Well, we know why Twilight and Barb haven't done it yet. Twi's fear of hurting her sister. In any case, this was a nice start. I look forward to Twilight making her first conquest in Ponyville. I do wonder how Pinkie Pie will be betrayed. I was surprised she didn't meet Twilight and Barb at the station with her welcome cart, or something like that.
NOOOOO Sikity why oh why no Barbity. LOL but really, this is getting good. I'm guessing Rarity is going to be trying to transfer to the design side of Everfree and Sparks.
I thought you would like the change of pace. ;P Do you want me to write another 100k word comment?^^
I liked alot of it, the explanation why the staff members are all gone, the argument between Twi and Rarity and the slowly realization that her kind and sweet uncle had been a huge pervert, the house tour with its porn collection, the explanation of when Twi and Barb had "experimented" (Wasn't Barb like 10/11 when Twi was 16?), the nightly cock sucking (bravo!) the funny dream Twi had (her stepsister must be a real looker if she dreams about banging her big bro's wifvey XD) and the nice ending.
I still wonder why Sunset found those parties so rewarding when Twi was with her and why she's so grabby with her to come with her to all those "million parties" but since we didn't got an explanation in ch.1 I guess we'll might get one when Sunset returns into the story and tries to convince Twi to have a party in her manison in her grand pool.^^
I'm pretty sure it's not the Head butler's duty to buy indegredients but of the chief or the house-own supplier (Derpy anyone? Derpy as Twi's new supplier girl? I mean, the pizza guy always gets sex as payment in the pornos why shouldn`t Derpy for bringing the food. XD), but meh. :D
I found the way Rarity quickly concluded that Twi is not a pervert a bit weird, I would have worded it more about how Twi had reacted to the porn PLUS Twi being a woman (that way chapter 3 will make a little more sense as well ;3) that Rarity was sure she will be "safe" under Twi's mistresshood (hehe) and thus would like to work with her. So yeah, instead of "After today?" I had liked to see the reasoning on how Twi reacted to the porn, but also how she defended her late uncle, still saw reason though plus the fact she's a woman and not a man (Maybe here Twi and barb can exchange a quick look, Rare doesn't notice?) as that all would speak positively for Twi not being a perverted mistress.
I do hope though that Rarity will quickly ask for allowance in chapter 3 to give a call to the old staff members to see how many of them will return to their jobs. After all I am very sure that she got their adresses and phone numbers since they worked there. If she tells them that the new mistress is not a pervert, I'm pretty sure that many of those who had worked there for quite some time would like to return to the workplace they know. A workplace which is now safer of not having their skirts lifted by magic (loved that bit btw XDDD). And Rare will need that staff quickly such a big house needs to be cleaned and kept in check daily. Which reminds me that such houses usually have a handyman or handywoman who can repair all kinds of stuff, maybe AJ would fit that role of a stubborn handywoman better than as a bodyguard or GIlda can be the sole bodyguard? Probably not all old members will return but that way one or two newbies who don't know and hasn't suffered under Silver's pervy antics can join the Sparkle household. And then the happy sexing can happen one by one by one. :3
Are YOU sure? I could be just like my Uncle you know?”
"," missing after "Uncle".
“NO… I just think… maybe you prefer girls that don’t have blimps for boobs.”
Here I would have liked if Twi hasn't ignored Barb's plea for comforting about her lack of attention-seekers/eye-catchers/etc aka boobs. Maybe have Twi stroke Barb's cheek and say that she will grow bigger and that as a dragon puberty hits her slower than ponies. Maybe then have Barb grab Twi's ahnd and move it to her chest make a comment like that she had read that massagign breasts make them bigger to which Twi dead-pans though she does enjoy the touch of the warm chest of her little sister. And then she moves away and speaks about havign noticied the big boobs of Rare but not wanting to bang her (yet). ^^
So, here's how I think it'll go... Rarity will be the head maid, Rainbow Dash will be some sort of bouncer, 'cause I can't see her wearing a maid uniform willingly, Fluttershy will be the other maid, and caretaker of whatever plants/animals are around the manor, Applejack will be the gardener/chef, Pinkie Pie will be the other chef and the resident Court Jester (Because every noble needs a jester or a bard. Or both). This will be my head cannon till the story says otherwise!
Oh look at that, Twily's gotta dong again. Now I may be wrong, but I'm sensing a certain theme to your writing...
