Being a bestselling author, A.K. Yearling gets more than enough fan mail. She gets letters every day from adoring readers and publishers. She'd be sick of it, if every once in a while, she didn't get a letter that she actually likes.
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What abot HK replying to Spike and show Twilght's and Dashes refashions.
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Well, this was sort of intended to be a one-shot. I've already gotten roped in to fleshing out some of my other one-shots... I suppose that should tell me I need to do a better job in the first place, huh?
But I really do want to keep this one a one-shot. That way A.K.'s reaction is up to the reader's imagination.
As for
and 
, I feel like they would be part of the group that Spike mentioned, who would get mad at him for his opinion.
Nice! Spike's appraisal of her writing style sounds like just the sort of thing Rainbow Dash would get pulled into. Conversely it makes me think Twilight's willing to read just about anything on paper, which doesn't sound too far off. Spike letter was very well written, although it sounds a bit more authoritative and adult than Spike as we know him today. If he'd claimed 6 or 7 years living in the library then I'd have an easier time buying it. Who knows, though, I could see him putting a lot of time into this. He is, after all, attempting to walk the fine line of constructive criticism with a best selling author.
I was really hoping to see a something like a two-line reply from AK, especially after the synopsis claimed that she liked his letter.
I'll shelve this one under "Favorites"
This was pretty good, but it needs to be fleshed out a bit more. Perhaps some reactions from Yearling or Twilight or
Pretty good, apart from some grammatical and spelling errors... Really want to hear Yearling's reply....
This is pretty interesting, but it feels like you could take it much further. Maybe the errors you're subconsciously missing happen to be the potential you've yet to reap?
Spike represents the constructive critics you see often on this site, and I like that. A.K Yearling's response would be most intriguing.
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Ugh. Grammatical and spelling errors? Would you mind pointing out a few? They are the bane of my existence.
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You know, I really wanted this to be a one-shot, but if people keep asking, I suppose I'll be convinced to add Yearling's reply, against my better judgement.
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Just look at that glorious mustache. Surely no other baby dragon would be capable of such a distinguished feature.
I had Spike write that way, even if he doesn't speak like that to his friends, because he hangs around Twilight and other professionals a lot and most likely knows how to speak politely and tactfully to one of his superiors. Also, I see him as a lot more mature than others his age.
4354576 I wouldn't force anything, it's just a suggestion. I might be completely wrong here, but I can still sense a way you could delve further. Only do what you're sure of.
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I may as well take a shot at it. I do have some ideas for a reply; the only problem is it would be rather brief. And, hey, I could always do with more practice in writing.
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Good job!
I'd like to see Yearling's response to Spike's letter.
i've never given thought to authors using unnecessary vocabulary. you've made me paranoid now.
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I've gotten all paranoid about my writing now also! Curses!
Spike had a very interesting critique there.
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Bit of a mouthful at that last part, try to break it up with one or two commas here.... like between "advanced material" and "make them feel" so it becomes "they're reading advanced material, to feel smarter when they're really not.". Or ", to make them feel smarter, when they're really not."
You don't have to add the "really". It sounds like he's unsure, and unconfident, and not too committed. If you remove the "really", it sounds better, "not like it as much as I could."
Same as the one before, but this one is pretty minor, so it can stay...or you can say "don't really," rather than "really don't," sounds more neutral...
As far as spelling goes, I looked it over again, and I can't really see any misspelt words, I guess either I was wrong, or you probably already corrected them. If I was wrong, then I'm sorry.
Hope that this helps....
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Yes!!!! Sweeet!! Thank You!!!!
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I tried to fix those mistakes. I did put the "really"s in there to make him sound uncertain on purpose, but on second thought it doesn't quite fit. And I don't remember going back and fixing any misspelled words, but I might have. Either way, no harm, no foul, and thanks for the input!
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It's not necessarily the use of advanced words that Spike and I are talking about here; it's more of the context. If someone writes a sloppy story and then throws fancy words in there just for the heck of it, it doesn't flow right, whereas a well-organized and executed piece of writing sounds perfectly fine with a little extra spice.
I suppose the question now is how Daring reacts to this: does she grumble about little smart aleck drakes, or does she throw her hooves into the air and shout "Finally, somepony with a decent critique!"
Also, loved it. Very well done. Now, if you'll excuse me, I have to go make sure I'm not making the same mistakes that Spike pointed out...
People are so fixated on saying that Daring Do is real ruins the character and lessens the setting, that they completely IGNORE Yearling, and how she gives what's otherwise a Indiana Jones cliche DEPTH. And the idiocies she has to deal with as a writer as she's given "suggestions" by her publisher and fans, nearly none of them knowing the truth that she basically is writing fictionalized versions of her own adventures. This holds a FREAKING METRIC TON for potential beautiful dramatic irony, yet I almost never see it used.
These tips Spike talks about could prove useful for my own writings, thanks.
This not only work as as a fine short story, but even better as a polite warning about what to try and avoid in one's OWN work. Really, if there was a way to get everyone writing for the site to read this I'd be delighted. Many don't need it, but some of us do. Great, great work.
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You guys asked. I finally got around to it. A.K.'s response can be found here.
That was very sincere, and heartfelt! I love it!
Have an upvote, my friend.