I, DarkBunny, am a simple man of simple plans. By daytime a security guard for a lumber yard and by night a procrastinating author of horse words (author used lightly for my lacking in talent self).
When three young mares with different backgrounds in entertainment hear about a new gameshow, they enter, but not all is at it seems. Will The Great and Powerful Trixie, Vinyl Scratch (aka DJ Pon3), and Lyra Hearstrings win the contest to become celebrities, or will sinister forces derail the contest and threaten all of reality. Let's find out viewer.
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Ah, there we go. This is neat, but you've got some spelling errors, a few repetitions in the beginning (saying "marefriend" two sentences in a row, for example) and some of formatting errors.
Otherwise this has me hooked. The characters are well-portrayed, giving each of them their own kind of flavor, which makes the whole read more interesting. As far as the plot is concerned, this is a solid start, and I'm interested to see where it's going from here. Have a fave.
Interesting story. Survivor, but with more likeable characters. And also a vampire who doesn't seem to sparkle. Promising.
Though I'm a bit concerned that you're severely downplaying Trixie's capabilities here. She's a traveling performer, so she'd be very used to camping in the wilderness, and have a wide variety of minor spells to get by on. (In fact, she'd probably have a lot in common with Lyra in that way; a good point for them to bond over, maybe?) Also, any unicorn with basic training can make their horn light up (Snails could, and he's not exactly the brightest gem), so Trixie having to take over Lyra's light spell with some overcomplicated magibabble seems both redundant and insulting to her skill.
All things considered, promising. Hope to see more. Nice cover art, too.
4269707 I will keep that in mind for the future, I got the next chapter mostly finished, just need to clean up and run by my editorial staff again.
Interesting development. Not too much happening, but the girls are getting used to each other, and it's good to see that at least Trixie is making some concessions for respect. (Now if Lyra can do it too... girl doesn't need to get her face smashed again.)
Good to see some exposition on Trixie's magical capacity and general skills; I'm glad to see that you're putting thought into it. The idea that her family has exclusive magic spells is a nice touch. Did you borrow the 'Spellsight' concept from the Lunaverse, or was it an invention of your own? Also good idea to have Lyra's Light spell be something advanced to justify Trixie having difficulty with it. A spell that duplicates sunlight will be pretty darn useful against a vampire. Guess it's either that or Lyra learning the art of Hamon.
Looking good!
4318931 I didn't think too much about other works when I outlined what each character's skill set would be, but I did borrow a bit from the L!verse Trixie. However for Lyra I decided she would have a smattering of different powerful spells since she did go to Celestia's school. I actually had to look up what the art of Hamon was
Wow, Lyra and Vinyl are... well, 'complete bitches' springs to mind. Kinda overreacting, since Trixie doesn't really do much beyond acting her usual haughty self, while they threaten her with violence repeatedly. Not fostering any team spirit, honestly.
And Lyra gets to be a magical powerhouse while Trixie is a joke who can't win against a dentist without dumb luck. *sigh* I may be biased, but I feel rather disappointed. I'll hope for future chapters.
4324994 Actual Trixie fight next chapter, I get to flex what an Illusionist can do. Also Vinyl is currently in a state of "puberty", she is overly aggressive right now, but that will be changing soon. Lyra just earns her karma, and besides, there are much darker forces at work here, hopefully the next chapter will clear up any questions.
4325153 I really hope so, because this story is interesting so far. I just really hate when an author turns a useful character (Trixie or other) into a complete joke just for cheap guffaws. There's a lot of stories that treat Trixie as an utter buffoon, even though her season 1 appearance had her outwit three of the protagonists.
Looking forward to more.
4325231 As an avid D&D player, I have been waiting for a real duel to play with Trixie, and as you said, Colgate is an overglorified dentist, time magic or no. The thestral is a real opponent, and Trixie is pretty annoyed at this point with how her teammates have been treating her, she just hasn't taken her aggression out on them because of her past mistakes. Besides, Trixie is best pony so best pony gets first real fight.
4325290 Giggity! Now this warms my heart! Really looking forward to it!
Glad to hear that you have a plan. Apologies if I came across as whiny in my complaints.
4325314 It's all good, I have been downplaying Trixie. She messed up in the Magic Duel episode, and has been trying not to be as much of a show off, but by this point she is stressed and angry and a non-pony enemy just decided to show their hoof. Now I just need to figure out how many illusions it takes to put fear into the undead.
Remember how I was rather disappointed in the prior chapter because Trixie seemed to come off as a joke and a general punching bag? Well, this more than made up for it. I wholeheartedly approve. So rather than being "weak but skilled" with a very varied spell selection (which is Lyra's gig here, instead) she's got heavy-duty rituals from her family in addition to her illusions. Niiice. Comes off as quite competent indeed, even courageous.
Hum, Lyra's pretty chill with her blood-drinking pal, while at the same time taking every opportunity to talk smack about Trixie. It does make sense given past history and all, though now I can't help but wonder if there's a connection between Luna and the Lulamoon family (it comes up in a few fanfics) and Lyra just committed a nasty faux pas without thinking about it. Karma's a bitch, isn't it?