Should be interesting to see how you differentiate this from your other futa series. The changed power dynamic with Twilight as landed nobility is an interesting start.
awww, i kinda liked the idea of twilight being a bit of a pervert like her uncle was. i don't know why, but the idea of her willingly committing 'incest' was kinda hot.
I'm pretty sure it's not the Head butler's duty to buy indegredients but of the chief or the house-own supplier
It is when the Head butler is the only one left on staff. 3452988 It's my bag, and it freaks me out! 3454044 Captain Picard? 3454235 Now I'm picturing Applejack with groundskeeper Willy's voice...
3452698 I'm trying, dood... I'm almost done Chapter Three!
3452757 Sorry that I killed your yuri Sparity buzz... but maybe I'll do something along those lines, dood? Or I'll jiust cop out and make a Threesome between Twilight, Rarity and Barb.
3452717 Thanks dood, Pinkie will show up in due time, don't worry
Well, it would make sense for Rarity to try to get back some of the old staff with which she's used to work with and who know their way around the house and stuff, isn't it?^^ And those who say "nope, don't care if women or not perverted I stay out of this house. FOREVER!" those can be replaced by new ones. Though I expect Rarity to take charge there instead of Twi as she will be busy with the company, maybe Twi has the final call or something like that. :)
Okay, there is probably something wrong in my head if I wasn't surprised about the Futa thing. then again, Anypony who knows what r34 is wouldn't be surprised either.
This really needs incest and foalcon tags. Not that I have any problem with incest, (I do have one with foalcon myself, but I can deal. Not having a warning however was not cool.) but it's very much not good to have strong triggers like that without giving warning.
Now that that is out of the way, HUZZAH FOR TWICOCK!
I like it. <3
3452572 That is the shortest comment I have ever gotten from you... ever, dood.
.....continue as you were good sir
AND CONTINUE QUICKLY. I WANT MOAR!
*ahem* sorry. please do continue at a rather fast pace as I am liking this story a lot.
Well, we know why Twilight and Barb haven't done it yet. Twi's fear of hurting her sister. In any case, this was a nice start. I look forward to Twilight making her first conquest in Ponyville. I do wonder how Pinkie Pie will be betrayed. I was surprised she didn't meet Twilight and Barb at the station with her welcome cart, or something like that.
NOOOOO Sikity why oh why no Barbity. LOL but really, this is getting good. I'm guessing Rarity is going to be trying to transfer to the design side of Everfree and Sparks.
3452576
I thought you would like the change of pace. ;P
Do you want me to write another 100k word comment?^^
I liked alot of it, the explanation why the staff members are all gone, the argument between Twi and Rarity and the slowly realization that her kind and sweet uncle had been a huge pervert, the house tour with its porn collection, the explanation of when Twi and Barb had "experimented" (Wasn't Barb like 10/11 when Twi was 16?), the nightly cock sucking (bravo!) the funny dream Twi had (her stepsister must be a real looker if she dreams about banging her big bro's wifvey XD) and the nice ending.
I still wonder why Sunset found those parties so rewarding when Twi was with her and why she's so grabby with her to come with her to all those "million parties" but since we didn't got an explanation in ch.1 I guess we'll might get one when Sunset returns into the story and tries to convince Twi to have a party in her manison in her grand pool.^^
I'm pretty sure it's not the Head butler's duty to buy indegredients but of the chief or the house-own supplier (Derpy anyone? Derpy as Twi's new supplier girl? I mean, the pizza guy always gets sex as payment in the pornos why shouldn`t Derpy for bringing the food. XD), but meh. :D
I found the way Rarity quickly concluded that Twi is not a pervert a bit weird, I would have worded it more about how Twi had reacted to the porn PLUS Twi being a woman (that way chapter 3 will make a little more sense as well ;3) that Rarity was sure she will be "safe" under Twi's mistresshood (hehe) and thus would like to work with her. So yeah, instead of "After today?" I had liked to see the reasoning on how Twi reacted to the porn, but also how she defended her late uncle, still saw reason though plus the fact she's a woman and not a man (Maybe here Twi and barb can exchange a quick look, Rare doesn't notice?) as that all would speak positively for Twi not being a perverted mistress.
I do hope though that Rarity will quickly ask for allowance in chapter 3 to give a call to the old staff members to see how many of them will return to their jobs. After all I am very sure that she got their adresses and phone numbers since they worked there. If she tells them that the new mistress is not a pervert, I'm pretty sure that many of those who had worked there for quite some time would like to return to the workplace they know. A workplace which is now safer of not having their skirts lifted by magic (loved that bit btw XDDD). And Rare will need that staff quickly such a big house needs to be cleaned and kept in check daily. Which reminds me that such houses usually have a handyman or handywoman who can repair all kinds of stuff, maybe AJ would fit that role of a stubborn handywoman better than as a bodyguard or GIlda can be the sole bodyguard?
