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Bubbleshy


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Saiyan in Equestria!
My name is Blood Cry. I don't have fur, a cutie mark, hooves, or a snout. The Doctor said I am a hairless ape. Well, hairless minus the mane on my head. Although, like a pony, I do have a tail! Except it's a monkey's tail. All I know is I came from the stars...

I will add important characters as I go. I know for a fact that Celestia and Shining will be in this later.
Cover photo is "Kanca Late" by kjstyles2x-treme on Deviant Art.

Chapters (4)
Comments ( 25 )

I knew it its a super sayian!

I wish you luck on your SiE fic! And welcome it to the rest of the DBZ fics of Fimfiction!

Don't fuck this up!:twilightangry2:

Too many good SiE's fuck shit up! Be different!

Edit: Read it. It looks good. I would love to read more. As for your request for an editor, as long as you use google docs, then I'd be willing to edit for you.

3064481 I'm hoping not to fuck up! The story is good, it's been molding in my head for the past half a year to a year now. Now I just need to put it into words that will carry it well! :applejackunsure:

I'm using Gdocs, and I would love to send you the copies. I'm almost done with Ch2, but I have to go to an on-call this morning. I'll finish it asap and send you the link. :pinkiecrazy:

3064931Sweet. I'd love to help edit for you.

It looks good so far man:twilightsmile:

keep up the good work:pinkiehappy:

3113281 I'm glad you're enjoying it so far! :twilightsmile:

What website did you go to to create your Saiyan OC in the coverart?

PS: Will Fave the story so i can read later.

Comment posted by Bubbleshy deleted Mar 13th, 2014

3920754 Technically I "stole" this from someone on Deviantart. :twilightsheepish:

I asked for permission, but he never replied, so I picked it up and gave him credit in the description.
Not sure if he vectored it, or actually drew it. He has more! He might say on one piece, but good luck on asking him.
In honesty, this doesn't look like my Saiyan, but it's as close as it's going to get. :rainbowlaugh:

Haven't read the story, but I find it funny that, in your summary, the one time "Hairless monkey" would have been appropriate to use, you didn't use it. What I am referring to is that, in many HiE stories, ponies will call humans "Hairless monkeys" while "Hairless ape" would be more appropriate. For the most part, monkeys have tails and apes do not. Your OC has a tail, hence he is a hairless monkey, yet you called him in ape... My sense of humor is odd.

4125395 Nice catch! :ajsmug:

I did that on purpose. I'm a little overenthusiastic when it comes to DragonBall, so when it came to the nickname I decided against the whole monkey angle. Mainly because I always found Freeza overused the whole "Saiyans are stupid, filthy monkeys" line. That, and there are more facts separating a monkey and an ape than just the tail. In all reality, Saiyans aren't hairless monkeys, but tailed apes. Especially when you consider the fact their tails can be cut off and their balance is kept unlike any other animal that is born with a tail. (At least the last I checked it didn't screw Goku up the first time)

Hell, now that I think about it, I'm gonna get deeper into Ch4 and add in those little tidbits and bring out that nickname of the "hairless ape." After all, there's going to be plenty of "stupid, filthy monkey" name calling when this story is coming towards its end! :raritywink:

4125433

At least the last I checked it didn't screw Goku up the first time

Actually, in Dragon Ball, when he first turns into his oozaru state, (called great Ape in english dub, but literally translates to Great monkey) during the first Shenron summoning of the series, he gets his tail cut off by Yamcha and Puar (in the form of scissors). After awakening, Goku has very impaired balance, but adapts to it by the next episode.

Especially when you consider the fact their tails can be cut off and their balance is kept unlike any other animal that is born with a tail.

More of an aside, but many animals can regain their balance after losing their tails. Some dog owners remove the tails of their dogs in a process called "docking" for instance, and these dogs can still live perfectly happy lives. Cats can also live fairly well after the removal of their tails, the surgery being called a caudectomy, though it's a bigger deal for them and is only done for medical purposes instead of aesthetic ones like in the case of dogs.
Don't feel the need to change your story, I'm not trying to tell you to do that, just giving an impromptu lesson. The more you know and all that jazz. Well anyway, happy writing.

4126023 Yeah, I was kind of thinking of all that when I posted the comment. Minus the Goku bit. It's been a while since I watched DB and I only watched it once through. To counteract what you said though, yes animals do adjust to the sensation of no longer having a tail. But unlike everything else the Saiyan's tail grows back, randomly and without warning, throughout their upbringing. Hell, Goku got used to the fact that his tail would be gone and return all the time throughout DragonBall. Most animals would be lucky to get a second chance at that.

Firm Roots is lucky that Bloody cry is a little kid and doe not know his full power
or this would happen:http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=i1cCxGOPCXg

:derpyderp2:

oh Firm Roots you moron :facehoof:

wonder when bloody cry will......

SNAP:pinkiecrazy:

4170844 *Posts my favorite kid Goku scene of all time* :derpyderp1:

You and me are gonna get along JUUUUST fine! :pinkiecrazy:

If ya want, I could help out... kinda like a collab, since I've been wanting to write a story with a saiyan in it for a while now. and my character could be the push needed to help get the whole thing going.

4364447 It's not really an issue of ideas. Trust me, I've got the whole thing planned out, and it's going to be a good 30+ chapters or so (if it's not continued into other books). It's an issue of actually getting motivated to write. Like, in general! I've got this story, my main story on here, and then I have a series of books that I want to write before I die. I have the ideas for all these stories, and they're always buzzing in my head and wanting to get out; I just don't want to physically write! :rainbowlaugh:

To answer your question, though, I would love to do a collab with ya on another story. I'm great for ideas (or the beginnings of ideas), and maybe someone pestering me to help out will get me to actually write on my other ideas. :pinkiehappy:

4367404 Awesome! Cuz I'm already working on a second story alongside my Angels Of the Empresses story.

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