The captured Changeling sits despondent in the interrogation chair. Looking up, he sees what can only be his interrogator enter the room. A one way glass window holds Celestia and Luna, or at least, that is what the Changeling assumes. The interrogator sits down, rather uncomfortably. Apparently, he has not had much experience in dealing with Changelings; who had? The Changeling surveys his surroundings. Three white walls and one with the mirror and door. A table waits patiently in front of him while a light shines overhead. The Changeling is bound to the chair by his forelegs and wings. A faint humming sound suggests some kind of magic dampening field. The interrogator is an Earth pony, or as the Changeling designation system states, a norm. The interrogator opens his mouth to speak but two green eyes glare him into silence; he is clearly afraid of the Changeling. Overpowering his fear, the interrogator speaks.
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Interesting but you could use more subtle mind games.
The grammar of this made it confusing. Dialogue is properly done as: "blah blah," said.
Otherwise, intriguing.
3833680 Thank you for telling me. Could you give me any specifics?
3833445 Mind games, you say?
3834064 Grey Pegasus means that dialogue and the actions connected to dialogue should be on the same line. On another note, "changeling" shouldn't be capitalized, as it's the name of a species (you don't write "The Dog chased the Cat", you write "The dog chased the cat"). Finally, while not necessary, I would highly recommend writing in past tense rather than present tense.
All together, it should look like this:
3904227 Ah, I see your point about the spacing.
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I will fix the spacing as soon as I can. Thank you so much for the input.
Verbal interrogation is something of a lost art these days. While physical torture can prove just as effective, such as the use of stress positions and simple beatings, psychological methods are far safer. Your interrogator seems to be starting small, seeking basic information to break the changeling's will, a sound approach. The best bet though in concert with this would probably fall along the lines of sleep deprivation (assuming those creatures do sleep) or possibly stress positions. It would be interesting to see Palestinian hanging applied to a changeling's wings.
A good start, I am interested to see how this develops.
4011908 My good sir, I am shocked at the brutality you suggest ponies might utilize later in the story.
4011960 I merely offered what I would do were I in their place, nothing more.
This is pretty good!
4073012 Thanks!
Is this story dead?
Poor changeling.
4214058 Still kicking!
That was pretty hardcore...
Damn....
Spacing is still odd, but that's an easy fix.
ass....
The interrogator is giving Edward too much room to breathe. Sleep deprivation is one thing, but it ought to be combined with stress positions and white noise. That ensures faster results without increasing the risk of the subject expiring on you. Though if what he says is true, there is a tight time limit.
And now the interrogator turned badass
For some reason I can't help but wonder why the diamond dog is there...
Suddenly, a wild interrogator appears!
The wild interrogator uses BADASS!
It's super effective!
here we go
and the plot THICKINS!!! I love this story! can't wait for the next chapter.
And again months of waiting for next chapter :D?
sweet, mayhaps things get fubar a little bit
4573002 Thank you so much. I'm glad you're enjoying it!
Love that avatar by the way.
4574631 I don't know what that means but probably, yes.
4572866 Let's do this.
4573761 I certainly hope not. I think I have an idea about what happens next.
And let's hope I didn't get these responses mixed up!
4574786 How the tables turn. Possibly.
Ponies are sloppy in their interrogation. They allow the subject to control the situation and plant doubts. They attack the body only, not the mind. And their worst crime, placing POWs together in cells. Edward has proven unwilling to talk; putting a few of its comrades against a wall, blindfolded should help, assuming ponies have the guts to follow through. Otherwise, I'd recommend liquidation of the subject and moving onto to a new one. While every mind eventually breaks, the longer it takes to do so, the less reliable the information.
And for the record, FUBAR is military slang meaning F***ed up beyond all recognition. A situation which has deteriorated to the point that it is beyond salvageable. It certainly describes the interrogator's situation.
4574786 I Pity the lesser man who doesn't like it. :P
4575739 Okay, got FUBAR. Thanks.
As for ponies being sloppy in their interrogation, I find it unlikely they would have many opportunities in which to interrogate something. In the past, enemies were extremely powerful individuals but they were just that: individuals. The changelings represent an army that can't be blasted into extinction with the Elements so they would be one of the only enemies the ponies logically could interrogate. Just a thought, thanks very much for the thoughts and support I really appreciate it!
4574786 lol my bad. fubar = fucked/fouled up beyond all repair/recognition. Or something like that. its more of a military thing....i stole it from Full Metal Jacket
4578549 i didn't have to explain it
How dare someone take away my explanation
Ahhhhhh shizam! Stuff's starting to happen!
This story is live and kickin' ey? Well thats really bloody amazing and it couldn't have made my day anything else but utterly perfect! 11/10 for this so exquisite story that I just caan't have enough of. Hope it ends up in the featured box, it deserves it.
4600562 I am actually speechless right now. Thank you so much. I'm glad you enjoy it!
Well...
Shit.
An interesting premise, a sort of Changeling officer. Perhaps Edward was one of those observed wearing armour during the incursion. And, based on this new pony's name, I imagine this spectacle won't last much longer. If you are planning to use needles to affect nervous system responses, the agony should be unbearable. But then again, fate is a fickle thing.
Needler is a changeling... well this is just funny. XD
This is where things get interesting
I hope Edward gets to see this guy pay.
"a book of stars"? Starswirls journal? maybe maybe...
Chagelings attacked Canterlot first, so.....
I don't feel sad for Edward. *grabs popcorn*
So, the changelings stole the book of Starswirl, but for what? I don´t think they can use it the way Twight did.
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Yeah, but that probably isn't the only spell in that book.
5000950 CALLED IT!!!! well.... lets see if I was right... Another chapter!
5000950 I can think of one way, If the spell their looking for is in side.
may interrigator rip in piss. 11/10 would torture interrigator.
the mystery is great. Much suspense. Can't wait for what will happen next :D
YAY I DID IT! :P
Just read the whole thing so far. I like the premise of this. You get a like and a fave, because I want to see where this goes.
5093081 Good to hear you're enjoying it. Thank you!
5092959 WOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO
I might have missed something or gotten the timeline confused, but if the changeling's attacked Canterlot with the intention of stealing Starswirl's journal then why did they only get it from twilight?