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Prane


Aspiring writer, self-proclaimed hardcore gamer, adept of human psychology. Does not consider excessive pride for a vice.

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  • EArcane Equilibrium
    Plot against unicorns thickens! After unfortunate events of the last Nightmare Night, Trixie’s pursuit after the mysterious cult continues. Will she be able to find an ancient artifact while seeking revenge herself?
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This story is a sequel to Edge of Reason


Join Trixie, agent of the Conclave – an elite and covert congregation of unicorns sworn to protect ponies from magic… and magic from ponies, sometimes!

Sinister plot threatens magic in Equestria, and it is up to one boastful mare to stop it! After recovering a mysterious emerald from the Everfree Fire incident, Trixie will travel across the land, perform some awesome magic and even learn a thing or two about the magic of friendship!

She might also uncover a conspiracy that will make Equestria tremble… all in her unique, spectacular style!

Chapters (7)
Comments ( 27 )

Next time put indentations in the paragraphs. I sometimes loose my place or wind up re-reading the same line by accident

I like it. There are few errors but nothing major. I can't even remember them anymore^^

I wonder where this is going... I'm excited!^^

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Whoa, it took me a month to fix that indentations thingy in the first chapter, but it should be better now. Thanks for the advice! :twilightsmile:

DUN DUN DUUUUNNNNN!!!

How did I figure, that would happen:ajsleepy:

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What exactly do you mean? :rainbowhuh:

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Rarity raging. I was counting on it, and you delivered, sir!:rainbowlaugh:

By the way, thanks for the favorite!:rainbowkiss:

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Hell hath no fury like a woman scorned.
Also applies to ponies! :raritywink:

So this is it. :trixieshiftleft:
I hope you all found reading my story worthwhile. Feel free to express your satisfaction/dissatisfaction in coments! :twilightsmile:

MOONWARDEN?!! WHAT THE BUCK?!!

THAT NO GOOD TRAITOR!!:twilightangry2:

I'm going to guess that Moonwarden was the unicorn. I have no idea who the earth pony could be.

I was right. I should have known the earth pony was Scarface. And just when Trixie was starting to believe in trust. So, what happens next?

Oh god... Trixie pulling a Kanye. It's just a little too fitting.

The lack of articles (a, the, an, and so forth), as well as frequent slipping into present tense in narration, made this pretty painful to read. :twilightoops:

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Gah, tell me about it. :facehoof: Although this story has some good ideas (I think!), the general execution (grammar, wording, articles etc.) is terrible.
But, what can you do. Those were my very first steps into the world of writing stories, after all. I can only hope that I've learned something since then.

4500142 Indeed, I think you rather have.

A bit odd that my story-reading led me to this one after your later and better works, but there it is.

This chapter felt a bit rushed to me. I didn't mind, because it was mostly about things I don't usually read, but it still felt like thing happened rather fast. Did anyone else feel like that? Maybe I'm just used to reading stories where everything is slow.

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Heh, I'm surprised you've even found this story. It's an oldie (almost 3 years, whoa!) which I don't think I'll ever revise, so expect more rushed scenes and general issues with it. After that you're welcome to check out some better executed stories of mine. :twilightsmile:

Trixie, Trixie, Trixie. Complaining about how things are boring will just lead to a big incident in the future. Don't tempt fate :trixieshiftleft:. Then again, if you didn't, all this site would have would be Slice of Life fics :trixieshiftright:

That raccoon sure gets around after becoming Trixie's pet, just like the Cutie Mark Crusaders do.

I notice Trixie's all like:

:trixieshiftleft: Stupid Sexy Sparkle

I find it a little odd that the CMC watch somepony basically get killed and don't even seem affected. Sure, the stallion wasn't killed in front of their eyes, just knocked over in what would become certain death, but still.

I almost see Sunseeker as a double agent going off his attitude in this chapter. I guess I'll find out in later chapters.

I'm mildly surprised Trixie doesn't toss her identity aside and form a new one if her old one is supposedly (at least to her) 'tainted' by the Ursa Minor incident.

>Equestria Daily

I get it!

For apparently knowing about the cult's meeting out in the open, Sunseeker probably could have attempted to call for more back-up, unless Hoofington is so far away it would have taken too long for anypony else to come out.

A bit of a nice slice-of-life chapter, but it feels rather distracting compared to the general story. It's like you felt you needed to put in a 'Trixie makes nice with Ponyville' segment, and as a result it reads shoehorned in to what is otherwise an adventure/thriller fic.

Looks like the MacGuffin is vanished, gone to set up another sequel. Meanwhile if Moonwarden was a traitor they're gonna have to comb through the Conclave to make certain there are no more traitors, and Trixie is gonna have to actually learn that teleportation spell so she can go through the wall if a scenario like that happens again.

And the end. I suppose I'll read the sequel later today.

Don't be too freaked if your system notification window shows you have 10+ new comments on two several years old stories. That's just what I do, comment chapter by chapter (unless they're really freaking small chapters, anyways...)

I wanna see Twilight and the Main Six not know about the Conclave. And think she's up to something.

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Well Disney thought it was okay to do.

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