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  • T Besides the Will of Evil

    A shadow from the deep past returns to threaten Equestria, along with all the world. Can Twilight Sparkle and her friends be a light in the dark?  · Jetfire2012
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  • T Besides the Will of Evil

    A shadow from the deep past returns to threaten Equestria, along with all the world. Can Twilight Sparkle and her friends be a light in the dark?
    98,960 words · 3,295 views  ·  482  ·  13 · gore
  • E Nightmare State of Mind

    Welcome you poor, you flawed, you hopeless, you inadequates- welcome to the Queendom of Nocturne!
    11,542 words · 1,351 views  ·  204  ·  8
  • E The Sun Never Sets

    In old Equestria, a new power sits upon the throne, and new secrets are veiled from the light of day.
    4,390 words · 880 views  ·  117  ·  5

Blog Posts6

  • 1w, 6d
    The Mane Six (Plus One) & Character Attention

    One of the things I'm finding out in writing Besides the Will of Evil is that it's much harder to write for seven main characters than it is to write for three.  With It's a Dangerous Business, Going Out Your Door, I only really had to worry about half of the Mane Six; those of you who recall the story will remember that Twilight, Pinkie, and Fluttershy were barely heard from over the course of the adventure.  Rarity, Dash, and AJ took up the bulk of the action, and they developed into a tightly knit trio, bouncing off each other well and becoming a satisfying matrix of character interaction.

    In Will of Evil, though, I have all six of them to deal with.  Then there's Spike, who's very much a main character as well.  And Celestia and Luna have major supporting roles; with them are the many, many deer, ponies, and other creatures among my long list of original characters.  We've also dwelt on Trixie's time with Reiziger, who himself gets no small amount of spotlight, and we've even ranged afield to see what's going on in the Crystal Empire.  This isn't a story about a journey, but in crisscrossing Equestria several times, I feel as though it's covered more ground, and it's certainly explored more characters.

    I confess, then, that I've found it difficult to balance everybody at times.  Obviously, the Mane Six are the biggest characters, and they are all equally main characters.  Some, though, have proved more equal than others.  The middle of the story has very much been the domain of Twilight, Dash, and Rarity, with a strong second effort from Applejack.  I've dealt modestly with Fluttershy, and Pinkie I have accidentally neglected.  To some degree this is unavoidable due to the way I have the story planned out.  However, I shall continue trying to include all six of them (plus Spike) as equally as I can.

    It's funny- I've never read George R.R. Martin's A Song of Ice and Fire series, but even so, I've developed a respect for him over the course of writing Will of Evil.  It's no easy thing to juggle so many characters, all of them with their own motivations and personalities.  I hope I've done a decent job so far, and I hope for constant improvement to come.

    In particular, Pinkie and Fluttershy will both get their moments to shine.  In fact, in the end they may make all the difference.

    6 comments · 128 views
  • 9w, 2d
    Songs

    Songs play an essential part of My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic, and don't let anyone convince you otherwise.  After all, they've been part of the show since the second episode gave us "Giggle at the Ghosty."  Some have been great ("Raise This Barn"), some have been fun ("Winter Wrap-Up"), and some are merely okay ("Big Brother Best Friend Forever").  However, it's undeniable that music is vital to what gives FiM its charm.

    In this spirit, I've never been afraid to throw singing into my stories.  When my work gets somewhat grim and dark, songs shine through the moody atmosphere like a searchlight piercing the fog, reminding us that in the Ponyverse, love prevails, hope is rewarded, and friendship has genuine magical power.  Songs are expressions of devotion (Applejack singing "Shady Grove"), of grief ("The Lament for Gil-Galad"), and of good humor (the circus ponies' song).  Even Reiziger, terrible villain that he is, gets in on the act with his response to Gil-Galad's lament.  If you thought he enjoyed that, you're right; he was in supreme command of the situation, every variable under his control, and what better way to express that confidence than through song?

    So there's more singing to come.  Reiziger may even get another song.  Cadence has a song, many chapters away.  And there may be a reprise of one of the show's great songs.  Stay tuned.

