After an unfortunate spell, John Knox is trapped in Equestria, and everyone thinks he is there to destroy them.
A/N: Hahaha, it is done! My first Fic! All CONSTRUCTIVE criticism is appreciated.
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My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic, belongs to Hasbro, and was created by Lauren Faust.
I do not own My Little Pony. No copyright infringement intended. If I did own My Little Pony, Twilicorn would never have happened, and neither would Equestria Girls. I apologise to anyone who thought that it was a good film.
Chapters (3)
Are you typing this on an iPhone or something because it looks like your autocorrect's acting up.
Other than that, I can't say I've seen someone take this approach before.
So far you're kickin' ass, so keep it up
i like where this idea is going
John Knox really?
ok
like and a fav 4 u
I love this already! Keep up the good freakin' work!
3741218 Your suspicions have been confirmed, Yes, I am using an iPod, so I get a lot of Teilight's and ifs instead of ofs.
I am not using a computer, because my computer internet hates me, and REALLY doesn't like FiMFiction.
And thanks, didn't think anyone would like this.
3741573 Thanks. And yes, John Knox is my OC, random last name generator strikes again.
3742011 Thanks, for the support, I will try to update by the 12th, but I have school, and my school LOVES to give my homework...
3741218 Can you point out the autocorrect mistakes please, I can't find any,
And I am pleased people like this story, you will get a chapter very soon.
3742499
Jesus christ!
What country do you live in? It's 2 in the morning over here.
I'll tell you tomorrow.
Or later today
3742512 xD, I live in the UK. I uploaded this at 2 in the morning for me....
See ya later
good work man. can't wait to see where it goes. spelling is kind of weird in places.
3742596 Thanks, can you point out the spelling errors. I can't find any...
3742601
-three fillies fell on a pile on the floor on the doorstep.
choose floor or doorstep not both.
-The a brilliant idea came to her,
Then a brilliant idea came to her,
-Twilight Sparkle looked angrily down at the Pegasus on her floor. "Why do you have to keep crashing into my library?" she demanded.
That was a question, not a demand.
-But in have to deal with some stuff upstairs now, would you mind just leaving this here, for me to read later?"
But I have to deal with some stuff upstairs now, would you mind just leaving this here, for me to read later?"
-Twilight heard a sound from behind her, and looked around, to see Rainbow Dash come down from upstairs, holding a piece of paper with writing on it, excitedly.
use more than one period in that sentence.
-"Phew, I thought I was going to have to report this to the run was or something..."
I think you mean princess instead of run.
that's all i'm seeing for now. might want to cool it on the commas a bit. still a good story though.
3742723 Wow, you have managed to embarrass me. I can't believe Princess was replaced with run... I am going to edit this NOW
Thanks
3742757 no probs. everybody makes mistakes. keep up the good work
3742763 The edits have been made!
3742723
*she questionmanded.
PS. i love your avatar
3742780
except the fact that there is no cover art
3742801 Yeah, about that...
How do you get the cover art to work?
3742821 i have no idea, check the FAQ maybe there's something in there?
3742842 I probably won't bother with cover art actually, you don't need it
3742799 Ty. Yours is also quite memorable.
lol questionmanded.
wow! This is really good!
3743943 You're being sarcastic right?
Whoops, I believe I just unpublished the chapter, and re-published it...
3743964 What? What's wrong with the story?
3743999 I'm surprised people like it.
im not being sarcastic when i say that i REALLY want to read any other chapters that you come up with for this
3746477 Thanks
Chapter 2 is about a quarter of the way being written, it has been very enjoyable to write so far, and I think that you will probably enjoy it too. May I ask, what would you end up happening to John Knox? I already have a basic plot, but I can still take ideas if you want them in the story, and I like them.
well...right now the ponys have bad impressiens of humans and so think hes a monster...i could see someone trying to be diplomatic instead of KILL THE BEAST!!!! maybe one of the crusaders would go serching for him in the forest to capture the "monster" after hearing about it or something?
Luckily for you guys, I have no homework! So, if I can actually get round to doing something productive today, you guys may have chapter 2 by tomorrow like I said. I will try and update the story every 5 days.
Chapter 1: 7th Jan
Chapter 2: 12th Jan
Chapter 3: 17th Jan
And so on....
3769294 Well, it may be a little late, as it's 20 past midnight and I'm getting kind of tired. Will hopefully get it finished by tommorow.
