One time Fluttershy woke up and she was a alicorn. She didn't question it since she was used to surrprises in the path of life. She just got up and she went on wit her day. she fed the animals and she left. she went into town.
Flutershy wanted to sea her friend Cloudkicker. They was friends since back in 6 grade at pegasis school.
"Hey Cloudkicker!!!!!!!" screamed fluttershy. But she wasn't no where to be seen.Then she ran away and cried since she missed her friend. Then she found a mysterious note. it was full of mystery.
Fluttershy picked up the note. She looked at it. It was mysterious, but it was just some guy's shopping list. It said "i kidmapped your friend lol Love bad guy." Fluttershy ate it.
She ran around looking for her friend. But she couldn't find it. She screamed and cried and flew. She used her new magic with a teal aura like her eye balls. She picked up rocks and stuff to look for her friend. Finally she ran down and cried and cried.
Then a pony person came up. It was Bab Seed. Fluttershy didn't know about the apple family since she wasn't related in it. But she didn't like Babs either.
"Hi Fluttershy" said Babs. She was being a bully.
Fluttershy cried and ran away. She hated the orange ones the most. Especially after Applejack and Scootaloo and Rainbow Dash ganged up on her earlier and stole her shoe. Now she hated orange people and Rainbow Dash.
Fluttershy ran and ran and cried. She got stopped when her legs were tired and she had to stop. So she stopped. She sat down in the cool grass. She suddenly saw a bucket full of soap suds. It was dumb. She kicked it.
"Haha. I guess you could say I... kicked the bucket."
Fluttershy laughed and laughd and she cried because she made a funny pun. Then she got up and started crying because she missed her friend Cloudkicker. She cried.
Then a rock fell. It fell in the overturned bucket with the soap suds everywherre. Flutter stopped crying because she was surprised. She was scared. The rock looked like Maud's pet Boulder. He didn't do much, but he was nice. Fluttershy poked the rock. She licked it.
"Hm.... metamorphic." she whispered.
She kicked the rock when another one fell down. Fluttershy looked up from where it fell. She saw a masked mane-iac. It was the mysterious Mare-do-well!
Fluttershy screamed and flied up to meet the mysterious man. But it was in his pegasus form so she flew away. Fluttershy screamed again and she flied up and chased him but mare doo well did a sonic rainboom and Flutershy couldn't catch up. Fluttershy screamed and cried and fell in the air. She smacked the ground and died almost instantly, but she was okay.
Fluttershy cried and got up. "I'll get you" she screamed at Mar-dowell. Then she past out from the streess of the situation.
Fluttershy got up a while laters and she saw the sky around her. It was dark like night. She got up and made a flashligt or a torch for british people with her horn. It made a brilliant light. She suddenly saw Applejake and Rainbow and Scootaloo and BAbs again. They laughed and ran around her in circles. "Ew stop" screamed Fluttershy. scootaloo was a defect since she can't even fly.
"Haha Futtershy you're stupid" they mocked like a mockingjay. Fluttershy felt anger. Then appleapple grabbed her shoe and stole it again. she licked it real good and threw it behind a bush but Fluttershy didn't see where she threw it at the bush so she didn't know where it went nd she cried. Then Fluttershy remembered that she were a alicorn and she had alicorn magic. She had a x-ray abolity and she could use it to find the shoe! Fluttershy turned on the xray from her horn. She looked around and saw applejacks organs and saw that Applejack was pregnant.
Fluttershy looked at some bushes and found teh shoe. She picked it up and laughed at the bad guys and they cried and they left. Then Fluttershy smiled. She put her shoe in her flutter-backpack and she went home.
After Fluttershy was home she remembered the bad guy, Mare Do-well. Fluttershy gasped. It all made sense now. Mare-Do-well was a bad guy, so obviously he stoled Cloudkick from her! Fluttershy ran out of her cottage and ran to the hill where MareDoWell was spotted.
She ran there. She saw the hill and she saw Mare Do well sitting on a rock. He was probably sleeping. Fluttershy sneaked up like a villager sneaking on a bug in Animal Crossing. She smacked Maredo Well and he woked up.
"Ow, why'd you do it?" screamed Mare Do well. Fluttershy screamed. She recognized that voice, dude! It was none other than her old enemy Rainbow Dash.
Fluttershy screamed a battle cry and ripped off the guy's mask. She saw Rainbow dash's rainbow hair and blue skin. Fluttershy growled like a flutterbear and smacked rainbow 5 whole times. "Ow" said Rainbow. She cried and ran away. "I'm sorry I stealed your shoe" screamed Rainbow. She flew off.
Fluttershy didn''t accept the pology. She stood there and stared. Then she used her magic to teleport in front of Rainbow. She stopped her. Rainbow screamed and fell down, down to the earth. She passed out but Fluttershy spit on her and she waked up.
"Rainbow where did you hide my buddy Cloud Kicker???" said Fluttershy.
"oh yeah, I kidnapped her. I did it because I was jealous of her. She was friends with you but I wasn't because I always stole your shoe. I said I'm sorry about it. Let it go, man."