Editing nitpick: You forgot to close off the italics about roughly halfway in, and everything after that was italicized. May want to fix that.
Good story, still entertaining. Waiting for continuation. Also, if you need help editing, I'll gladly offer my services.
4632133 Amazing what a single / missing can do huh?
4632133 Also, if you want to help out shoot me a pm
So far, I'm absolutely loving this story. Months ago I searched up a bunch of stories for future reading material and saved them, and I'm very glad I finally got around to reading this one.
First, your portrayal of the characters are fun and interesting and I find them to be very well written. Trixie's my favorite at the moment, though I greatly enjoy your characterization of Lyra and Vinyl as well. Second, I'm particularly fond of your writing style: It's descriptive enough to give vivid images, yet focuses on action and keeps the story flowing. Seriously, just about every paragraph was a joy to read. And third, the idea of the story is appealing. It's an interesting setting and I'm eager to see where it goes next, especially concerning Vinyl's fate now that she's been infected.
As for this chapter in particular; yay Trixie. I'm always amazed when characters are able to escape from horrible, bleak situations in a way that's actually plausible, and this was no different. That's some seriously skilled illusion work going on there, and I don't doubt that Trixie would be able to do that.
I don't often read fan fiction, but stories like yours make me want to more often. It's lovely to find something so fun and well written. While there are occasional obvious typos or even an accidental repeated word once or twice, it's still easy to stay enchanted. I'd be very happy to see more of this. Good job!
4856756 Oh my, late response is late
, but thank you very much, and I hope that I don't disappoint. 
Love the story wasint what i exspected but still interesting. Whens the next chapter?
6087363 So, I had a major issue with my old housing arrangements wherein, my old laptop and all my old notes are effectively gone. I am working on rereading my story and rewriting up my outline and making notes. I also probably need to find new proofreaders and an editor. So on the way, but delayed bad.
I will murder you if you don't finish this
Actually, "scratch" that, I'm starnding you on that island
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I miss this story. Any updates on when it will be updated?
7647733 Yeah, I'm actually working on the next chapter, had a lot of trouble with trusting the wrong people at the wrong time which lost me all of my notes and the following three chapters. I'm finally able to sit down with a clear head again to go forward, just gotta get back a hold of my editor. So, soon, hopefully by Halloween.
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I think that would be a fate worse then death...
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Jesus Christ that is amazing news. This is a unique story, and I have unfortunately forgotten a lot of the details in the over two years since I last saw it. I thought you forgot about it and that the comment was a vain attempt to remind you. This is great, I can't wait.
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Hey, I'm not trying to sound rude or impatient here, but what is the ETA of the next chapter? You said hopefully by Halloween, but now that that has come to pass, I can't help but want some updates on the current status of the next chapter.
7691689 in the works, just have been busy with work and what not. Probably 2/3rds done with the chapter
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Ah, so another delay. Well, I suppose Valve time's a bitch.
So do you have a latest possible release date, at the slowest work rate, something to shoot to beat?
7692042 Life is great like that, no? Assuming my work schedule stays at it's current rate and the gods above don't smite me dead, no more then a week if my editor doesn't jump ship.
Real life is a pain. 
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Okay then, I'll hope for a week and expect it to come before Thanksgiving. I'm not exactly getting impatient... okay, yeah I am, but I mean you're getting me excited for this!
You promised a new chapter before Thanksgiving. It's January now, what happened?
7839163 Guess what, update incoming, I've got the next chapter finished and out to my editor. Will be up by weeks end.
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I literally just elbowed my bed so hard it made my fingers numb when I saw that. But please do the take as long to do the chapter after this one.
It has been so long since last update that I need to re-read the whole thing now. Let me do just that.
This is much more detailed than I remembered it being like two years ago when I first read it. I love this idea so much and it is nice to see it exploded like this.
Good. Now the action is starting. There was so much I forgot about this since I last read the thing.
I'v gotten better, writing for campaigns in D&D and such.
This feels like a Borderlands 2 reference.
7907314 Maybe
Okay, caught up. Now I can read the new chapter.
Damn you. You owe me three hours of sleep. Maybe I can take that out of the three years it took to get this chapter out.
In all seriousness, holy fucking shit. This has to be one of the most interesting stories on this site. Only once before have I been so invested in a story that I was itching this bad to find out what happens next, but thankfully, that story was just finished about a month before I started reading it. Now with all these new plot developments and God damn terrifying implications, you clearly have me hooked. You have thrown a fourth dimensional meat hook at my face and dragged me in and you can't just leave me hanging here.
So when do you think the next update will come?
Please don't let this sit static for another year. Push out an update before April, if you can. This story is great and I don't want to see it die.
This chapter was an unexpected, but welcome surprise. Great work.
So, any hope of an update?
You know, I can't speak for anyone else, but I certainly haven't forgotten about this gem.
Has it really been four years since I last commented here? Time flies. This story still tickles my brain every now and then. I hope you're doing well, author.