    What's your favorite song in the show?

    10 comments · 180 views
  • 12w, 1d
    Reiziger's Sounding Board

    At this point in Besides the Will of Evil, it's fair to start wondering why Reiziger continues to keep Trixie around.  After all, it can be argued that she's outlived her usefulness.  She did just get named his High Priestess, but realistically, that's a duty that could have fallen to one of his new changeling servants.  Why persist in allowing her beside him?

    Some of it can be chalked up to Reiziger's previous comments about loyalty.  He does genuinely reward loyalty, at least at this point in his ambitions.  Trixie had multiple opportunities to obey the unsettling feelings in her heart and stop helping him while he was still a 'guest' of the circus, but she persisted.  She was the first of his new servants, and though she has had some misgivings in her heart, in practice her loyalty has not wavered- so neither has his.

    However, the more I write the two of them together, the more I begin to realize that one of Reiziger's primary reasons for keeping Trixie around is to have someone to talk to.  Reiziger, like many villains, loves the sound of his own voice (and it is rather magnificent, at least in my head).  He thinks he is terribly wise and clever, and he thus relishes all opportunities to put that wisdom and cleverness on display in his remarks.  Yet he is not the sort of creature to talk to himself.  He needs someone to bounce his words off of, someone to bear witness to his greatness and reinforce it.

    That's where Trixie comes in.  The newly-promoted Metamorph also serves that purpose, but as we'll see, he's not much for scintillating conversation.  Trixie is rather clever and well-spoken herself, and though she addresses Reiziger from a position of mingled terror and worship, she nevertheless tends to know what to say in response to her lord's remarks.  Everybody likes good conversation, even a dark lord.  Indeed, I'd argue that a certain type of dark lord (of which Reiziger is one) loves conversation especially, and that, for him, would be reason enough to let Trixie stick around.

    By the way, I've paid attention to the guesses in the comments of the story about what Reiziger sounds like.  Benedict Cumberbatch and Clancy Brown are my two favorite suggestions I've seen thus far.  I'll add to those a voice I don't believe has been recommended yet: Cory Burton doing his Megatron voice from Transformers Animated.


    I think it fits.

    9 comments · 283 views
  • 12w, 4d
    From the World Called Urth

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  • 15w, 5d
    Chapter Update - And New (Old) Stories!

    Hello, everyone!  I've been made aware that the new chapter alert for Besides the Will of Evil didn't go off for everyone, so just to let you know: Chapter 12 is up!

    Besides the Will of Evil

    Now for the second announcement: I'm pleased to make you aware that two of my short stories are on FIMfiction now.  "The Sun Never Sets" was the very first Pony story of any length that I wrote, and "Nightmare State of Mind" was the last one I wrote in 2011/2012, making it the last thing I wrote before I went on my hiatus.  They sort of sandwich Dangerous Business in my Pony Fiction career, each one representing a point on the line of my writing style, and talents.

    The Sun Never Sets

    Nightmare State of Mind

    As for what I might do in the future of both continuities, I haven't decided.  Part of me is tempted to leave them as they are, to let them stand as glimpses into strange and broken permutations of the FIM universe we know and love.  On the other hand, both worlds could reasonably be expanded upon.  I have given more than a little thought to the futures of both Queen Rarity and Radiant Dawn, and I could extend both their tales without much drop in quality.

    Or I could do a crossover...

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I suppose it's only natural that "Dangerous Business," as its title is so commonly shortened, should find its way to FIMfiction.  This is the premiere destination for MLP fanfics nowadays, and it would seem amiss if a story that so many people have read did not take its place here.

As most of you know by now, this is a story about Rainbow Dash, Applejack, and Rarity, going out on a grand adventure into lands beyond Equestria to save the life of Twilight Sparkle.  It's about those three ponies growing both separately and together, and it's about exploring just what makes up the world where Friendship Is Magic takes place.  It's a story about growth, struggle, and sacrifice.  Nopony in it leaves it unchanged.

