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Octavia has seen the theater before, but never dared entered it. But from what the voices have told her, this was the source. This is where she must go to put an end to her torment. Ponies have called her crazy, but they haven't seen or heard what Octavia has. If she wants to end all her misfortunes, she must go to the source, and play the perfect song, a candle lit at all times at her side. Then her torment will be over and she can return to living her happy life.
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3989292 Right, thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed this
My god! That is amazing. Music is one of the things that I like most in life. I play the piano, and me and a couple friends made a comedy/polka band called The Polka People, and I think we will also do some creepy classical music too. Our website is called polkapeople.webs.com if you want to see it. I am going to try to write something sad and dark for the piano like the fan song Octavia's Melody, it is on YouTube. Love the fanfic! If you want read my fanfic, it is currently incomplete though. It is called The Factory And The Doctor. I'm half Brony and half Whovian, so I like Doctor Whooves. But ya, love the fanfic. Ist güt, ich liebe es!
4498393 That'd be cool, I'd love to hear what you can do! I'll take a look at your fic as well
4506759 actually I renamed it Doctor Rainbow, and I'll probably be finished in about a month or two
Hi! I just wanted to let you know that I've done a reading of this story. Thank you for writing such a sad, dark piece! :)
4992085 Wow, I don't even know what to say! Thank you, I really appreciate that! I never really expected something like that at all! Thank you so much
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I liked this story. It reminds me of some videogame I played years ago, with a little girl in a haunted house, and you had to stay close to candles to keep your panic level down. I thought you did a great job of painting Octavia's tension and fear.
I have just a few thoughts:
I'm not entirely clear why Octavia finds herself in her current predicament. To me, it would make more sense if Vinyl's soul were at stake somehow, otherwise her death would seem to have little to do with the reason Octavia came.
The sympathy seems out of place here. I'd imagined malevolent poltergeists, seething with barely contained hatred.
Did she pick it up again after she dropped it?
And finally, our resident musician here tells me that Octavia's instrument is a classical bass, not a cello. Bass's are played standing up or sometimes on a tall stool, while cello's are played sitting.
Just a few minor quibbles, which do not seriously detract from this otherwise magnificent piece. Keep up the good work!
5043372 When I wrote this, I wanted to have a bit of ambiguity, although I feel I may have had too much of it. Besides that, I appreciate the criticism
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i listened to lost narrator's reading of this and, well, i did enjoy this fic, though i couldn't help wondering why the hell octavia went in there in the first place. there's a small chance vinyl might've come out of that coma and she'd find out octi went missing, she'd be heartbroken. why did she go in there at all? Why didn't she stay by vinyl's side, waiting to see if the unicorn would come out of it?
Sorry i'm being negative. it doesn't help that the last couple of vinyl/octi readings she'd done had all ended in heartache, for each pony respectivly, so i think that might have influenced my mood when listening to this fic's reading.
still, i wish we had some explanation as to why octi went in there. Was it because, if she did well, the spirits would let vinyl live and recover? That's the only reason i can think as to why octi would do that.
I did enjoy it, however, so i will favorite and like.
So sad... And dark... Faved.
Ohhh that's an excellent final line for the first paragraph. Very creepy in its implication...
Holy crap, the tension...it's really good in this story. Knowing the score makes things so much more enticing for the reader.
Gosh dang you're good at making those creepy final lines in paragraphs! :D
Intriguing to see these shadows exhibit something other than just threat, and in this case, showing consideration.
;_; It hurts even more to know they were lovers and how much this must be paining Octavia, to realize this is more about personal safety and bravery for someone else's regard.
Fantastic ending.
What a beautiful moving dark story. Perfect ending to a perfect tale
Fav and upvote :)
i did video on this and wanted you to know
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=qU7Y5i7CI24
I don't care how sad you are any musician would never drop their Cello on the ground you demon.