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Meet Big Macintosh. The older brother of Applejack and AppleBloom. The only grandson of Granny Smith. Coltfriend of Rarity. Local apple farmer and, of course, the main character of the story!
He has it all, folks. A loving family, a beautiful marefriend, caring friends, and the best life he could ever had!
Nothing can go wrong, rihgt?
Crap, typo.
Nothing can go wrong, right?
Much better.
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What the hell. . .
It's like Macintosh has noticed he is inside a fictional story. And it seems that the story itself is starting to fall apart. Spike was dating Silver Spoon, and now it's Applebloom and nopony notices the shift.
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Nonsense!
Story's falling apart?
Already intrigued by the brain rape that will soon commence.
3865753
That's bad. Isn't it?
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LOL
Oh. I see where this is going... Big Mac.... The truth can hurt you...
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In my professional opinion. It's somewhere between not bad at all and the worst possible thing that could happen.
Edited to remove dickishness.
There's definitely some problems here that could use addressing.
The formatting is an issue: mostly a single line, then a space, then another single line, etc. The whole thing is rushed and details are sparse. Exposition is thrown out that has no relevance to the story at hand, and since it describes radical changes in the behavior of canon characters, that's very jarring. Characterization is pretty much nil.
The idea seems reasonably interesting, but it needs more work. More descriptions are needed, especially in terms of character actions. The pacing needs to be slowed down to give people a little time to take in what's going on before it shifts to another scene. Also, the ending of the chapter just comes out of nowhere. Dropping a few subtle hints earlier would help.
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You must be a bad reader then
3866570
Is that a compliment or criticism?
3866637
I'm talking about the danger of Macintosh peering through the veil of the fiction he's trapped in. Why are you talking critism or compliments?
3867002
Ha Ha HA. Youse a funny guy!
3866570
Oh well. Can't please everyone
3865557
Thanks for the motivation
3867004
Okay, now I'm confused, I think the story is good so far. What's wrong?
Is this a meta story?
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What truth?
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I don't follow
Whoa. . . That is some crazy shit
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Hah hah hah. You silly!
3875862
This is getting kind of creepy. Actors?
Is Macintosh the only real character in this world?
No need to actually answer that, it's just that this story is giving me a rather disturbing Patrick McGoohan from "The Prisoner" vibe.
I recommend checking it out, it's a great show.^^
3875950
Ha. You say silly things. You a funny guy!
why does this remind me of the movie "The Truman Show"? And I hope its just as good.
3874036 All the truth.....All of it.
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HA HA HA HA HA!
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I have no idea why you're laughing...Unless you're in my fandom......
Your powers of propaganda are vast.
My... God... My God in Heaven, this is brilliant! It's all been a Truman Show!
Oh... Dang Rarity actress. Have some babies. They're good for your heart.
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k, I'm talking like that Suri bitch...
I make the calls, mmkay?
F
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Hmm, make the Rarity have the babies. They raise personality, good character traits, and...
You know what? I just want some babies.
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We'll see about that...
Lol this is coming along nicely I can't wait to see where this go's
This story is starting to make my brain hurt ;3;
Also, DAMN YOU AUTHOR!!!!!! WHY ARE YOU DOING THIS TO MACINTOSH!?
Why use the real one!? You have an entire world full of ponies of your own!!!
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Then why don't youse make yer own story then?
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Good point. But just so we're clear I'm not bashing your story at all. I do like it, I just don't understand why you kidnapped the real Big Macintosh for a world full of fakes, or is that part of the plot to be revealed?
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Man you say crazy stuff.
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WHO THE F*CK PUT THIS OCTAVIA PICTURE HERE!?!?!?!?
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I feel like everything you put in that last reply is part of the answer
Or maybe I'm going crazy
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Probably the second choic
THAT'S IT. THE YOUTUBE GUY IS FIRED!
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So thats why my XBOX live friend named himself after Deftones...
3883794 its based off of it obviously
This is basically the Truman Story... I like it.
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Thanks.
This just keeps getting better and better.
Ooooooooh my aching brain. . . This is all kinds of Inception levels.
Although the part with Pinkie actor having a deep manly voice brought tears of laughter to my eyes XD
I'm also looking forward to the sequel and how you plan on getting revenge on Macintosh
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For the sequel, sompeony else will be part of it...
Thank you.
What do you mean revenge?
I never said that.