Fluttershy grabbed a knife and aimed it at rainbow like it was a gun or something even though it wasn't.
"Where did you hide her???!" said Fluttersy.
"I put her in a cave at Mount Evercrest." choked Rainbow. She had a coughing fit and then she died.
Fluttershy threw the knife and flied off to Mount Evercrest. She saw a big cave and went in it. There were some bones and a big, fat cave. There was a cage. Fluttershy broke it with her flutter-strength and Cloudkicker came out.
"Fluttershy I missed you so much" screamed Cloudkicker. "Why are you alicorn though?"
Fluttershy responded with a kind word. "I don't know. I woked up and I just had a magic horn. That's just how the cookie crumbles sometimes I guess."
They hugged and flew back to Fluttershy's house to re-cooperate. They drank some tea of the good kind.
"Fluttershy, Rainbow is a bad man and she kidnapped me. She did it because she was jealous, Flutters." said cloudkicker.
"I know" said Fluttershy. "But Rainbow can never be my friend ever, even though she changed her ways after stealing my shoe way back in the day. Grudges show you how to be. Forgiveness is for the weak, Cloudkicker. Always remember."
Cloudkicker nodde her weak head and fell asleep on the floor since she was tired. Fluttershy kissed her head since Cloudkicker was really her child. Then Fluttershy went to bed, ready for a new morning of alicorn magic.
Just reading the title and the description...
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4436021 dont judge by cover of a bok :/
Stop what?
Who is her friend?
Why does her friend need to be saved?
Why did the bad guy get kidnapped?
Is her friend the bad guy?
UMMM... Yeah... What.... Is This... So much Improper grammmer... Mind CANT hanDLE IT.... GoInG to ezxpoldessssss XD
Yeah I did the improper grammer on purpose above BTW. But still... Instant dislike.
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You should change your screen name to KaiDawn. That'd be hilarious.
4436166 Yeeeaaahhh no.
Sorry, but really.
Alicorns OC or even changing a pony from the show into a alicorn....
N. O.
4436075
In this instance, the cover is a very good indication of the contents. Just reading your short bio, I can tell you that I wouldn't read any of your stories.
4436188 o sorry :(
4436169
Too late, someone else already did it. Too bad for you.
*sighs*
Were to begin,I mean I know your probably thinking "oh alicornication is so lolz and aeesome sauce!!!!!1!!!!one!!" but get this RealityCheck did it better, his characters are more developed, his story makes sense and his fiction has always had brilliant grammar.
Your first chapter needs to be reworked from the ground up, I would suggest visiting Obsolence or Wander D to see if they can salvage it, after that if you produce any new chapters for this or other fiction, take them to someone who doesn't have the grammatical skill of a potato like Andrew Joshua talon or someone like that
Sincerely
Cataclysm
I'm depressed that you have more followers than me Life is so unfair.
Faust damn, no offense, but this is one of the worst stories that I have read...
4436438 I never wanted to do it...
4436770 well i do have better stories than thiss :\\
hey Yeah guys BTW if you really didnt like this story (which i Know alot of ppl didn't )
you can always check out my stories. i hAVe my School of love series and my Fallout Equepstia story that's pretty good.
thanx
4436075 Actually he judged by the cover of the book. ( No offense, kidding!)
Anyway, um... This story... I don't... Uh... *Face explodes*
My ghost: Well, this story was... Um... Well... *My ghost face explodes*
The ghost of my ghost: I give up!
(That was a joke btw, I have nothing against you)
I'm just gonna be serious about this now.
First of all, in the entirety of MLP, Cloudkicker is never mentioned as Fluttershy's friend, unless you're going about with the headcannon of The Life and Times of a Winning Pony... (I don't know if they stop being friends, I never finished it :P)
Second of all, Bab's appearance was... Odd, to say the least... Maybe if you made it so Babs insulted Fluttershy, and then you said she was being a bully, but saying "Hi Fluttershy" Is not bullying, sorry :/
And another thing, the scene where Fluttershy shouted out for Cloudkicker. Fluttershy doesn't shout. End of story.
And the alicorn-hood... She wasn't surprised because she was used to surprises? Unfortunately, having a HORN isn't that small of a surprise!
Overall I give it... A negative number out of ten. -10/10
It could use a little work, but I enjoy reading AU scenarios where ponies are turned into alicorn. But not in Canon. That's why it's called Alternate Universe.
I hope you guys aren't srs, 100% sure this is a trollfic
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We both know that's a filthy fucking lie.
hey guys dont's be posting any more rude comments anymore. the borny communmity is about love and tolerate and we should not argue over didfferent things
(mainly pointed twards New Dawn and formerly Know as Q)
I don't mind the fact that Fluttershy is supposed to become Alicorn here so much there was no real depth or story to it.. And I have a bit of advice on making such stories like this. When you make stories that are going have a subject that every brody is divided on.... You got to write the kind of story where even the haters can find little to no fault. In other words it's gotta be a good read...:
heyso yknow buddies???? welk i kno ppl been sayin that cloudkcikers not evenb friends with fluttershy and fluttwrshy wont yell and stuff but this is alternat universe for a reason duh :PPP
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