This story makes me angry. Just freaking tell her already!
"Oh I'm Applejack and I'm going to leave it all up to Rarity because it's the right thing to leave a filly in terrible pain since she's not family." "I'm Rarity and being a horse is icky so I'll just leave her all alone in the attic and not comfort her at all." "A book will make everything better unless you're too horny to read, but what are the chances of that?" "Oh I'm... perfectly in character actually. Here's some ginger for the cramping."
I don't even know if a town-wide orgy could salvage this. So mean spirited!
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"Is it still PMS when all the other ponies actually are complete morons?"
5194984 Yeah that sums it up for me too. Though to be fair...AJ would have been right to leave it to Rarity...if Rarity would mare up and actually tell her. Seriously, at this rate I wouldn't be surprised if this ended in (pre)teen pregnancy due to sheer stupidity.
And Twilight trying to solve a problem with a book...sounds perfectly in character for her too.
As a girl I am really enjoying the realism of this story and loving the fact that it hasn't devolved in to fetish play mega orgy. Please continue! I feel like any sex in here would be very tasteful and what a rarity that is on this site
While I'll admit my knowledge of reproductive cycles -- both human and equine -- is a lacking, I tried to combine what I did know and focus more on how Sweetie Belle is feeling. I've read that people who don't know they're approaching that time (for the first time) have awful cramping and can be quite irritable, and animal's body language/changes in their body suggest the same thing. I tried to take that from a more sympathetic angle, though I can see why a few readers have called this story slightly sadistic. I was operating on more of a "do the right thing" premise... naturally not meaning to compare my writing to that of the great Spike Lee, of course
While the story is classified as adult and containing sexuality, I can assure you it will be taking a direction no one has thus far mentioned
I'd think that in a society where estrus is completely normal and common, the colts and stallions would be slightly less perplexed and worked up by the scent of pheromones. This can't possibly be the first time Jetboy or the other colts have smelled a mare in heat, and the stallion should know exactly what's going on and why Rarity seemed uncomfortable about it. But whatevs. This is still fun.
This story makes me angry. Just freaking tell her already!
"Oh I'm Applejack and I'm going to leave it all up to Rarity because it's the right thing to leave a filly in terrible pain since she's not family."
"I'm Rarity and being a horse is icky so I'll just leave her all alone in the attic and not comfort her at all."
"A book will make everything better unless you're too horny to read, but what are the chances of that?"
"Oh I'm... perfectly in character actually. Here's some ginger for the cramping."
I don't even know if a town-wide orgy could salvage this. So mean spirited!
...
"Is it still PMS when all the other ponies actually are complete morons?"
5194984
Yeah that sums it up for me too. Though to be fair...AJ would have been right to leave it to Rarity...if Rarity would mare up and actually tell her. Seriously, at this rate I wouldn't be surprised if this ended in (pre)teen pregnancy due to sheer stupidity.
And Twilight trying to solve a problem with a book...sounds perfectly in character for her too.
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I somehow feel Rarity even aims at getting Sweetie pregnant.
and later
I'll 1v1 Rarity Club Penguin in her arse if she does what i think she will do... Poor Sweetie
As a girl I am really enjoying the realism of this story and loving the fact that it hasn't devolved in to fetish play mega orgy. Please continue! I feel like any sex in here would be very tasteful and what a rarity that is on this site
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Thank you for the kind words.
While I'll admit my knowledge of reproductive cycles -- both human and equine -- is a lacking, I tried to combine what I did know and focus more on how Sweetie Belle is feeling. I've read that people who don't know they're approaching that time (for the first time) have awful cramping and can be quite irritable, and animal's body language/changes in their body suggest the same thing. I tried to take that from a more sympathetic angle, though I can see why a few readers have called this story slightly sadistic. I was operating on more of a "do the right thing" premise... naturally not meaning to compare my writing to that of the great Spike Lee, of course
While the story is classified as adult and containing sexuality, I can assure you it will be taking a direction no one has thus far mentioned
I'd think that in a society where estrus is completely normal and common, the colts and stallions would be slightly less perplexed and worked up by the scent of pheromones. This can't possibly be the first time Jetboy or the other colts have smelled a mare in heat, and the stallion should know exactly what's going on and why Rarity seemed uncomfortable about it.
But whatevs. This is still fun.