I never expected that Vinyl Scratch was the original head "Buttler", I do wonder if Octavia Melody was also a maid?
I think those two will be part of Twilight's marem along the other girls of the mane 6, Barb, Photo Finish (and her team), Mayor Mare, Lyra Heartstrings and Sweetie "Bon-Bon" Droops, but mostly definetly I can't wait for Celestia and Luna to join her herd
3579361 No... that's what he left Blueblood, dood.
3579398 Sorry about that, dood... but the others are coming, I assure you.
3579418 Thanks, dood... I was under the fear that I made her too... radical when it comes to animals, dood.
3579485 The story is going to state that Octavia and Vinyl don't know each other at all, dood. And the actual harem itself hasn't been finalized by me yet, dood.
3579486 , dood. SHe just wants her sister to be happy,... with said sister's dick up her dragon pussy.
3579495 Next chapter... Twilight offically loses her penile virginity... and I will say this, dood... Barb will be pissed.
3579652 She was just being protective of her big sister, dood It's a little sister's duty to take care of her big sister's erections... or something like that, dood... Where did I hear that before?
Fluttershy was great here. Can't wait to see Vinyl. The only misstep, and this is a minor quibble, was the Mayor Mare scene. I just don't see Twilight accepting a sex slave. The first thing I'd expect her to say is, "Nope, you are not my property. You'd best put your clothes on."
Glad that Uncle Silver didn't touch Fluttershy. At least he had some limits.
3579845 It is an reference to Prinnies, an race of monsters from the Disgaea Franchise, basically they are human souls that did something bad, so they have to work to gain the oppurtunity to reincarnate, the ones whose crimes were the least awful work in paradise and the one who did worse things work in the Netherworld, also they are required to be in an penguin form that for some reason makes it so that they are unable to finish an sentence without saying "Dood"
3580120 Sorry about that, dood... Prinny rules and all.
And you don't need a doctor to get pancakes in the sun... you need a plumber or at the very least... a roofer, dood.
3580128 Yea... I coulda done that part better, dood. But it could be that the Mayor likes to act that way and Twilight didn't exactly accept her as a Sex Slave either, merely shrugging that part off as she would rather deal with more important matters, dood.
3580170 Too late for me, i already did some stuff that will definately lead me to the Netherworld and i mean really grimdark stuff, for example the worst crime i have ever commited was when i jaywalked once two years ago, i still have nightmares about how i could have done something so low
3580298 I do feel shame, but do not worry, i have just finished compliling an list of every bad deed i have ever done and i am going to fix them to see if my karma goes up. Also is it bad that those animals had an better lifestyle than mine? Because i sure as hell do not have an chef cooking meals for me, although fortunately Twilight made the animals learn their place.
3580120 About the "dude" part, he is just imitating an race of demons called Prinny from the Disgaea franchise, they are an race that for some unexplained reason have an verbal tic of saying the word Dood in every sentence, and as you can imagine an race that keeps saying dood is considered annoying and they are the most abused demons in the Netherworld(to the point that Heaven itself takes pity on them)
3580364 I know but i am jealous that the animals had an personal chef when i do not even have one despite I being an GOD...granted i am the god of germs so i am not that powerful(in fact that i am more at mid-boss levels of power...) but you would still think that an god would have an chef.
3580578 I understand why you would not know about it though, Disgaea is not that popular, the only reason i know about it is because i like turn-based strategy games and Disgaea is one of the best series in that genre.
Okay. So we met Fluttershy and Mayor Mare. I wasn't too surprised by Mayor Mare's attitude, but Twilight's reaction seemed somewhat subsided. Twilight and Fluttershy interaction, however, is very spot on. I am shocked that Fluttershy actually drives. If Twilight does get laid next chapter (and it's not with Barb), I expect Barb to try to kill the offender and/or curse Twilight out right then and there while spilling how she feels for Twilight, as well as Twilight's secret. I will wait until we read Vinyl's side of the story before figuring out how much trouble Rarity will be in. In any case, she can pretty much kiss her dream of being a designer bye-bye...unless she swallows more than just her pride.
3580900 Your scenarios of how Barb would react to Twilight having sex with someone other than her has me perplexed, dood.
And it was the best I could think up at the moment for how Twilight would react to Mayor Mare... and it sounded alright to me, but others apparently didn't like it too much, dood.
3580962 It might be just me, but I was expecting more of a reaction from Twilight. I'm not sure what, but something. Then again, Fluttershy interrupted them, so I can't say what else would have happened. As for my feelings for Barb's reaction, it' pretty obvious Barb more than just loves her sister. She wants to be intimate with her. Plus, she probably been trying to bang Twilight for the longest. If Barb finds out Twilight banged some other pony, especially one she just met, I expect Barb to be heartbroken. In which case she will either act out of jealousy and/or betrayal (in her mind). Either way, she won't be thinking clearly. I may be wrong (wouldn't be the first time and won't be the last), but that's what I think.
