Legend of The Crystal Ball

by SuperPinkBrony12

Chapter 10

I woke up the next morning and went through the same rotuine. After I had breakfast I immediatly headed for my booth. Nopony was there yet so I wasted no time. I put on my gypsy outfit and hung a sign saying that Madame Pinkie Pie had something important to say. It wasn't long after that before ponies started coming to me.

Just like Zecora had told me I made sure to show everypony that I couldn't really predict the future. Luckly for me nopony seemed the least bit upset with me, not even The Mayor. Heck she even apologized to me for being so demanding and she even said that perhaps someday I could run for mayor myself, of course we had a good laugh at that, there are some things I'm just not cut out for and polotics is one of them.

After all that was over I was finally able to take down that booth I had set up. I took off the gypsy outfit and gave it to Rarity, I told her she could do whatever she wanted with it because I was done with it.

With the fortune telling thing finally behind me the ponies who had gathered left to go about thier usual business. Twilight was the last one to leave and before she did she said "You know Pinkie Pie, if you had told me a week ago that you could make everypony in ponyvillie believe that you could predict the future I would've likely laughed and said that would never happen. But now perhaps if you had said that it would have been the one prediction you made that actually came true."

And with that she left for her home, I guess she was going to reshelf the whole library again. I was about to go my own way as well when my stomach growled. I laughed and started running towards Twilight shouting "Hey Twilight wait up!" Why did I do that you ask? I did that so I could see if she had any plans for lunch, cause there were still some questions I wanted to ask her, like wheter she actually had believed at one point that I could see the future.

The End

Comments

[SuperPinkBrony12]

And with this I have offically ended my first fanfic. Sorry if it was kind of meh.

I'll be taking a break now at least until Season 3 premieres next week.

[SuperPinkBrony12]

1676509 Well I'll admit I did make a lot of mistakes but then this was my first fanfic, I have improved somewhat since than.

[Snapple Jack]

Well this doesn't sound familiar in the slightest.

Anyway, good job on your first fic and may there be many more in the future.

[SuperPinkBrony12]

1854985 I've already completed three more and the fifth fic is in progress.

I've also planned out to about my 15th fanfic, which includes crossovers with "Dr. Weird", "Transformers The Movie" and "Ape Escape" as well as some padded ponies stories and just general slice of life stories.

[I love you Dashie]

I know this was your very first story, but like I said, I'm gonna go through all your stories and tell you the pros and cons Even though I don't like critiquing and want to say everypony's story is good. I'm sure most, if not all of these pros and cons have been said at one point by somepony else
Cons: some minor incomplete sentences, punctuation problems, starting new paragraphs for seperate speakers. I also feel like you were using the fourth wall thing in order to make it seem like it wasn't fast paced. That's just how I felt. Maybe that wasn't your intention, but I dunno
Pros: I felt as if I was playing the story through my head like an episode. If I'm able to do that with a story, I usually enjoy reading it! Story structure's pretty good, Pinkie Pie personality is spot on (but I'll probably expect that in most of these stories with Pinkie Pie. Your name after all is superpinkbrony12 ).
There we are. Off to Big Macintosh's Day Off

[SuperPinkBrony12]

3301221 Wow, that's probably the nicest review I could've gotten for something that even I feel is fairly bad.

[I love you Dashie]

3302906
Ahaha trust me. There's a lot more bad stories than this or my one-shotters

[SuperPinkBrony12]

3303625 You really think so huh? Well I guess the old saying's true "You're your own worst critic."