You will notice, if you have read this story before, that I have removed a lot of the use of bold text and some of the uses of italics.  I really did use a great deal of marked-up text in this story, far more than is actually necessary to convey meaning and emphasis.  Hopefully this makes for a cleaner read.

A huge debt is owed to everyone who has read this story since I started writing it way back in 2011.  You all helped me keep going when my spirit seemed to falter.  It is for you that I place this story here- and for you that I write what will come next.

EDIT: 3,000 views!  I'm deeply honored.

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16th Apr 2014
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16th Apr 2014
#1 · 26w, 5d ago · 4 · · Chapter 20 ·

Oh look what got posted. This sat in moderation for awhile.

#2 · 26w, 5d ago · 18 · · Chapter 20 ·

I have fond memories of this story.

#3 · 26w, 5d ago · 2 · · Chapter 20 ·

Oh, this looks interesting.

:trixieshiftright:

#4 · 26w, 5d ago · 7 · · Chapter 20 ·

So what is it about? Other than Applejack dressing up as Kaine from FF2.

#5 · 26w, 5d ago · 19 · · Chapter 20 ·

This was one of the first big fics in this fandom wasn't it? Hard to believe its been so long since it was written. It has a few problems with the world-building if I recall but overall its a pretty solid fic.

#6 · 26w, 5d ago · 13 · · Chapter 20 ·

Is this...?

Is this truly it?

~Skeeter The Lurker

#7 · 26w, 5d ago · 4 · · Chapter 20 ·

Oh hey, I remember this one. It makes me want to go marathon season one.

#8 · 26w, 5d ago · 3 · · Chapter 20 ·

Oh hey, one of the epics of yore. It aged well. Still awesome.

#9 · 26w, 5d ago · 4 · 1 · Chapter 20 ·

Favorite for the title alone. Will read momentarily.

#10 · 26w, 5d ago · 13 · 1 · Chapter 20 ·

Description should describe the story. What's currently there is much more of an Author's note kind of thing (no one would complain if you put it at the top of the first chapter). Not everyone knows what your story is about!

#11 · 26w, 5d ago · · · Chapter 20 ·

>>4240173

Yes Skeeter. Yes it is.

#12 · 26w, 5d ago · 11 · · Chapter 20 ·

It...its here! ITS HERE! ITS HERE!!

The fic that got me back into fanfiction. The fic that got me my writing mojo back and made me love reading fanfics again. You wonderful piece of fiction you! Welcome to the site you wonderful piece of writing!

Oh the things I want to say about this, the reasons why I love it and why it is a fantastic piece of brony fics! This is the stuff I look for in good writing.

I owe so much to this fic, that I can't put it into words.

#13 · 26w, 5d ago · 2 · · Chapter 20 ·

Eeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee!  I remember this. I LOVED this.  I need to read it again.  (Although I do agree that maybe you should put an actual description at the top of your description, so that people who haven't been reading ponyfic forever will know what this is about.)

#14 · 26w, 5d ago · 4 · · Chapter 20 ·

>>4240232

...Gonna be reading the SHIT out of this.

~Skeeter The Lurker

#15 · 26w, 5d ago · 2 · · Chapter 20 ·

Oh hey, look, the fic everyone says is good.

Time to go on an adventure! :pinkiegasp:

#16 · 26w, 5d ago · 2 · · Chapter 20 ·

Oh, My gosh!:rainbowkiss:

I read this fic so long ago, it was one of the first MLP fics I ever read, and now I can put it in my favorite lists with Fallout: Equestria and the Moonstone Cup! Thank you oh so much! I love you forever!:rainbowkiss:

#17 · 26w, 5d ago · 4 · · Chapter 20 ·

>>4240179

What he said. This brings back fond memories of the early fic scene in the fandom. For real, this was the first epic-length fic I ever read, and it's still one of the best. Also the first fic I ever marathoned, that is I read it all in the span of two days. At work. Instead of doing my job.

So glad you finally moved it here. :ajsmug:

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#18 · 26w, 5d ago · 16 · · Chapter 20 ·

>>4240224 Actually, yeah, what he said. Your description isn't really adequate in this state. Would you mind sticking in a short blurb so people know what happens in this story if they haven't read it before?

