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This story is a sequel to Trixie's New Big Red Life
Sequel to Trixie's New Big Red Life; highly recommend you read the prequel first. Trixie's life has been pretty good in Ponyville, new friends, stunt off competitions with Rainbow Dash, a relationship with the big red strong work stallion. Things are looking up; but when Big Macintosh leaves the farm with a mysterious mare, Trixie vows to get to the bottom of it. With Pinkie Pie by her side Trixie will find her answers!
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This... This right here was too funny.
So many times I just felt like 
It was all well and fine till a company that makes paper towels bought the photos from Photo Finish and made a deal to use Mac's image as their new company mascot.
At least the royalties keep rolling in like gang busters. 
Standard storyline, but the way you wrote it made me forget that in an instant. Just out of curiosity, was the stunt off competition thing inspired by Rainbooms and Royalty? If not, then it's a happy coincidence
While it's a little sad that you won't be continuing this, at least I can expect more from you in the future
And to be honest, I thought Photo Finish was a dude as well when I first saw her on the show
(Quite new to the fandom at the time
)
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4350999 Rainbooms and Royalty??
Sorry never heard of it
But hey, happy coincidence
lol, good followup story. You should make a whole series.
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Nah I'm ready to move on to something else. Whether this ship sinks or sails is out of my hands now
Glad you enjoyed it though
Haha! I really loved this! Well done, man.
The only other thing I feel I need to mention is that you need an editor. I mean, you have the wording almost perfect, the flow is outstanding, and the dialogue is almost perfect. The only thing you really need to improve on is punctuation, specifically your use of commas. I counted over 50 missed commas! Also, you constantly used a semicolon (;) when you should have used a dash (–). There were also some technical grammar mistakes, such as sentence fragments, but that's just getting nit-picky. I think you should also get an editor to prevent hate from the Grammar Nazi's...and because it is good to have a story this good have perfect grammar to go along with it.
~ Michael A.
4573185 Naw man. I just write for fun
Grammar Nazis are going to come after me no matter what i do. But I won't let them bother me
Too adorable. Too good
4941925 aw thank you
Well this was a very nicely written story, to be honest.
I was immersed in it enough to gloss over any inconsistencies in your grammar. (I don't like being a Grammar Nazi, but we do what we must FÜR DIE GRAMMATIK!)
However. (And it's a pretty big 'however')
You inserted an Author's Note in the middle of the story seemingly justifying your choice of words. I don't know or particularly care (sorry, but it's true
) about the backstory behind that, but for me that AN nearly wrecked my enjoyment of the otherwise very well written story. 
It's just a suggestion , so please don't feel as if you must MUST MUST follow it.
Maybe you could add an asterisk in place of that AN and move it towards the other AN at the bottom?
Regardless, this story was-despite my previous thoughts
- very enjoyable. 
As such: thanks very much for writing it!
And now I am envisioning a manly Big Mac added to the Friendship is Manly videos. It won't be animated by me though, I draw stick figures.
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Even my brain hurt when she talks like that
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Nope! Her character tag is *2* words!
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Trixie needs an honest relationship to keep her sanity. lol