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  • T Celestia Wants to Date Twilight Sparkle

    Twilight and Celestia don't have dates for Hearts and Hooves Day. Luna looks to change that, and Twilight and Celestia find the date to be more than they bargained for.
    14,277 words · 2,861 views  ·  466  ·  20
  • T A Different Kind of Research

    Twilight needs help with a project. Rainbow Dash has something else in mind.
    2,718 words · 4,918 views  ·  280  ·  11
  • T Twilight's Sun, Celestia's Stars

    Random short stories inspired by prompts from the Twilestia is Bestia group
    7,565 words · 698 views  ·  102  ·  5 · sex
  • T A Girl's Night Out

    Twilight takes Cadance out to drink beer. Things don't go to plan.
    1,121 words · 954 views  ·  107  ·  6
  • T A Girl's Morning In

    After a night of hard drinking, Twilight and Cadance work out what's going on between them.
    1,381 words · 703 views  ·  93  ·  5
  • T The Sun and Stars: Lightning Round

    Ultra short stories done in an hour by the Twilestia is Bestia Skype chat group
    9,538 words · 252 views  ·  39  ·  2
  • T What A Mare Wants

    You are Fleur-de-Lis, a retired model. When Rarity is invited to a fashion show, what do you do?
    1,584 words · 1,053 views  ·  26  ·  4

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  • 5w, 41m
    Current Writings

    Might as well let you all know what is actually going on with my writing progress.

    Celestia Wants To Do Naughty Things To Twilight Sparkle

    The cloppy interquel to Celestia Wants To Date Twilight Sparkle

    1k words written, some editing done, about 60% done overall.

    Unnamed Twilight crackfic

    Exactly what it says on the tin. This is going to be fairly ridiculous.

    1.3k words written, some editing done, about 40% done overall.

    Twilestia bimonthly contest: "Healer"

    This will be done, one way or another, by the end of December.

    Planning; 1% done

    RariLuna sequel to Celestia Wants To Date Twilight Sparkle

    This is still on my mind, but I'll work on it when I need a break from the other things.

    Planning, a few scenes written. 1% done

    Misago's Twilestia Challenge

    A challenge issued by Misago to write a very specific Twilestia story. Sort of a commission.

    I have nothing so far. Sorry. 0%

    Miscellaneous other writings might pop up, still. Like maybe another Twidance piece! Or a Twilestia prompt that catches my eye.

    0 comments · 38 views
  • 6w, 1d
    My newest Magnum Opus!

    If you've been wondering why updates are a little slow as of late, it's because I've been carefully crafting the best piece of fiction I've ever written. Now, for whatever reason, no one saw fit to recognize this genius and allow me to publish it as-is in its own story, so I shall share it this way.

    *ahem*

    Fluttershy and Pinkie Pie were in lesbians with each other and banged all day and all night all over Ponyville and it was super sexy because Pinkie made Fluttershy into an exhibitionist. The End.

    Eh? Eh?

    3 comments · 55 views
  • 7w, 5d
    Discussion time!

    Currently in the Twilestia is Bestia group, as part of winning 2nd place, there is an ongoing discussion about Celestia Wants to Date Twilight Sparkle. Come ask any questions you've had about the story or just share your thoughts!

    So, head on over: http://www.fimfiction.net/group/65/twilestia-is-bestia/thread/130840/celestia-wants-to-date-twilight-sparkle-discussion

    0 comments · 73 views
  • 12w, 2d
    Still working....

    So I'm still working on that bonus for Celestia Wants to Date Twilight Sparkle. It's going slowly because I'm not used to writing, *ahem*, adult content like this. It's taking some time and effort to get it right.

    In the mean time, I've been fooling around in the Twilestia is Bestia group and doing some of the prompts from the Prompt Tag Collab thread. Because I've been having some fun with it, and I think it'd be nice to have some material published occasionally, I'll be throwing up a few of the stories in a separate story. There won't be a whole lot of connectivity between the stories. They're just whatever ideas happened to work for the prompt at hand. Some might become scenes in other stories, or at least inspire other scenes.

    tl;dr I'm lazy and I'll be posting random Twilestia stuff.

    1 comments · 115 views
  • 14w, 1d
    Fun with Numbers

    This is going to be me nerding out for a bit. I feel like having some fun with how my stories are currently doing in terms of Fimfiction's views, comments, likes, and dislikes.

    First off: Canterlot's Guests is my baby. I have many fond memories and bitter regrets there. Second, while I enjoyed writing A Different Kind of Research, it's really not my strongest work. It's a cute little piece, but by no means would I use as anything but an example of an extraordinarily short story. And, lastly, all of these numbers are based on the stats as they stand at 6:57 PM UTC-6. They could've changed since then.

