Reader. Editor. Scribbler. Odd.
"Why is a cupcake?"
A cupcake. Logic. A simple thought.
How can a humble confection find its place in a world where places are misplaced?
(Author's Note: Sweet Nothings is a companion to The Pastry Postulate. You can read either one first, or last, or at the same time. It doesn't matter.)
Tagged as comedy because my mum thought it was funny.
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(This didn't really feel like it fit in the "Author's Notes...Comments...thing" up there, so I've put it here instead. I hope that's okay with you all.)
Hey guys! Short read, I know. I hope you like it. I haven't written anything in a while, and I really wanted to, and I had so much fun with The Pastry Postulate, and everyone seemed to like it so much, that I decided to write a sort of...well, it's not a prequel, is it? Or a sequel, either. It's...concurrent...I'm sure there's a word for that. Hey, why did I call it The Pastry Postulate, anyway? Cupcakes aren't pastries, are they?
Hm.
Anyway, please, go ahead and tell me what you think! About that...story...up there...or about pastries. Your choice! Oh hey, and if you see any typos or grammar things or what have you, just comment and I'll be sure to fix them. Thanks!
--Squiddy
Nooice! Hey, it's good to see you writing again, man. Been too long! *is enormous hypocrite*
Could do with another round of pre-reading, since you have the cupcake 'thinking' something with the text formatted like regular dialogue, and then later the thoughts are properly italicized.
That said, I found this to be a cute little one-shot, so have a fave.
4229727 Aw, thanks! That's a very good point with the thinking...I'd been wrestling with whether or not to use italics, and I finally decided on a more traditional (not QUITE archaic, but getting there) representation of thought. Although it's technically not wrong, it can be confusing to read or look slovenly at first, and I'm really glad you brought it up. When faced with a pair of technically correct formatting options, I'd much rather use a style that the you, the reader, prefer than my own favourite. Thanks!
--Squiddy
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No problem. Also, I brought it up not because of what is normally considered 'proper' but because it was merely inconsistent in the text because you switch from one style to the other in the middle of the story.
4229727 (Addendum) There! I think that's all fixed.
PLEASE tell me that that duck line is referencing what I think it's referencing.
4230412 I have absolutely NO idea to what you're referring.
...yes, yes of course it is. I was hoping someone would notice.
4230458 The cupcake is a witch!!!
Wait... wat? This pleased me to read, so I shall grant you a lovely little reviewy thing because your story was in the folder. Yeah.
This review is brought to you on behalf of the group: Authors Helping Authors
Name of Story: Sweet Nothings
Grammar score out of 10 (1 is grammar that needs to be worked upon as basic principles such as capitalization and spelling is an issue, and 10 is impeccable): 10. I didn't notice a single error.
Pros:
This made me question my existance.
The cupcake has incredible characterization that fully emphasizes his desire for the answers of life's questions.
Great theme. The purpose of life is to be eaten by a unicorn. Lovely.
This was hilarious... er... in the life-is-a-giant-jumble-of-lies-and-questions sort of way.
Cons:
Not much to say here, as the story was fairly well done. Although, I did notice that the use of italics was quite excessive. The capatilzation of certain words was also rather confusing. (Ex: Real, Cupcake, Question, etc.)
Notes Section:
This story was beautiful. Pure, authentic beautifulness. Wow. I want to go eat a cupcake now. Congratulations. Feliz Navidad. You are a talented person.
Cucumbers. Purple tooth floss. Amazing.
Enjoy your review! Please help me out by looking at my story: My Father's Memories OR Ostracized.
Lol wut? The things that you come up with man. Keep up the good work!
4280351 Thanks, mate! Sorry it took me this long to reply. I'd love to do one of your stories! I'll get on that right now.
Well, that was...interesting, and quite engaging. I was able to follow it, after backtracking and reading certain sentences more carefully. About as fun as Pastry Postulate.
This is deeply touching. It has awakened and named some of my innermost questions, the cores that drive nearly all my endeavors. I would advise the Cupcake to let itself be eaten, so that it may return to being a part of the whole universe, within Everything instead of having to ponder the existence of being a separate Something from Everything Else.