A CPA making his way in the corporate world.
Bon-Bon notices that her marefriend, Lyra, has been spending a lot more time with a stallion named Noteworthy recently. Bon-Bon worries that Lyra is cheating on her and takes many measures to determine whether that is the case.
Also, what's up with Pinkie Pie?
Takes place at the same time as "Filli Vanilli".
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This is a great story so far, please, continue.
This is a pretty good story. The only thing I can really say that really weakens the story is the profanity. I'm not just saying Pinkie's, but the other ponies as well. It doesn't add anything to the plot while removing you from the show connection which you explicitly make.
Nice chapter. I noticed no flaws, except that you seem not to happy or emotionless when Bon Bon and Lyra kiss.
Great as always!
I was watching an awesome gangster movie while reading this and that totally changed the feel of the end of the chapter big time! I yelled out ' Foreshadowing!!!!!!!' And starting laughing.
The answer is nope!
This is getting interesting.
NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Not a cliffhanger!
Insert clapping guy gif here.
Clap, clap, clap, clap. Well done kind sir, well done.
Good start. I look forward to read the rest of it.
Just have a b
ing threesome or be a couple of three or do some horesh
that doesn't make me feel like there are obvious choices! 
(Do not take any of this too seriously, just me here voicing meh thoughts. Seriously loving the story)
Wait, this is the end? But what about Noteworthy?
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Hmmmm.. perhaps this story is deserving of an epilogue,
4224850 Great job, you made me laugh hysterically but I'm not going to show it in this comment.
I can't say you disappointed me, but you slightly did.(Cause everyday I'm shipping and mixing.) But on the other hoof, I'm glad you ended with a good ending for Noteworthy. I was expecting Octavia, rather than Vinyl. But since Lyra is a unicorn with a two-striped mane I guess it could work if Vinyl fits the same short description? I'm actually working on a story where Noteworthy is Vinyl's brother and is visiting her before going to a national symphony contest. Or some shit competition that means what I just said. Great. . . now I'm shamelessly promoting myself.
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Lol if it makes you feel better, it was a tough decision between Vinyl and Octavia. :)
4227463 That made me lol.
It's very interesting so far!
Now that's what I call a great story. :)
Noteworthy x Lyra for the win!
Lyra and bon-bon cutest couple ever
However sorry but Big mac best best pony
Amazing slice of life story there really isn't enough of those
PINKIE PIE YOU ARE F***ING CRAZY
4648217 No, just no Lyra and Bon-bon all the way
Seamore is best seal
when talking to Angel, Bon Bon refers to Fluttershy with "he"
Pinkie Pie you're drunk go home