#19 · 26w, 5d ago · 1 · · Chapter 20 ·

This was the fic that really got me into ponies. and now it's here :pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

#20 · 26w, 5d ago · 1 · · Chapter 20 ·

Hey there! Welcome to FIMFic. Saw your prior to moving to FIMFic, good to see you here.

Anyhow, best of luck!

#21 · 26w, 5d ago · 3 · · Chapter 20 ·

>>4240224

Yeah, gotta agree with this dude, only the short description really gives a clue to the reader what the actual story is about. :twilightoops:

#22 · 26w, 5d ago · 2 · 1 · Chapter 20 ·

Um ,what is this and why is everyone making such a big deal about it?

(Joined the fandom in late 2012)

#23 · 26w, 5d ago · 2 · · Chapter 20 ·

>>4240269 Twilight is injured in a magical accident and Rarity, Applejack and Rainbow Dash have to go find a cure for her. Worldbuilding ensues

Basically, this is ponies as written by Tolkien

#24 · 26w, 5d ago · · · Chapter 20 ·

Oh my gosh! It's finally here! I plan on rereading this soon enough and properly commenting. Just want to say, I loved this story when I first read it! It is truly one of the best MLP fanfictions ever written. :pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

#25 · 26w, 5d ago · · · Chapter 20 ·

Oh I remember reading this way back, good old classic =)

#26 · 26w, 5d ago · 1 · · Chapter 20 ·

Read this fic back in the day, was one of the first fics I ever read, and it was friggin' epic.  Loved the shit out of it, even if it hit its high  point rather early on.

Instant Like and Fav. Welcome to fimfiction, Jetfire.

--CG

#27 · 26w, 5d ago · 1 · · Chapter 20 ·

>>4240269

It was one of the best fan fics of 2011, when season one was pretty much over if I remember right. Basically, it's Lord of the Rings meets Friendship is Magic.

#28 · 26w, 5d ago · 6 · · Chapter 20 ·

>>4240269

You have to understand the context of the fandom when this was written. This was one of the first major full-length fanfics for Pony at the time. Prior to this, most everything was one-shots posted on 4chan and capped by Seth or the like. There was the occasional multi-chapter fic, but nothing of this length or quality.

#29 · 26w, 5d ago · · · Chapter 20 ·

>>4240235

What he said!

#30 · 26w, 5d ago · · · Chapter 20 ·

>>4240269

I joined in late 2012 and I've heard of this story. Read it back when it was on Equestria Daily. This is an MLP fanfiction classic. Probably one of the best MLP fanfictions ever written.

#31 · 26w, 5d ago · · · Chapter 20 ·

Congratulations on hitting the front page... :)

#32 · 26w, 5d ago · 2 · · Chapter 20 ·

>>4240269 There was a time when this story was just as popular as Fallout: Equestria.

You get the vibe of Lord of the Rings from its worldbuilding and action.

The general plot is a group of three finding a purple flower that can cure an illness that happens to be guarded by a giant worm

Actually, that sounds like Three's a Crowd.

#33 · 26w, 5d ago · 2 · · Chapter 20 ·

>>4240269

Its like

>>4240298

>>4240305

Said, this one of the first epic fics that came out around the time when Season 1 ended. In the midst of things like Fallout Equestria and Past Sins, this one came out in the midst of those two legends. This fic was one of those that was just accessable enough to new readers that it could draw us in. It was one of those that just appeared hen we weren't sure we could have things like FOE and Past Sins, a Fimfiction, or anything we have now. Also, it was the first to be completed and most like the show to keep the people entertained.

#34 · 26w, 5d ago · 1 · · Chapter 20 ·

>>4240269 As far as I know, this story pretty much invented a bunch of concepts, too.  It was the first story I ever saw with earth pony magic, for example.  And I definitely blame this for the deer=elves thing that is super-common in pony fantasy stories.  This was hugely influential.

#35 · 26w, 5d ago · · · Chapter 20 ·

oh my god yes.