    So, first, the raw numbers. (I know this "table" looks terrible, but bear with me)

    Title Views Likes Dislikes Comments Word Count

    Celestia Wants to Date Twilight Sparkle, 1,698, 314, 20, 145, 14,277

    Canterlot's Guests, 4,239, 292, 13, 96, 25,357

    A Different Kind of Research, 4,612, 258, 10, 18, 2,718

    What A Mare Wants, 1,007, 24, 4, 12, 1,584

    As you can see, Celestia Wants to Date Twilight Sparkle is my most liked fic by number of likes. It's also my most disliked fic by number of dislikes and most commented fic (numbers are skewed because of a thing that happened with A Different Kind of Research that doesn't warrant getting into here, just that it lost a number of comments because Fimfic is silly). And so it continues down the rows, with Canterlot's Guests having the next most likes, dislikes, and comments, then ADKOR, then WAMW.

    Now, for some fun with those numbers.

    Giving a percentage rating to my fics, we then see ADKOR is the most highly rated, at 96.27%, followed by CG at 95.74%, then CWTDTS at 94.01%, and trailed by WAMW at 85.71%.

    However, on a per view basis, CWTDTS reaches the top again, with 0.185 likes per view. Then CG at 0.069 lpv, then ADKOR at 0.056 lpv and finally WAMW at 0.024 lpv.

    As can usually be expected, both Canterlot's Guests and A Different Kind of Research got a bit of a bump in their numbers because of the attention from the new story. Possibly the most impressive stat so far, though, is the fact that Celestia Wants to Date Twilight Sparkle has no referral links. All of those numbers are entirely from Fimfiction. Canterlot's Guests had a very significant boost from Equestria Daily, accounting for a few thousand views. And although ADKOR has the best rating, it's also had a long, long time to get there. CWTDTS has managed to get to its rating in a matter of days.

    I'd really like to see CWTDTS unseat ADKOR as my best rated fic. Or least have it vastly outpace my previous efforts. We'll see what happens in the coming weeks and months.

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On a trip to visit Twilight's parents in Canterlot, Twilight and Rarity find themselves in an unusual situation. Can they straighten everything out before they have to return to Ponyville?

First Published
7th Nov 2011
Last Modified
17th Jun 2014
#1 · 161w, 1d ago · · · Part Three ·

Moar please!

#2 · 161w, 1d ago · · · Part Three ·

>>17523

Absolutely! I'm working on Part 4 right now. I need to finish planning out the second half of it, but I'll get down to writing it sometime this week.

#3 · 161w, 1d ago · · · Part Three ·

Ooooh YES! So glad to see this story on here finally. Big fan of it!

#4 · 161w, 1d ago · · · Part Three ·

>>17529

I'm glad you like the story. It was a pain in the flank to post because I have a PLOTLOAD of formatting I do (all the italic thoughts, the letter special font, some smaller fonts for whispering, etc.) that is really hard or impossible to bring over. But I like FiMFiction's layout and stats tracking, something I wish I could on EqD. (Maybe I should have given them bit.ly links?)

#5 · 161w, 1d ago · · · Part Three ·

Well. I have read everything you have posted, and well you have a new fan great work! please keep it up and thank you for writing this!    :twilightblush::rainbowkiss:

#6 · 161w, 1d ago · · · Part Three ·

I love accidentally finding out a story I've started reading has been updated :D

Looking forward to the next part :)

#7 · 157w, 23h ago · · · Part Three ·

:flutterrage: moar please!

#8 · 154w, 20h ago · · · Part Three ·

Are you planning on continuing this? :pinkiesmile:

#9 · 153w, 6d ago · · · Part Three ·

>>64654

YES! I've had a lot of school work as the semester wraps up (it's finals week for me :fluttershysad: ), but once it's all over, I hope to get back to writing this again. I really, really miss it.

#10 · 153w, 6d ago · · · Part Three ·

>>66341 Okay, fair enough. It's just been seven weeks, so I was just checking. This time of year always seems busiest for people. :pinkiesmile:

#11 · 146w, 1d ago · · · Part Three ·

please :raritystarry: don't forget about continuing this one:twilightsheepish:

#12 · 146w, 1d ago · · · Part Three ·

>>192949

I most certainly have not forgotten! When I can, I'll be posting the revisions to Part One, and I have a few people who are looking over Part Two over the next couple of days. And just last night I got a few paragraphs written for Part Four! So things are coming together, but they need time.

Hrm! I've been waiting for this story to update. Not what I expected though.

