In Total, He's not that Bad.

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Princess Celestia gets a letter from a citizen of Ponyville. She doesn't know who or why they are writing. Only that they will be asking a favor from her.

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nodamnbrakes

nodamnbrakes #1 · Feb 27th, 2014 · · ·

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Zyrian

Zyrian #2 · Feb 27th, 2014 · 2 · ·

they know that they could not exist without the other and that live would be unlivable without the other.

Capitalize the beginning of the sentence, and change 'live' to 'life', and you're golden. Also, A.K.A. is usually capitalized, with periods in-between the letters.

I didn't catch any other errors, and I found the letter quite touching. Good job!

Manes

Manes #3 · Feb 27th, 2014 · · ·

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( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°) I see you love to use this face.

Garbo

Garbo #4 · Feb 27th, 2014 · · ·

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Duh, who doesn't like to ( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°)

Manes

Manes #5 · Feb 27th, 2014 · · ·

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Praise the face.( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡°)

Also nice fic it just needs some fine editing.

Crab Spy

Crab Spy #6 · Feb 27th, 2014 · · ·

Short, sweet, awesome.

Just skim through this a few times for errors that I'm too lazy to point out and you should be all set.

Grey Faerie

Grey Faerie #7 · Feb 28th, 2014 · · ·

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I got it fixed. Thanks.

Grey Faerie

Grey Faerie #8 · Feb 28th, 2014 · · ·

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What kind of fine editing? I think the grammar and spelling is okay. Do you see any places I can expand on or do I need to put in more information about something?

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