Most ponies assume that something is wrong with Ditzy Do's eyes. Theories range from a head injury to a genetic disorder to muscle damage behind her eye. The crueler folk suggest she's just retarded. Nicer ponies say it's just a party trick she never got tired of.
They're all wrong. They're all very, very wrong.
I discovered the truth one day in conversation with her. One eye would always look at me, and the other would wander. At least, I thought it was wandering. So while we were talking, I followed it. Goddess in heaven I wish I had not. Never follow the other eye. Ever. Because Ditzy Do's eyes work fine.
She's just watching something. That... thing that's always in the corner of our eyes. And if she looks at you with both eyes?
Goddess save you.
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Preread by BrastaAAura17, Chase Cosmicwing and dreamingnoctis. Cover art also by dreamingnoctis. Guy's a bro.
I'm shivering. Bring moar...
It's a nice concept, and I'm liking the style so far, but...
You've told us who/what it's about without actually giving us that story. I'm intrigued: please write more.
Creepy. I want Mowr!!!!!!!!!!
I am certainly intrigued at how this story will unfold.
My Lovecolt senses are tingling... I can feel the energies of Poe and Lovecraft coursing through the veins of this story, just as non-Euclidian geometry runs through the underwater city of R'yleh.
I haven't even BEGAN to read it, but that premise sends shivers down my spine... MY spine.... That is the first time this has happened in... well, since I was a kid and thought the boogieman was out to get me....
I wasn't going to read this, but the idea interested me. Now that I have read the first chapter, though, I've decided to give you a follow.
Now that is a well written story description. I am looking forward to more of this
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The random phrases in parentheses remind of Stephen King.(my favorite author.)
I am totally watching this!
So we have our first victim.
Mooooore........
MOUR MOUR MOUR!!!!!
The Elements are dicks once again. I like this story. These kind of stories make it easier for me to imagine punching their faces in.
Cool! I look forward to seeing what it is that haunts her vision.
3889348 The way I'm planning it right now (which is rare for me), it should be about Chapter 3-4 is when things go south. I believe in a bit of setup.
*sigh*
This is the third one I've seen tonight where you can read a whole chapter and still not know any more about what's going on. Sadly though, this is the first one I've ever seen where you don't know what's going on in the SECOND chapter, and I'm still kinda waiting for you to stop giving these "cliffhangers" (which aren't really cliffhangers because I still don't know what's going on) and actually get the plot rolling....
hmn...interestingly creepy and I like it...please continue...
The vibe coming off this story is something like a mix between Stephen King and H.P. Lovecraft.
I am not going to sleep very well tonight.
First one to view this particular chapter. I must say, very creepy. Sorta get a "Sixth Sense" vibe, but definitely on a far more spooky level than that. Looking forward to how these 'things', whatever they really are, continue to further torment poor Rose... all because she didn't follow Ditzy's rules on how to deal with them.
Huh, I believe this story might be cursed, because I swear to whatever deity you follow that I heard the most demonic voice scream that last line. Or maybe I'm just crazy.
On a completely unrelated note, the left side of my head itches, and I have no clue why.
This is awesome. Definitely loving the jeepy creeps.
Nice!
I really enjoy a good pony horror. Don't know why, but it gives me tingles.
Oh dear. Rose, what have you managed to get yourself in to?
Alright, finally got to the plot!
Interesting Horror story so far...
When at first, I thought of Angels... but then I realized this isn't a Doctor Whooves fanfic...
wow....this is just
Great chapter, really got the ol' monster encyclopedia feel to it, but there are some spelling and grammar errors, and the formatting at the top of the page doesn't look too stellar
As a fan of Lovecraft, I find this insanely entertaining. Excellently done, straight to my favourites.
I am a fan of horror fiction. My favorite author is Stephen King, and I also like H.P. Lovecraft.
I also ought to mention that maybe the reason I like horror novels so much is because I'm not scared too easily, and I want to see if I can get spooked. For example, my first Stephen King book was The Shining. I didn't think it was all that scary. Spooky, yes, but not a frightening as I thought it would be. Then I read Carrie. It was horrifying. I actually had to turn on a light for two nights after I read it.
I read this chapter. And guess what? The light is on.
Ooky spooky wooooooookyyyyy....
I love this story so far! please continue with it!
3960877 There should be a new chapter up tonight. Just waiting on my prereaders.
........it begins
Yipes.
No, Derpy! Don't get arrested! Run, you fool!
Oh shit... That's... I'm really cold all of the sudden...
I swear, if you scare the shit out of me, I will stab you with a fork.
Oh Rose...this just isn't your day.
Well, if she's fortunate, maybe everything will be bright sunshine and maple bacon donuts when she wakes up! No monsters or scary things anywhere in, or just out of, sight...
The problem with seeing in the fourth dimension is analagous to a flat paper man on his flat paper world. All looks normal to his sides which is all he knows. He can only see things not of his world by turning off the paper. If he turns too fast though, or too hastily, he will begin to spin. Like when you turn on your heels too fast and they slip out from under you. In and out of alignment with his paper world he will spin. And once that happens, there's no telling at what angle he will come to rest at. Without some way to correct or guide his rotation, the likelihood of perfectly aligning with his paper world again is next to nothing.
Though according to classic 4-dimensional geometry, when a mare has "rotated out" so-to-speak, the plane that is her axis of rotation will remain in the original 3-d space. So since Twilight isn't a mysteriously animated paper thin slice extracted from her midsection like with a scalpel, the above scenario probably isn't the case at all. It's more likely magic, and they don't gotta explain shit.
This is awesome-ly creepy. Do please continue writing it.
I feel like I've read something like this before.... maybe Lovecraft? Either way, suspenseful horror is terrible/wonderful for me, so keep it up!
Halp me!!!
I cant sleep because of the cover art!
(Not saying that its bad, its just COMPLETELY ABSOLUTELY INSTANTLY scary for me)
The description makes it worse!
4014630 You know the cover art is a jack 'o lantern, right? The description I can understand, but the cover art? It's just a pumpkin.
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Have you tried reading it in the dark and not knowing it was a jack o' lantern?
4016340 It's not 'a' Jack-o-lantern. It's 'my' Jack -o-lantern. From last Halloween.
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You did a good job of carving!
If you somehow are offended, (Because I think you sounded like you were) I didn't mean it!
4016991 Nah, I'm good.