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Spike has had a bad day. He can't seem to get anything right. From angry mobs, to pastry messes, to tripping over rocks everything seems to be going wrong. But, what will the little guy do when he has the chance to get everything right? Can he get everything right? Will it even matter?

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As to quote Jontron:

"byeeutiful! 5 stars! A+! 4 stars!"

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I would put funny items in Twilight's cupcakes and keep seeing if she would notice when she ate them.

This is an odd story. It's labelled slice of life, but Twilight and Pinkie seem like caricatures of themselves. It makes the story feel like it should be a comedy - only it's clearly not.

Hey Strider here so here's the list of spelling errors I saw.

Spike to the mop without another word. I think it's "took"
"See, you wouldn't believe you. I think you meant you wouldn't believe me.( I think?)

well that's all I can find at the moment I thought I might of saw more but I'm getting tired:ajsleepy:
so if ya want I'll take another read later to see if I missed anything. But other than that good heart feely story.:pinkiehappy::twilightangry2::moustache::pinkiehappy: (right in the feels)

Also I'm still saying it was a conspiracy made by you know who.:trollestia:

Oh how I love these kind of stories.

OH MY GAWD AMAZING :rainbowkiss: I LOVE EVERYTHING :yay::twilightblush::twilightsheepish::raritywink::rainbowlaugh::pinkiesad2::pinkiecrazy::heart::ajsmug::twistnerd::duck:

Very interesting story!

How did a fic like this pass me by when it first came out? :rainbowhuh:

Oh well, it's still a good one.

For me, it's been Tuesday for like three weeks!"

LOL Poor Spike.

I saw you talk about this!!! I really loved the idea and now I can read about it. :pinkiehappy:

Yeah! Groundhog Day in MLP by Mr. Enter!

Jesus Christ, this is like all of my favorite things all wrapped up in one. We just need "I Got You, Babe" playing, and it's perfect! :pinkiehappy:

Yeah this was awsome. Aside from a few spelling erros, it was nearly perfect. You had Spike down perfectly, you had Pinky down perfectly, and Twilight was on the brink of Lesson Zero mode.

I give it 9 dweebs out of 10: :pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

Really good keep it up. I could learn a thing or two about fanfics.

This is a very cute story. Spike feels very spot on in his attitude and mannerisms and determination to get things right. Twilight bothered me a bit with her being so insensitive, but we've definitely seen her like that before so it's not a bad thing. If anything it's a compliment you're making me feel uncomfortable about what fictional characters are doing. I would've liked to have been shown her attitude a bit more through body language as it felt like most of it was simply told through her tone. This is still a great fic and you've put a lot of work into it. Keep it up.:twilightsmile:

I loved it! Bill Murray writing a letter to Princess Celestia at the end was a nice touch.

Keep up the good work!

Absolutely amazing. There's a definite improvement from Clean Up On Smile Five. Then again it was written like, what, a year prior? So improvement is obviously going to happen.

The characters couldn't be more in character if I stop for minutes to try and figure out how, the pacing was great, the concept was great, and it was just overall, awesome!

Then again I shouldn't be surprised if your videos are anything to go by! :)

Keep up your great work! ^_^

Much better than "Smile Five", except since when was Pinkie so clumsy in the kitchen.

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Pinkie's not entirely in character as she's supposed to be right at home in the kitchen, so how could she make such a mess?

Full review here, but in brief: this feels like it was written longer ago than 2014, but it has a really satisfying Spike, which is fairly uncommon. I don't much like the way Twi treats him and Pinkie is tiringly over-the-top. A mixed bag.

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