It has been about 7 months since The Great and Powerful Trixie took over Ponyville using the dark power of the Alicorn Amulet. Since then, Trixie has been trying to turn over a new leaf performing at a bar in Fillydelphia. Even though most of her fans have now ostracized her, she at least has a new place to stay, and some food to eat. Trixie wished her life would turn around for the better, but she just did not know how to go about it. After a twist of fate occurred by rescuing the princess of the night from the forest near her home, Trixie figured it was the perfect opportunity to seek what her power truly was, and how she can be just as useful as Princess Twilight Sparkle was for all of Equestria. This resolve to find out who she truly is will take Trixie on an adventure that she will never forget. Through the rigors of training, to finding a couple of lost magical artifacts, Trixie will have to endure the hardship of dealing with her past, and the struggles she faces internally when it comes to her ego and her bad habits which drive her potential friends away. Will she finally be able to prove not only to herself, but also to the rest of Equestria that she is truly the highest level unicorn? Bring along your adventure map, your laughs, and a few feels for this Great and Powerful ride you will not forget!
Interested. I'll read this after I finish up my work.
I want to read this, but I need to know how much gore is going to be in this story?
4475343 I also avoid gore stories, but seeing as this is a teen-rated, I don't think there will be too much. This story looks good, anyway, so I'll probably read it regardless.
Trixie is returning to Canterlot with Luna. That ought to be VERY interesting.
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4475343 I don't plan on having too much gore. Probably just cuts, minor gashes and minor blood loss, but there shouldn't be anything related to a blood-bath or slaughter-fest.
Okay. I like what I have read so far. I'm just wondering if Trixie is going to remember to tell Luna that there are two other artifacts that Pandora wants Trixie to claim before someone else does?
Hey, first off I want to say I like what you're doing. The premise of your story is the best thing in the world. Thank you so much for making this story and I hope you continue to write more chapters. That being said your dialogue is really clunky with exposition being belted out left and right when there is no reason. You seem to suffer form a problem I've seen in some writer where they will write stuff that either doesn't need explaining and you tell more the show. Take for example the time Trixie was worried about Luna for running off just the fact that Luna ran off is bad enough for her to chase after her we don't need to know about the brothers to know it is a bad thing. Or the time trixie picked up her saddle bag the reader is smart enough to know that trixie could carry magic supplies in her bag. The point is that You have a good story you just need to improve your ability to show not tell.
P.s. you don't need a prophecy for luna to have a student.
Interesting. I hope Ali'a isn't going to be more a hinderance than a helper.
this should be It couldn’t be her; why is she just lying here, she thought.
This should be "I need to rest however, so I’ll be heading to sleep.”
The reason for this change is because the word 'thy' is the archaic or dialect form of your, and so the reason for the change should be obvious now.
This story looks amazing! However, read my bio and follow the instructions therein to view what the fact that it is incomplete still after having been 5 months and 10 days makes me feel like, particularly the part in the clip where he says
Please tell me that you have plans for completing this story sometime in the future! The reason that I really like this story is because it is about time that Trixie's magical talent gets the recognition that it deserves! Just because it deals with illusions and fireworks and magical artifacts and not magic summoned from within, doesn't mean that she isn't powerful in her own right!
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thy end is now!!!!!!