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I should be happy for her right? She's my best friend and she's getting married, so how could I not be happy for her? She's marrying the stallion who was just perfect for her and she'd be living close enough to visit me every so often. How could I have not been happy for her? I had all the time in the world to try and be with her, but I got nowhere. If this is what makes her happy, then who was I to oppose her decision?
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Oh my Celestia, tis is so sad and heartwarming...
This needs to be in the feature box, no, actually, it needs better than the bullcrap in the feature box.
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I'm glad you enjoyed it
Aww thanks!
Tears were shed. This has got to be one of the best I've ever read.
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Thanks, I'm glad you liked it!
Aw, I really liked this.
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Thanks
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Fantastic. Heart-jerkingly so.
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I'm glad you liked it
So, she was already dead during the wedding? Jeez, this is heavy.
Very well done.
Wow.... just... WOW.... The feels....
Did she do what I think she did.....
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That was lovely, sad but lovely.
So at what point did Lyra die? Is she already dead at the wedding? Either way amazing story!
3818440 Yeah, she was dead during the wedding. I'm glad you enjoyed the story
I enjoyed reading your story! In fact, I featured it in a blog post of mine. It's not much, but I hope it'll get you a couple of extra views. Keep up the good work!
I .... I jjust love it its sad but i love it
3879604 Thank you!
I really appreciate that
3879710 Thank you!
I'm glad that I can make people feel 
Well this was sad
Well.... that was a suprisingly sad ending. Did Lyra die of broken heart?
3920311 I kinda leave how Lyra 'rides the pale horse' up for speculation, though technically, she wasn't really at the wedding (At least that's how I had it when I wrote it).
3922037 So she was dead all along? Bon Bon can see dead horses! just kidding^^ But, wow... this makes this story even more sad and tragic...
I love it!
3931198 I'm glad you do
The feels bro/sis.
The feels.
Hnn. My feelers took a direct hit during this story.
I really enjoyed it though
I enjoy the way this story subverts the "I want my beloved to be happy" trope, and gets to the heart of why most unrequited crushes between close friends hurt. In my experience, the biggest issue is often not that the one you have a crush on doesn't return your feelings, but that you feel you have to keep it a secret from them. Soon, the friendship that was once strong is cut apart by a single, well-maintained lie, and the bond frays to the point that the friendship isn't enough, and you start thinking that if you could only get together with them, everything would be solved. But you know you won't ever be with them, and the longer you keep the lie intact, the worse everything gets, until you start getting jealous, or blame yourself, or cut off ties altogether. After that, who is to say what will happen.
Good news, there's a dramatic reading of your fic.
Looks like your hard work paid off there, good job!
dat twist @_@
I thought you'd gone into the maudlin and trod, but nope! Excellent. :D
I actually never read sad fics and now I know why. But I listened to yours and aww I guess you write well if it hit me so hard.
i hate to be "that guy", but... smooth is one thing, but "soft" is not a word i would give to ice, unless we're talking about snow or maybe even shaved ice, just saying, lol.
okay, i'll give this to you straight, but no hurt feelings okay?
this was a good concept, but it kinda felt generic and rushed.
i hate to pull a Starwars scene as comparison, but remember in Attack Of The Clones in the elevator scene with Obiwan and Anakin, and while that was a weak scene trying to connect the audience to possible developments between those characters, that was more than what we got here, i'm sorry to say.
i don't know what i was expecting from a story that is less than 3K words, this could have been expanded into at least 10K words and worked.
i'm also a hard person to please with drama, it takes a lot of thought and setup, along with strong development and a believable premise with a serious mood, which you nailed at least half of that, so this isn't "bad".
i just think it could have been better and less generic, pure and simple.
i'm a minority here though, your "thumbs up" obviously show that people loved this (but then again, popularity doesn't always mean anything, My Little Dashie exists), in your defense, this is waaaaaaaaaay better than My Little Dashie (then again, 95% of anything is better than that generic drama spelling/grammar abomination).
in conclusion, there is nothing that i can say to convince you to redo and expand this story, since it's already popular and fan-approved, but in the off chance that you are ambitious enough and want to add more fluff and flavor and having a less generic and predictable epilogue (i figured out Lyra was dead within 2 paragraphs, though i appreciated the idea).
also, why was Lyra dead? if undecided, then i vote for suicide, that would make it all the more dramatic.
i wish i could provide more constructive criticism, but seriously, like, there is nothing i can say that wouldn't be like writing a whole another story.
there were no spelling or grammar issues, i give you kudos on that.
but i unfortunately, and what is really the only thing bugging me, is that i wanted more, i expected more from this story. i wanted flashbacks, REAL flashbacks, Hell, as cheap as MLP is with flashbacks 50% of the time, even Cadence and Twilight Sparkle had more of a flashback than this story ever had. well... not that it was good, i don't think i connected to Cadence and Twilight from "sunshine, sunshine, ladybugs awake"
but it was at least something specific, there is just too much mediocrity, ugh, i'm ranting, i'm done, i'm sorry, i'm just done, and watch as the fans eat me like sharks.
i neither liked nor disliked this story, but it should have been more.
Such emotion, many feels, very heartbreaking, wow.
AHHH feels.
The ending made me cry
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. Sorry for the late reply!
Yeah, that's kinda what I was going for
Cute Flutterpone to make up for feels?
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7946130 Awwwwww
Su cute
Beautiful. Heartbreaking, but beautiful.
Nice work!
I'm very surprised this wonderful story doesn't have more liked.