'Nother awesome chapter dood. Gotta love Fluttershy in this... though I DO want to see Twilight interact more of the mwne six, I can wait for that though. Anything you write I'm sure I'll love. Keep it up dood!
3582001 Thanks, dood. Also... I'm sorry I deleted your post with all of your corrections on it, dood. As much as they help me out ALOT.... they are usually ginormous, dood.
Says a lot about my grammar and excessive use of 'wanna', dood.
3582098 That time will come, dood. When the other Mane6 finally pop out of the ground to see Twilight with her cock out and think "I want a taste" and then get fucked by the purple mare, dood.
Can't really do that as much as I want in a story where I want to limit my clop content, dood.
3582111 best comment is best. And really, where ever you take this story I'm happy to ride along. Love your writing, y'know? So awesome job 'n all that.
Eh, it's an alright chapter...But I really want some contact between Twil and the other girls, not just Barb.
wow, i'm liking the switch up with vinyl and rarity. also, you didn't butcher the fluttershy thing at all. i felt it was just fine.
MOAR!
please
I never expected that Vinyl Scratch was the original head "Buttler", I do wonder if Octavia Melody was also a maid?
I think those two will be part of Twilight's marem along the other girls of the mane 6, Barb, Photo Finish (and her team), Mayor Mare, Lyra Heartstrings and Sweetie "Bon-Bon" Droops, but mostly definetly I can't wait for Celestia and Luna to join her herd
I love ya barb.
And so Twilight is getting herself settled in properly.
Bring on the crazy anthro dick-girl horse-sex!
3579361 No... that's what he left Blueblood, dood.
3579398 Sorry about that, dood... but the others are coming, I assure you.
3579418 Thanks, dood... I was under the fear that I made her too... radical when it comes to animals, dood.
3579485 The story is going to state that Octavia and Vinyl don't know each other at all, dood. And the actual harem itself hasn't been finalized by me yet, dood.
3579486 , dood. SHe just wants her sister to be happy,... with said sister's dick up her dragon pussy.
3579495 Next chapter... Twilight offically loses her penile virginity... and I will say this, dood... Barb will be pissed.
Not bad at all. I have fun reading these on Google Docs, and I am enjoying the story.
3579583
Well, Barb has been kind of obnoxious this chapter, so, GEWD.
3579652 She was just being protective of her big sister, dood It's a little sister's duty to take care of her big sister's erections... or something like that, dood... Where did I hear that before?
3579631 Thanks, dood.
Note to everyone: I deleted the Blog post with the Chapter 4 link on it, dood. Just so ya know.
hey make a butler be like Sebastian from black butler though no demon powers but still awesome
why do you insist on misspelling the word dude in the authors notes?
3579833 I'm sorry, dood... I have no idea who Sebastion is, or know what Black Butler is.
3579845 Prinny Rule Number 1: All lines must have the word 'dood' in them, dood.
You're welcome dood. However you may want to take one last look through your chapter again, a few grammatical errors still remain.
3580063 Aw man, dood.
to me fluttershy was spot on
Aside from the copious amounts of uncommon "dude" spelling irritating my OCD, great so far.
Also, how will we get the doctor to put pancakes inside the sun without using a jar of jam?
Fluttershy was great here. Can't wait to see Vinyl. The only misstep, and this is a minor quibble, was the Mayor Mare scene. I just don't see Twilight accepting a sex slave. The first thing I'd expect her to say is, "Nope, you are not my property. You'd best put your clothes on."
Glad that Uncle Silver didn't touch Fluttershy. At least he had some limits.
3579845
It is an reference to Prinnies, an race of monsters from the Disgaea Franchise, basically they are human souls that did something bad, so they have to work to gain the oppurtunity to reincarnate, the ones whose crimes were the least awful work in paradise and the one who did worse things work in the Netherworld, also they are required to be in an penguin form that for some reason makes it so that they are unable to finish an sentence without saying "Dood"
3580120 Sorry about that, dood... Prinny rules and all.
And you don't need a doctor to get pancakes in the sun... you need a plumber or at the very least... a roofer, dood.
3580128 Yea... I coulda done that part better, dood. But it could be that the Mayor likes to act that way and Twilight didn't exactly accept her as a Sex Slave either, merely shrugging that part off as she would rather deal with more important matters, dood.
