It isn't a surprise that moving a first-rate magic student to a tiny city would result in mayhem. Find out about one pony whose engineering and tenacity are needed to keep the city from falling apart.
Author's Note:
Aside from the first one, which sets the stage, each chapter is intended to stand alone and is directly inspired by an episode. I intend to write more, but it's episodic nature allows me to grant it "completed" status.
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I'm really liking this story but the episodes are a bit short in my opinion. Well short might be the wrong word, they only show things that are necessary and I would like to see more than that. If you write a bit more about Cogneatos personal life it would be great, I know he isn't exactly an extroverted pony but he probably still had a welcome to Ponyville party courtesy of Pinkie Pie and it would have been nice to see it.
However I'm guessing you mostly intended this story to be an explanation of Ponyvilles quick repairs while extending on the episodes and that's fine, but it makes it feel a bit too much like an explanation rather than a story to me (the exception being your Dragonshy episode that focused on his fear of public speaking instead on the actual episode (it's also coincidentally the longest chapter excluding the introduction)).
tl;dr I liked it but let us get to know the character better.
Very cute fun. In some spots I'd recommend more description but they're still very fun. They feel a bit short and rushed in spots and not enough explanation of the gaps in between but still a very solid fic. Bravo
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Thank you so much for your feedback! I definitely consider this story a work in progress. As I've written more, I have given more thought towards character and less towards plot. The Dragonshy episode was the epitome of that so far. I think it's time I revisited Cogneato.
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You're so sweet! I agree I need to work on my descriptions a bit more. These chapters may feel rushed because I write them on my lunch break over the course of a week and revise them over the next. It helps me focus on what is important and be a teensy bit less verbose.