A mysterious force send Gohan and Videl to Equestria, where they start their new life working at Applejack's. Everything is completely normal until the Cutie Mark Crussaders found about Gohan's power, so they force the young saiyan to train them to obtain a super cool Cutie Mark in martial arts and participate in the most famous torunament of martial arts of all Equestria; the Budokai Tenkaichi
This is a translated version you guys, my original is posted in Spanish, my mother language. If you speak Spanish you can find the original here. It even have an epilogue about a battle between Tirek and Gohan (unfortunately untranslatable)
Chapters (16)
I'm waiting for Gohan to tell them about his ability to turn super saiyan
I favorite any dbz story to come to this site. Very few are good. Please do not disappoint.
I knew one of them was going to use the kamehameha wave.
A fair lot of mistakes but good nonetheless. Can't wait for gohan to transform. Keep it up.
WHERES THAT SPANISH VERSION THOU SPEAK OF WE'LL BE MORE THAN PLEASED TO READ THIS SO CALLED SPANISH VERSION
I still believe gohan is stronger than goku. He has the level of SSj2 without going to SSj2, so if he went SSj2 he would be stronger than goku's SSj4 by some.
you need an editor. your grammar is bad at times, you misspell other things at times and sometimes you have to look twice to understand what you tried to say...still good though. other than that, keep up the work
Fun chapter but so many errors crystal "hearth"?
3578299 if he cared to train, yes. Then again he went super saiyan against Baby and Bills & lost- badly.
As of the point he is here, Gohan hasn't mastered his power yet. He has the POTENTIAL to be stronger than Goku. He hasn't realized that potential yet.
Good story so far, I have to agree with Rarity, it seems Gohan absorbed some of the Ginyu Forces idiocy by Recoom pounding it in to him on Name. Now for some friendly criticism, I suggest dropping the Mr./Miss prefix when Go an or Videl addresses a Ponyville resident particularly the Mane 6, simply because after the first week or so I'm sure they'd insist that Gohan and Videl not be so formal with them. By that same token the proper way for a martial arts student to address their teacher is with the prefix Sensei. Sorry for the long winded comment, I hope you find useful.:twilightsmile
The amount of typos and grammatical errors in this story is OVER 9000
But it was enjoyable all the same
3494741 The Spanish version is on fanfiction.com
Interesting premise, but it's in dire need of an experienced editor. You seem to have great difficulties with proper tenses. Am I correct in assuming that English isn't your first or even second language?
There are some groups dedicated to helping writers find editors for their stories. I'm sorry that I can't offer my own services as I doubt I would be able to catch all of the errors, due to complete lack of experience in these things.
Aww... Ultimate gohan doesn't use his saiyan transformations though... I was hoping to see him open up a can of some SSJ2 whup-ass later in the story!
More please.
Majin buu has 2u' s not o' s. It may seem like I'm nitpicking but it's just something I needed to say.
Yay a chapter!
Oh god...the CMC shenanigans are going to be OVER NINE THOUSAND!
To be honest, I think this is going a tad too fast, but nevertheless I am enjoying this anyway.
Brings back fond memories of when Goku and Krillin first entered their tournament. Good times, good times.
FUUUU-SIOOOON HA!
Yay more chapters
This ≠These
I really hope u make luna & celestia fuse
The only thing I seriously dislike about almost any fanfic that includes DBZ is that the Z-Warriors always receive a major handicap in therms of strength and speed.
Vegeta could blow up a PLANET with a power level of 15k, Goku could move so fast that any attack seemed to move right through him on Namek. Sombra wouldn't even have time to think of casting a spell in retaliation to an attack from any of the Z-Warriors if the handicap wasn't in place.
But enough of my QQing. It is good to see that you're going at it again, it was a long wait but I enjoyed it non the less
Aw so short I was hoping that Sombra would somehow obtain buu cells or freesias power to increase his own then maybe a fusion of Princess Luna and Princess Celestiaand more battling
I know, but I wanted to write a battle and if I kept the Z-warriors full power and that would be the end of the story. Too short and too boring for my readers 4790471
4790873 I know. It would require an approach that the Z-Fighters couldn't use their strength to solve, despite having it.
4790873 That's what makes DBZ crossovers so hard to write. Goku took bullets to the head without any problems at the age of 12. He has only gotten stronger after that. That puts pretty bad limits to adventure crossovers with any Z-fighters. That made me curse for a moment a couple of chapters ago when Goku fell on Sombras attack. You gave no reason as to why Sombra had the time to blink with Goku attacking him, much less the time needed to cast a spell. That might have work at the start of DB Goku, but after his first training session atop Karins tower Sombra would have been crying over his broken horn before he got the first spark out of it.
I'll try to concentrate on the edits, but let's just say that I have had quite a few distractions lately.
4794201 Let’s face guys: any serious battle between any MLP villain against any warrior of DBZ (with the obvious exception of Krillin and Yamcha) will end before it even started, so this power decrease are necessary if we want to our story have a climax. Just saying…
4794787 Can't really argue with that, now can I? That's the reason why making DBZ crossovers be anything but slice-of-life trying to fit in figs is so hard.
Great story all the way around.
Can we have a sequal?
The story was awesome, I really liked it, but your transation has a lot of grammar errors amigo.
Empieza a revisar tus errores.
This is cool!
please a sequel?
This is awesome
4794201 But doesn't Goku tend to want to challenge himself though, want to face his opponent at their strongest. Why else would he let his enemies power up as they do so often?
Best DBZ story ever will there be a sequel maybe with Trunks and Goten this time
As you said in your notes English is not your native language. However I think your doing an amazing job so far.
True there are errors but you will get better as you go.
XD I think you mean Cheerilee?
Twilight and Rainbow are gonna learn the Fusion Dance!?
SUPER SANDWITCH!
You need to learn the difference between forgive and forget.
this was a good story plenty of grammar errors but ill chalk that up to translation. over all story was maybe too fast passed but not so much that it confused the reader. I liked the use of the cmc and the fusion. Also really liked that goku and vegeta stayed OUT of the fight and you didn't sacrifice their character in order to make it happen. however i feel like at least goku (as it's his son who was fighting) would have stuck around to observe. I would like to see a return of Rainbow Sparkle and the cmc in a sequel. Maybe a follow on the cmc to try and further their training. (kinda wanna see piccolo put them through the ringer) or maybe a case where rainbow and twilight are forced to fuse permanently. (maybe an alt end solution to tirek or even frieza) Back to this story though good combination to action and slice of life doesn't feel rushed and an honestly convincing ending and explanation on how it all started.
Well done.
GO SUPPPPAAAA SAYIAN!!!!
:) good job so far. you have my support. i have oen request unponyfy
:D keep going
cheack pls
>>cobeoe it was orginialy in spanish.