3580141 I became a prinny by writing clop so... don't write clop unless you want to be a prinny bitch, dood.
3580170
Too late for me, i already did some stuff that will definately lead me to the Netherworld and i mean really grimdark stuff, for example the worst crime i have ever commited was when i jaywalked once two years ago, i still have nightmares about how i could have done something so low
3580163
Prinnies forever. Also, Disgaea on PSP Vita! Too much of a time sink.
What I like is that you are keeping the clop to a minimum. Too many stories are weakened by inserting it unnecessarily.
3580242 Shame on you, dood.
3580280 I don't play much Disgaea these days... busy writing, lurking, watching, and playing on my DS, dood.
3579674
Barb has all the mannerisms of a yandere-in-training.
3580298
Same here dood, same here. 3DS, Phoenix Wright Dual Destinies!
3580301 Yeah really, dood
3580298
I do feel shame, but do not worry, i have just finished compliling an list of every bad deed i have ever done and i am going to fix them to see if my karma goes up.
Also is it bad that those animals had an better lifestyle than mine?
Because i sure as hell do not have an chef cooking meals for me, although fortunately Twilight made the animals learn their place.
MORE PLEASE!
3580346 I just thoguht that Fluttershy would try to spoil the animal kingdom, dood.
3579583 nah, i can easily imagine her being that crazy if there's no one around to keep her in check.
3580163
It's all good. I don't mind the odd spelling
3580120
About the "dude" part, he is just imitating an race of demons called Prinny from the Disgaea franchise, they are an race that for some unexplained reason have an verbal tic of saying the word Dood in every sentence, and as you can imagine an race that keeps saying dood is considered annoying and they are the most abused demons in the Netherworld(to the point that Heaven itself takes pity on them)
3580364
I know but i am jealous that the animals had an personal chef when i do not even have one despite I being an GOD...granted i am the god of germs so i am not that powerful(in fact that i am more at mid-boss levels of power...) but you would still think that an god would have an chef.
3580552
Ah, that makes sense. I had no idea what that stemmed from
3580578
I understand why you would not know about it though, Disgaea is not that popular, the only reason i know about it is because i like turn-based strategy games and Disgaea is one of the best series in that genre.
3580593
Yeah. I prefer realtime combat. or strategy.
Mostly something like either halo, Warframe, or Starcraft.
i'm geussing vinyl liked her uncle because he was accepting of vinyl being a lesbian?
3580785 You'll find out, dood.
Okay. So we met Fluttershy and Mayor Mare. I wasn't too surprised by Mayor Mare's attitude, but Twilight's reaction seemed somewhat subsided. Twilight and Fluttershy interaction, however, is very spot on. I am shocked that Fluttershy actually drives.
If Twilight does get laid next chapter (and it's not with Barb), I expect Barb to try to kill the offender and/or curse Twilight out right then and there while spilling how she feels for Twilight, as well as Twilight's secret.
I will wait until we read Vinyl's side of the story before figuring out how much trouble Rarity will be in. In any case, she can pretty much kiss her dream of being a designer bye-bye...unless she swallows more than just her pride.
3580900 Your scenarios of how Barb would react to Twilight having sex with someone other than her has me perplexed, dood.
And it was the best I could think up at the moment for how Twilight would react to Mayor Mare... and it sounded alright to me, but others apparently didn't like it too much, dood.
3580962 It might be just me, but I was expecting more of a reaction from Twilight. I'm not sure what, but something. Then again, Fluttershy interrupted them, so I can't say what else would have happened.
As for my feelings for Barb's reaction, it' pretty obvious Barb more than just loves her sister. She wants to be intimate with her. Plus, she probably been trying to bang Twilight for the longest. If Barb finds out Twilight banged some other pony, especially one she just met, I expect Barb to be heartbroken. In which case she will either act out of jealousy and/or betrayal (in her mind). Either way, she won't be thinking clearly. I may be wrong (wouldn't be the first time and won't be the last), but that's what I think.
3579583 So long as barb gets it one more time before the new mare I don't mind.
'Nother awesome chapter dood. Gotta love Fluttershy in this... though I DO want to see Twilight interact more of the mwne six, I can wait for that though. Anything you write I'm sure I'll love. Keep it up dood!
3582001 Thanks, dood. Also... I'm sorry I deleted your post with all of your corrections on it, dood. As much as they help me out ALOT.... they are usually ginormous, dood.
Says a lot about my grammar and excessive use of 'wanna', dood.
3582098 That time will come, dood. When the other Mane6 finally pop out of the ground to see Twilight with her cock out and think "I want a taste" and then get fucked by the purple mare, dood.
Can't really do that as much as I want in a story where I want to limit my clop content, dood.
3582111 best comment is best. And really, where ever you take this story I'm happy to ride along. Love your writing, y'know? So awesome job 'n all that.