Hi, I'm Rainbow Stache47 and I like to write fanfiction. I love the Brony Fandom and my favourite ponies are Dashie, Fluttershy, and Derpy. I hope you enjoy my stories. /)
A little story I made long before I joined FIMFiction. Honestly, I'm not sure why I wrote this, other than to terribly ship FlutterMac. My writing has since improved, but I'm posting this just to have written at least a story.
I apologize to anyone who may read this.
Big Mac has to deliver pies to Fluttershy and their simple visit becomes much more. What is in store for these two ponies?
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Not great, but I've read worse.
I wouldn't necessarily say this is the worst story ever written. It's not that bad; it just needs a lot of work.
For one thing, the whole Fluttershy likes Big Mac and Big Mac likes Fluttershy thing gets dropped on us pretty much out of nowhere. There isn't enough of a build up to it. And I don't think Big Mac's characterization is done pretty well. I know on the show, he just says two words, but what we see here doesn't feel like what he would be like given what we do know about him. And I think I could tell where this was going with Sweetie Belle listening at the top of the stairs. Anyway, I know that you noted that your writing has improved since writing this. But if you ever decide to fix this up and make this into something, this is what I suggest you would do.
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Ok, thanks for tip.
3962401 You're welcome. It's what I do.
blind upvote for having a pair. enjoy!
It's not the worse, it's not even bad. Sure you have a wall of text here and there but the grammar seems legit and I don't mind putting accents on writing since it's part of the experience (I like accents by the way. Gives character.). There is only an insignificant amount of errors like spelling anxious as anioxs but none that made it bad.
I've read worse, a wall of never ending text that spans a page with a single paragraph full of typos, grammar errors and a crappy plot. I've read crack fics better than that. I dare not speak its name.
This fic though? Makes me curious. Maybe some work here and there, pacing the story a bit and adding some umpf in it could work wonders.
Just saying though.
Upvote for making me curious.
Great story 3962401, I hope you plan on finishing this, cause I'm a big fan of Fluttershy/Big Mac stories and look's like it will make an excellent addition to my favorites and you get an upvote 2.5/5 mustaches for now:
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Thanks.
I agree with everyone else. Far from terrible, it only has grammar mistakes but is an otherwise interesting story with potential. Feel free to continue this!
It's not so bad. I like it
The sad thing is that I've actually read stories worse than this that were genuinely meant to be taken seriously.....