Mourning.

Well...
I'm dead.
Nothing I could have done to prevent my own death.
And yet... and yet, my killer is somewhere else. The little parasite was far, far away form my grasp.
I don't want justice. The Nightmare already got that.
No, I want REVENGE.

Chapters (5)

Good · 8th May 2014 · 1,162 words
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Mid · 10th May 2014 · 1,167 words
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Past · 17th May 2014 · 1,171 words
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Weird · 21st May 2014 · 1,176 words
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Dark · 23rd May 2014 · 1,136 words
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Aerigim

Aerigim #1 · May 9th, 2014 · · · Good ·

Good sir, you have my attention with this description.

Aerigim

Aerigim #2 · May 9th, 2014 · · · Good ·

"Wit that" the only thing I found wrong, kudos to you for a nice set up of atmosphere. I look forward to the rest of this story with intrigue, anticipation and a box of cereal.

Zaralann

Zaralann #3 · May 9th, 2014 · · · Good ·

Interesting...

Death2205

Death2205 #4 · May 9th, 2014 · · · Good ·

This is good

Rhodesm96

Rhodesm96 #5 · May 9th, 2014 · 1 · · Good ·

Awesome start! One thing that bugged me though:

"So, my BLSFF is going off with Spike?

What does BLSFF stand for? Best Little Sister Friend Forever? I think it ought to be "LSBFF."

MonolithiuM

MonolithiuM #6 · May 9th, 2014 · 5 · · Good ·

4363374 Best Lesbian Slut Fuck Forever, obviously.

Rhodesm96

Rhodesm96 #7 · May 9th, 2014 · 2 · · Good ·

4363397 How on Earth did I miss that?

bigred11

bigred11 #8 · May 9th, 2014 · · · Good ·

yes this reeks of shenanigans

salmoncolor

salmoncolor #9 · May 9th, 2014 · · · Good ·

MOAR!!! GLaDOS demands it!

Zaralann

Zaralann #10 · May 10th, 2014 · 1 · · Mid ·

Interesting!

Dubious

Dubious #11 · May 10th, 2014 · · · Mid ·

Continue.

Xzaves

Xzaves #12 · May 11th, 2014 · · · Mid ·

4367253 Author: "Don't tell me what to do!" *Cancels story*

killer007

killer007 #13 · May 17th, 2014 · · · Past ·

more please

TopHatsAndTea

TopHatsAndTea #14 · May 17th, 2014 · · · Past ·

Now THIS I like, this is a great take on the "ghostly human in Equestria" idea in my opinion. Grammar's great, the story flows nicely, and you've built up the character of John really well. especially loving the punny chapter titles too. In all honesty, I've tried to find something I didn't like about it, so this is more like a critique than a massive gushing of praise, but equally in all honesty I couldn't find anything to complain about. Well done, sir, I shall be watching this with great anticipation of what is to come.

Zaralann