, the story should have revolved around the question you posed in your summary. how yoou pull that off is your decision. id like the story better if maybe celestia offers to fix twis horn but she jave to give something dear to her up, and refuses. then she wakes up, realizing what matters to her most.
or instead of just throwing teleportation tabs in there (when did ponies become high tech?) maybe dont, and give twi the decision between the only job she can do or living in ponyville with her friends. she either chooses teaching, spends a week, realizes how much she wants her friends back and wishes for a second chance and then wakes up, or decides to live in ponyville and realizes where true magic lies (in friendship)
anyway, im just boring you with speculation now, but the dream card is not my cup of tea.
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Well, I may or may not go through it one day and change a few things.
Though, I give my thanks for the nice comments.
Not bad, But please dont pull the dream card again. Those type of endings tend to ruin stories. I would probably say a 3/5
Very interesting story.
Sorry not being able to write something more critique-like... my brain hurts ATM.
Here we go:
There were a few spelling and grammar errors, nothing too serious.
I don't find anything too wrong with the ending, except the message. Thank goodness I'm not actually a freak! Instead, how about Twilight learns a lesson? The whole point of a story is to illustrate something that happened. As it is, Twilight will just go back to her life and nothing has changed.
Also, the story moved too fast and rushed through. I would know. Most of my stories do.