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All the coolest griffon alive wanted was a little peace and quiet and take a nap in her flat back home in the Griffon Empire after a long day. Too bad her phone starts ringing whenever she tries...
Just a random short fic idea I came up with during a long, eventless overnight shift at work. Hope you all enjoy.
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LOL! Great work on the comedy dude.
Loved that Scream reference. I could just see him opening the door with a knife in his hand and Gilda giving him an unimpressed stare before plunging her claw into his chest and showing him his heart.
P.S. inb4featured
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Eh?
I think we've all been here.
I'm guessing the gryphons haven't invented caller-ID and the "ringer off" switch yet. 
One thing, though: When you have dialogue followed by an attribution of who said it and how, you must treat the whole thing -- dialogue and attribution together -- as a single sentence; if the character's sentence is meant to end with a period, you must use a comma instead, and then you do not capitalize the first word outside of the closing quote unless it's someone's name (or the pronoun "I", which is always capitalized). Like this:
If the dialogue ends with a ? or !, you use those as usual, but you still treat the whole thing as one sentence and do not capitalize the next word unless it's someone's name (or the pronoun "I", which is always capitalized, of course):
The only time you end dialogue with a period before the final quote is if the next part is not an attribution, but is in fact a separate action taken after the character finishes speaking. You don't really have an example of that in this story, so here's a sample of what I mean:
Here, there's a sequence of events:
(1) Shining Armor says something to his mother over the phone.
(2) After he finishes speaking, he covers the microphone and turns to say something else to Gilda. This is a separate action from the preceding dialogue, so "I know what you mean, Mom." ends with a period and we start a new sentence.
(3) The next line of dialogue is spoken simultaneously with the "rueful grin and nod towards the phone", so here we have dialogue-plus-attribution and it's a single sentence again.
P.S. -- if anyone tries to tells you not to punctuate dialogue as above, tell them to pick up any book published within the last, oh, 200 years or so.
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No, they haven't.
Thanks, I think I got them fixed now.
And this is when Gilda decided to become a supervillain.
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Can you blame her?
4052595 Nope, it makes much more sense now!
I lol'd.
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Glad to make it happen!
Reminds me of a Looney Tunes esque cartoon Lol
Also, loved the Scream reference! XD
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Typical isn't it, though? We always get phone calls at the most inconvenient times
Glad you enjoyed it
funny
okay that one got me, Shade. Hello, this is a message for the vehicle owner about your car's extended warranty. This is your final courtesy call before we close your case.