What exactly did you revise? Everything? :o

>>202124

Not everything. But a very large amount of things got changed. A lot of the narration and scene descriptions got changed or updated. Some dialogue was reworked to plug plot-holes. A bunch of minor typos got corrected.

Overall, though, it's still the same story. Just, a better version. Part Two is getting the same treatment, and Part Three will be revised, as well. And once I completely finish writing the story, it'll be time for yet another round of edits and revisions.

#15 · 145w, 5d ago · · · Part Three ·

This story is a bit of a rarity, pardon the pun. Twi and Rarity as a couple i mean. Love your portrayal of confused, nerd-love Twilight. Rarity makes me laugh when she tries to hide from Twilight. I eagerly await chapter four.  :raritystarry: :twilightsmile:

>>202181

Good on you then, I suppose. :o I've never really gone back and edited my stories. I'm generally pretty satisfied with how they came out!

I'll be sure to read over your revisions eventually, though. :3

neato. to tell you the truth, i'm tired of the same three chapters of this sitting on my ipod for like infinity.

What I'm really looking forward to is chapter 4 of course :rainbowlaugh: But revisions are almost as good:raritywink:

Read read this up back on EqD. Still has that quality I came to enjoy when reading this fic. And still as always how rare this the pairing is, makes it my favorite. All in all nothing note about on the text, tho when will we expect the next chapter? :twilightsmile:

Oooh, hey! Glad to see this is still alive and kicking. :)

:yay: It updated...sort of. Glad to see you're still working on this.

>>373442

Part Four? I have no idea... But so far, the rewrites are going well. Hopefully, within the next few weeks or so. I'm a slow writer and it takes time to do all the revisions that really make a story shine. Also, >slow writer >can write 1000 words in an hour if she tries :derpytongue2:

>>377451

Hey, I did add another 600 words or so. But I do so want to get to new material. Revisions can be fun, but nothing beats the freedom of just writing something no one else has seen. :twilightsmile:

Very interesting. This is the first time I have come across a Twilight/Rarity story. At first when I began reading I thought the details that Rarity used in her internal monologues as she described Twilight seemed odd. However after considering her personality I have to say you really hit the nail on the head and did a good job. I am now tracking this and I hope to see a new chapter out soon. Keep up the good work. :moustache:

Out of order, much? Somehow, chapter three wound up before chapters one and two. :pinkiecrazy:

>>377717

Rarity and Pinkie Pie are really difficult characters to write well, at least in my opinion. And then it becomes even more challenging to keep Rarity in character for a romance. But thanks for the compliments! :raritystarry:

>>378250

That has to do with FiMFiction's handling of chapter order: it goes by date/time posted, not numerically or by any adjustable order. The only fix is to get the rewrites done and post the new versions.

I went through a several emotions when I logged on and saw that your story.

First when I saw your story had updated.

But then when I saw it was a revision

(Will comment on the actual revision in a separate comment :P )

It's been refreshing to re-read over this story again. :3  I hope it updates soon!

Now we just need part four.  Such a wonderful build-up.

Ok I like the revisions you did to this chapter. I am always a fan of longer chapters and it is nice to see the changes in this one. I am going to fully re-read the story again. Again, keep up the good work. And sorry about the theatrics in my first post :rainbowlaugh:

>>388225

I'm sorry! But it's been so important to me that I keep my story at my writing level. And I've gotten much better since I published these, and I knew I could make the story better. But I definitely appreciate you taking the time to look over it. :twilightsmile:

>>388229

Thanks! It's been great doing the revisions. It's... odd, reading about the cute things you wrote, but kinda forgot. Still brings a smile to my face, though. And judging by how quickly I've been able to get all of this stuff written over the past week, I might be able to get something ready... soonish. :trollestia: It certainly shouldn't be too long.

>>388233

Again, shouldn't be too long. I've already got about a page written so far. Not much, but it's enough that I should have enough motivation not to leave it unfinished. :raritywink:

I'm glad to see that my two favourite sections were untouched; consider my appetite for more suitably whetted. :raritywink:

Smiles.

was this a re-post? because I remember reading it before? Unless I for got to comment?

Ether way Nice woke, I always new Joe was a smart guy?

Reading this with the April fools' joke on the site, so it's Sparkle x Sparkler... very good! :twilightsmile::raritywink:

>>388391

You're welcome! I can assure you, whatever your favorite part is, it's also one of mine. I love (almost) every line in my story for one reason or another.