The story that got me started on pony fanfiction has finally been archived in fimfiction.

#36 · 26w, 5d ago · 3 · · Chapter 20 ·

>>4240243

*cough* Forgot the ribbon.*cough*

So happy to see this fic here at last!  I've been waiting to be able to put this on my user page favorites for 2 years, and now I can :pinkiecrazy:

#37 · 26w, 5d ago · · · Chapter 20 ·

>>4240354

Whatever.  Read the fic.

~Skeeter The Lurker

#38 · 26w, 5d ago · 1 · · Chapter 20 ·

>>4240254

At work. Instead of doing my job.

So what you are saying is that nothing has changed. :trollestia:

#39 · 26w, 5d ago · · · Chapter 20 ·

>>4240315

>>4240298

>>4240295

>>4240279

>>4240334

>>4240346

>>4240351

Cheers, guys. I thought Fimfiction was the only place that pony fanfics were ever published, so pardon my ignorance.

On that note, looks like I have a new project to begin...

Edit: Top of the feature box. Well, that was quick.

#40 · 26w, 5d ago · 5 · · Chapter 20 ·

Instant like, instant favorite, instant feature.

Sounds about right for what's probably one of the top(est) shelf fics in the fandom.

#41 · 26w, 5d ago · · · Chapter 20 ·

Going by the fact that the title is a direct quote from The Fellowship of the Ring, this had best be some sort of LotR crossover, or at least an adventure like that...

#42 · 26w, 5d ago · 4 · · Chapter 20 ·

>>4240358

Son, I read this fic before we even knew Twilight had a brother :moustache::trollestia:

Now I feel old...

#43 · 26w, 5d ago · 1 · · Chapter 20 ·

Holy crap, it's here.

If I hadn't read this story in those halcyon days of 2011, I would never have started writing fanfiction. Not just fanfiction about ponies -- fanfiction at ALL. Horrendously opposed to it before, actually.

For what my gratitude is worth, thanks for posting this here. Looking forward to reliving my earlier participation in the fandom by reading this soon. :D

#44 · 26w, 5d ago · 2 · · Chapter 20 ·

Oh man, now this takes me back.  To like, this time in 2011, but still.

Seriously, this is like Tolkien for the fandom in some ways.  Deer!Elves, Earth Pony Magic, Horns generalized as magical implements regardless of species, huge influence on the early thinking about the geography of Equestria.  Good stuff.

#45 · 26w, 5d ago · · · Chapter 20 ·

You trying to tell me this wasn't here before? That's crazy! I remember reading this while waiting for Season 2, had the fantastic luck to discover the series in the break between the first two seasons really shortly after the first one ended, and I got super hooked to it. So in a desperate attempt to get more pony, I turned to fanfics.

Boy, was I glad I did when I found this one.

And I'm freaking reading it again to commemorate, aw yeah!

#46 · 26w, 5d ago · · · Chapter 20 ·

Ogeez.

I was meaning to read this about two years ago. Then I forgot. Crap.

But now it's here, so I can have my favorites tracker constantly nag me about it. Hooray!

#47 · 26w, 5d ago · · · Chapter 20 ·

>>4240376

>before we even knew Twilight had a brother

So, what, late S2? This was written just after S1.

#48 · 26w, 5d ago · · · Chapter 20 ·

>>4240392

I think I read it on the post season 1 hiatus, actually.  Feels like forever ago.

#49 · 26w, 5d ago · 2 · · Chapter 20 ·

>>4240334

Thank God I'm not the only one who saw that! :derpytongue2:

>>4240362

No issue, brah. The story isn't perfect, as it suffers from a giant, glaring plothole the size of Phoenix... but I will guarantee you will not even notice it until after you read it. It has flaws, but it doesn't detract from the story.

>>4240359

Pretty much. It was a gateway story. All downhill from there...

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#50 · 26w, 5d ago · 2 · · Chapter 20 ·

Oh good, I wasn't happy with the first chapter of my audiobook for this, so now I have a good reason to start over. Welcome to Fimfic! :D

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