It's hard to call how much you're going to like a pony until after you've dated them for a while. But it's a special kind of confusion when you don't even know if you're into mares, stallions or both.
From the beginning, my feelings for Fluttershy were genuine, and I really, honestly thought I could make it work. But after finding out the truth - and telling her in the calmest way possible we had to break up - I unearthed a demon I never knew she had. It was like looking at a completely different pony.
Unfortunately, I didn't get to tell her the whole message.
Not only will I have to face it again, but I'm gonna have to find out exactly what it is. I'm her best friend, after all.
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I honestly enjoyed this fic and I cant fault you at all for this. keep up the good work for any future fic you write! This has to be favourited so it can be read again.
-Frost
4306242 Thank you very much, sir/madam. I strive for quality, even if my ideas don't seem so interesting.
This was so much better than I predicted when I started reading this.
I thought I would be reading one of those stories that has a couple break up but tell it like it happened a while ago, then they would get back together again and be happy. As much as I love to have them be together again, I'm glad you had them break up in not only for realistic and natural reason, but you made them stay that way. No complicated situations, no love rival, big mistake made by any of the characters, it was just them, in a house, calm explanations, brief but effective use of anger and heartbreak and I new idea of Fluttershy's character. Seemingly simple but not something I see many people try do.
In a strange sense you made the break up seem like they were getting together again, just a small special part of them did and that makes me happy.
I really hope that not too many people ignore this story because of unshipping, too many people that write unships do it purely because they wanna break up a couple they don't like and ship a couple they do like, I find that really unfair and annoying as hell.
Anyways, well done, a very decent read you wrote
I don't know how I feel about this. Seeing a fic where Fluttershy and Rainbow Dash break up but don't get back together just doesn't sit well with me.
4307314 I truly appreciate your feedback. It's what makes writing so worth it.
I don't really like shipping characters unless I can do something weird with it. In this case, my goal wasn't specifically to unship them, but to see how strong a bond they had with each other, and how willing Fluttershy was to let go of her past pains for her best friend.
Again, this started out with the roles reversed, but Fluttershy seemed more interesting as the angry one. It's also not very common (at least from my perspective) to see a Rainbow Dash ship where she's the straight one.
I have yet to write anything popular, so that sucks for me. So far, this one has gotten the most attention in the shortest amount of time.
Your analysis was wonderful and it gave me a lot to reflect on. Thank you.
Experience from a friend: When sadness is the only thing you feel, you get pretty scared of losing that, too. Sadness all the time is still an emotion, as opposed to total numbness.
This made me burst out into tears. I get really connected to these stories. 10/10 ponies. Great job! :D
4321004 Thank you very much! Though I don't mean to make people cry
It's rare to see a Flutterdash that ends with a breakup and it is even more rare to see one done well. This is one those that was written pretty well. Though it almost sounds like there's a chance Rainbow wants to be with her, it's most likely they'll be just be very close friends but nothing more.
Still, it was a good read anyway.
4324721 Thank you. This isn't exactly something I'm gonna continue or keeping making sequels for. I left the ending pretty open, yet the resolution was very definite: Rainbow Dash had to stop dating Fluttershy or risk breaking her heart. She just didn't want mares, but she wasn't proactively aware of it. There was sense of emptiness in the end and I'm not sure if I liked that, but the experience was important for Fluttershy. I just wish I hadn't rushed it like I did because her understanding side would've been more believable.
Very interesting story. Instead of it ending on a purely happy note, it came to a rather bitter-sweet ending. I enjoyed this story very much. Well done to you sir/madam.
“No!” I yelled. “Fluttershy, you’re putting words in my mouth! I never, ever said you weren’t enough! I just found out I was into stallions, not mares.
In another universe, Rarity and Fluttershy from the Listen, Language, and Lust trilogy are disagreeing with where youre going with this, Dash
Not a bad read I must say.