Gem Manifestation

Contains spoilers for Inspiration Manifestation!

After Twilight asks about the exact wording of the Inspiration Manifestation spell, Spike is somehow able to use it.

It's not as hectic as you may think.

Written for Equestria Daily's Writer's Training Grounds.

Edited by memphisgurl and RaylanKrios.

Tagged random due to humor, but not enough for the comedy tag.

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Darth Redbeard

Darth Redbeard #1 · May 5th, 2014 · · ·

Pony mob

LoneUnicornWriter

LoneUnicornWriter #2 · May 5th, 2014 · · ·

I think this is a really well written story, especially for its genre. Great job in short. Here's my full say on this story here >>> Link To Review

Dragon Spire

Dragon Spire #3 · May 5th, 2014 · 1 · ·

Replace the word "Beast" with "Drake" and it'll sum this up.

Pump It Up

Pump It Up #4 · May 5th, 2014 · 1 · ·

4342501
Thanks!

It's pretty cool that you got a Tumblr.

Fluttercheer

Fluttercheer #5 · May 6th, 2014 · · ·

It's an interesting idea you go there with, but this story could need some more work.
Many elements on it feel very put on, like Applebloom that plays a role in the story, but doesn't really contribute anything.
That's not necessarily a bad thing, but you should describe the whole part where she is there more.
In the way you wrote it, the story doesn't do any effort to make it not feel like that Applebloom was there for a moment and then away again, only because you simply wanted to have her in the story.
It also doesn't make sense that Twilight sends Applebloom away suddenly, despite that she wanted to get her the book she looks for just seconds before.
And that Twilight talks to Celestia and Luna also doesn't make a real sense for the story, since this didn't lead to anything.
It's not a completely bad story, but it feels quite rushed the way it's written.
You should elaborate it more and give it a complete workover.

Geoice