Brilliant
3778717 You or anypony else got some awesome idea for the rest of the plot. And what do you think John's debt should be.
If you answering this, don't answer a day before I upload the next chapter, I need time to write...
3782547
This is one of those stories that has to be given a little time before you start asking for ideas.
You haven't given us enough to go on for us to give you good idea to go off of.
Give it two or three more chapters and you'll probably get some feedback.
Why thank you Celestia for getting me out of that terrible BEAR situation! Thanks for the PRISON bt dubs. THAT'S EXACTLY WHAT I THINK ABOUT WHEN I ASK FOR HELP! Oh gee what else fits into the "help me" category. OH! Forgot about them scientists, really endears me when I'm compared to an animal. Ty for the help Tia don't know what i'd have done if you weren't there.
Wanna know what i'd do in this situation? Measure celestias height say she's too small to be a horse and just qualifies as a large pony. There deal is now null.
http://s29.photobucket.com/user/werewolf2000ad/media/467820-20celestia20drawing_guide20height_chart20human20twilight_sparkle.jpg.html
http://derpicdn.net/img/2013/3/30/282916/full.png
this picture relates because horses start at 14.2 hands not 14. Just under. Shes a PONY princess not a horse princess. Slip out of this situation dammit! Don't be a doormat!
also you need to show us what kind of character the protagonist is before asking for ideas. otherwise we'll just be firing blind.
P.S. don't let his character be "bitch" like so many human fics before you.
3811373 Lol. Unfortunately, the debt plays a fairly big part of next chapters plot. Which leads to Celestia having fun with Siri...
And until further notice, Celestia is a horse, which may end up with some comedy.
I should be publishing Chapter 3 later today, maybe, as I have finally done my homework/revision.
Don't worry though, John's not gonna a bitch about everything. He'll be fairly nice, probably, maybe, maybe not...
3811624 not bitch as in a terrible person. I meant bitch as in a supplicant, subservient punching bag. Cuz honestly I've gotten tired of main characters who just shrug off shit like that. I mean is he really not going to be pissed at her for taking a deal like that seriously? There was no verbal agreement and her actions did not endear her to any kind of protection.
also this has been bugging me. The princess knew he could talk. Why didn't she tell the scientists that?
3812842 Ah, well something's gonna happen to Celestia...
But not yet...
And, for Royalty, human intelligence is taboo. So she can't talk about it. You will find out more soon...
I can't just tell you guys the whole plot...
3812942 then I suppose i'll wait.
cya when you update
3813555 Update! For some reason, it tells me there are only 7k words when there are obviously 10k
You sir, have left me on a cliffhanger on which I really dislike you for, but also I respect you for doing so. I do enjoy this writing of yours. Please continue this and may the king and queen of equestria be with you.
3813828 *Innocent face* Cliffhanger, which cliffhanger. It wasn't me. You have the wrong person. Leave me alone.
This felt a bit rushed.
Well, because you say I can't make fun of the way you speak, I shall procede to racial slurs in its stead you crazy kraut cropper. (WWII reference)
3814598 Yeh, I wrote most of it last night...
I will try to make next chapter longer, but no guarantees.
One word... Rushed
3843415 Yeh, I agree. I really wanted to make the chapter longer, but I suppose I did rush it. The funny thing is, when I had finished , I was convinced that I'd written around 8,000 words and I was really proud of myself. Then, I saw it said 2000 and whatever, and I was really confused because it had felt like I'd written loads...
Anyway, I probably won't be releasing the next chapter today, as I am working on either; a Fic about Twilight and an Otter, or a Crossover with Charlie and the Chocolate Factory...
Sorry...
:( I even have to edit my comments...
3844292 twilight and an otter? This I gotta read!
3844651 Unlucky, I am just finishing the Chocolate factory one, but I will try to finish the otter one soon... It is totally random.
You may have realised that I haven't updated for a VERY long time. The truth is, I'm not really in a writing mood at the moment. However, this does not mean that this will be On Hiatus, it just won't be updated for about another week at the most.
Planned Updates:
Is it Really Fiction?:
[1]: Edit Chapter 2
[2]: Edit Chapter 3
[3]: Publish Chapter 4
Twilight and The Otter: (Currently not published)
[1]: Publish Chapter 1
Randomanous
3860423
Well, this is disappointing. I was really excited for an update