>>390423

By my count, I added somewhere in the order of 2000 words to the story as a whole. Some of it was little details, like extra character interactions. Others where pretty big sections of exposition. So, more than likely, it's still the same story, but more in line with what was in my mind. Like, Part One had a lot more Spike, more Rarity and Twilight drinking tea, and more Twilight interacting with the shopkeeper. Part Two added tons of extra stuff to Rarity and Twilight leaving (poor, poor Spike) and some other polish to the later scenes. Part Three got lots of new stuff, mostly focusing on the Pony Joe's scene. Much more exposition and backstory. And across all of them, I added more details about scenery, which was a big failing when I started.

>>391267

Oh, my poor story! I hope the fonts don't ruin it for you.

>>391380 It's gonna take much worse to ruin this story :twilightoops: I've had this in my ipod since forever... can't wait for the next chapter :twilightsmile:

While I like the story as is quite a bit, the way you write down thoughts kind of bothers me, thoughts are usually a lot more direct and have little need for pointing out the obvious.

The only other thing I really have a problem with is that your Twilight is more dense than a particularly stupid brick. (though it does have it's place I suppose)

Anyway, looking forward to more. :twilightsmile:

>>377507

JKinsley, if it takes you weeks to make the funniest Romance about Rarity and Twilight, then please do so:yay:. Do not rush [much] because of pressure, we understand. So go make fun and not the rabbit kind of fun:trollestia:

We will be ever patient! Good Luck!

>>391380

In that case thank you for taking the time to better your story :pinkiehappy:

#38 · 125w, 5d ago · · · Part Four ·

This was so worth the wait, love it!:raritystarry:

#39 · 125w, 5d ago · · · Part Four ·

I'm glad to see this story is still active.  I eagerly await more.

#40 · 125w, 5d ago · · · Part One ·

> Or was it her new set of beakers to replace the ones that shattered after another one of Pinkie Pie’s prank?

Can't believe the EqD prereaders didn't notice that. Good work though.

I was also about to note that Rarity's dialogue with Twilight seems a bit odd, but then I realized that was the point. :facehoof:

#41 · 125w, 5d ago · · · Part Four ·

>>827465

Think of Equestria Daily's prereaders as gatekeepers, not proofreaders. They just pass judgment on what they think is worthy to be featured. Thanks for pointing that out, though, I'll be sure to correct it.

>>826566

As do I. Part Five will be very exciting. :raritywink:

#42 · 125w, 5d ago · · · Part Four ·

>>827502

One other thing to note - your style and voice are expressive enough to forgo clarifying statements, an example would be:

> “I love you too Mom!” Twilight shouted back, blushing a little at the very public display of family love. And thank you so much for today. You have no idea how much this means.

Context is strong enough to make that unnecessary, if not distracting. If you feel the need to use narrative summary to explain a character, use one of your strong points instead - internal monologue for Twilight and Rarity works well or body language/dialogue context.

#43 · 125w, 5d ago · · · Part Four ·

Oh man I was so happy to see this update. I loved this chapter and cannot wait until you unleash the next one. Keep up the good work my friend.You are a credit to the story writing community. :twilightsmile:

Also I love the way you write Twilights mom. She is quite perceptive isn't she?

#44 · 125w, 5d ago · · · Part One ·

>>827465

How is that hard to believe? It's a one letter typo, they miss that all the time.

#45 · 125w, 4d ago · · · Part Two ·

Oh Twi, you silly thing...

#46 · 125w, 4d ago · · · Part Four ·

i thought this one was dead.

but then i saw my notification box and i was like :pinkiehappy:

Awesome work, keep it up!

#47 · 125w, 4d ago · · · Part Four ·

Horray! Praise Luna, Celestia's work be done! It finally updated! Now... proceed. o-o

#48 · 125w, 4d ago · · · Part Four ·

This is so adorable! I can't wait to see what happens next :twilightsmile:

#49 · 125w, 4d ago · · · Part Four ·

damnit, i wanted to click next! :pinkiehappy:

#50 · 125w, 4d ago · · · Part Four ·

>>828021

That was probably the hardest scene to write so far. People might struggle to write action or narration or have a good story to tell, but getting the whole mother-daughter relationship in dialogue and body language is really challenging. That was one of the biggest areas of revision for me, and I'm really thankful for it.

>>828286

Hell, I missed it through probably dozens of rounds of revisions. But I'm glad you enjoyed the story, I've had a lot of fun writing it. I'm getting started on writing Part Five, which should be the best part yet. :raritywink:

>>830634

Neither can I! I look forward to finishing the next part so it can revised and polished and finally published.

>>831332

I wish you could too, but I must get the next bit written first! It's already planned out, I just need to get out of my head and into the computer.

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