Hi guys, this is my first short story. I desided to write these for practice before I start doing an actual novel. The last novel I made.... well lets not talk about that.
Any way, this story is about fluttershy and her little adventure to help this animal in need. A little original I know, but this particular creature is none that she has ever owned.
The first part consisted of fluttershy starting her journy, the second consists of her taking care of it.
The big question, weill she end up keeping it, or sending it back home?
Chapters (2)
This could use a good proofreading. Both the story and the description have errors in them. Concept isn't terribly original but so long as you do it right and add some originality here and there it isn't really an issue. Also I would suggest trying to write longer chapters in order to capture the readers attention. 1000 words, for the most part, doesn't really do that well.
It was interesting to say that it is the first one I read with the brezzys
I personally would have used timberwolfs instead of those weird rabbits.
And i think that the weirdest moment at the end was a bit undetailed.
Also be carefull about things like the pegusus instead of pegasus. Because it sounds like a dinosaur.
4031034 yes, like I said, this is just a short story. I am longer into novel making for now.
Btw I did this on my tablet. The description was on screen, but I used a keyboard to do the story.
Btw tablrts dont show spelling errors so it was harder to write this, I would have done this on my computer if it didn't terribly crasha week ago.
4031662 no longer into novel making*
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Well you should have asked someone to proof it for you before posting it. Simple fix
4032601 this was the proofread lol
:| it was good
But badly time joke with the mane course thing but over al 4/5 yeas