Big Macintosh has been married to the farm his whole life, so it stands to reasoning that he never had time to spare for a mare. But when Applebuck Season arrives and Applejack's friends can't help, the Apple family is faced with a dilemma of deeper concerns. However, when Applejack recruits a few hired hands the answer to both problems appears.
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I absolutely loved it. The characters are well captured and the idea seems plausible in a way I didn't consider before.
This just leaves me wanting more, more, more!
This one is just awesome. Great characterizing, good pacing (props for letting things take time) and just all-around well written. I want more too!
I have to ask, … crap?
I don't exactly like how it ruins the flow.
what does this … / — stuff mean. its realy startin to bug me
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Huh, not something I ever noticed nor was notified about. My assumption is that when I copy and pasted these stories the scripts they were originally written in had trouble converting to the script used for the site. I posted this story forever ago when the site was still in it's first few stages, the textual editor at the time was very very poor, and it's why I didn't return to fimfiction until several months later. My apologies, though, for those symbols throwing everything out of whack. Never my intention.
Agh, the way you walk into cliches and then avert their catastrophic conclusions just before fully following through... I was going 'no, no, no...!' followed by a shaky breath of relief several times through this. Really thought Mac was going to do something drastic for a moment there.
Doesn't seem likely this'll get finished, but I'd still recommend it in a heartbeat.
Quite well done and I gave it a thumbs up. You handled the emotional aspects well, and expertly managed the tension about what Big Mac might do when outed. I do feel that the secret circulated too easily amongst the mane 6, but considering how Twilight failed to warn about Discord's betrayal in the season 4 finale, you sensed correctly that sometimes Twilight fails to communicate under pressure. The only critique I can give is that you don't need to do venacular as precisely as if you were writing a script for the show. Next time, give us enough to convince us it's AJ speaking (or whomever), then tone down the dialog to something close to the narrative voice with an occasional ain't or country-ism. Your readers will thank you. (Just passing on advice given me from my editor while working on galleys for publication.)