Probably not all old members will return but that way one or two newbies who don't know and hasn't suffered under Silver's pervy antics can join the Sparkle household. And then the happy sexing can happen one by one by one. :3
Can't wait for the staff to be fully assembled.
not bad so carry on good fellow
That "I" needs to be a "i".
"," missing after "Uncle".
Here I would have liked if Twi hasn't ignored Barb's plea for comforting about her lack of attention-seekers/eye-catchers/etc aka boobs. Maybe have Twi stroke Barb's cheek and say that she will grow bigger and that as a dragon puberty hits her slower than ponies. Maybe then have Barb grab Twi's ahnd and move it to her chest make a comment like that she had read that massagign breasts make them bigger to which Twi dead-pans though she does enjoy the touch of the warm chest of her little sister. And then she moves away and speaks about havign noticied the big boobs of Rare but not wanting to bang her (yet). ^^
Sexy, also I have a feeling that old uncle sparks had some mojo going on there.
yea baby yea, keep it up, I'm loving it.
Oh yes, this is much better than the preview! THIS WAS GOOD. ANOTHER! >D
So, here's how I think it'll go...
Rarity will be the head maid,
Rainbow Dash will be some sort of bouncer, 'cause I can't see her wearing a maid uniform willingly,
Fluttershy will be the other maid, and caretaker of whatever plants/animals are around the manor,
Applejack will be the gardener/chef,
Pinkie Pie will be the other chef and the resident Court Jester (Because every noble needs a jester or a bard. Or both).
This will be my head cannon till the story says otherwise!
Oh look at that, Twily's gotta dong again. Now I may be wrong, but I'm sensing a certain theme to your writing...
Should be interesting to see how you differentiate this from your other futa series. The changed power dynamic with Twilight as landed nobility is an interesting start.
3453177 Nope, this is how it goes.
Bodyguard: Applejack
Fluttershy: Maid
Pinkie Pie: Cook
Rainbow: Chauffer
Rarity: Personal Masseuse and fashion designer
How do I know this? Because he posted a blog about it in his page.
Would this be a bad time to point out that both sets of "equipment" would be smaller and not fully developed?
3453508 I'd replace body guard with Gardner/Groundskeeper for Applejack, and Rarity is already the head maid.
Urethral!
awww, i kinda liked the idea of twilight being a bit of a pervert like her uncle was. i don't know why, but the idea of her willingly committing 'incest' was kinda hot.
3452765
It is when the Head butler is the only one left on staff.
3452988
It's my bag, and it freaks me out!
3454044
Captain Picard?
3454235
Now I'm picturing Applejack with groundskeeper Willy's voice...
3452698 I'm trying, dood... I'm almost done Chapter Three!
3452757 Sorry that I killed your yuri Sparity buzz... but maybe I'll do something along those lines, dood? Or I'll jiust cop out and make a Threesome between Twilight, Rarity and Barb.
3452717 Thanks dood, Pinkie will show up in due time, don't worry
3452775 Will do, dood.
3452988 I'm going to try and keep this pace up, dood... Even as I re-make my Chapter 16 for Misadventures.
3452765 I might do that 'bring old staff' back thing, but it won't be as much as you'd think, dood. Check back later on that thought.
3453078 Thanks, dood! I'll try and keep more coming!
3453177 If you REALLY want, I can destroy your head canon now and tell you what my plans for the rest of Twilight's friends are, dood.
3453490 Futatwi is best Twi, dood. Why change something that's fundamentally perfect?
3453508 I changed Rarity to Head Maid... Twilight ain't getting a fashion designer as far as I had currently planned, dood.
3453733 It would be if not for the ultimate in plot devices: Magic, dood.
3454235 Gardener has already been picked out, AJ will just have to settle with being Twi's muscle... while taking Twi's muscle, dood.
3454692 Huh, carry on then, dood.
3454704 I don't watch Star Trek, but I'm certain it was the bald captain from one of the shows and I'm 70% certain he is called 'Picard', dood.
3455041
Sweet, jealous younger sisters are awsome... Hmmm
3455041 I was wondering about that dood but then I thought: 'Dood's story, dood's call'.
3455041
Well, it would make sense for Rarity to try to get back some of the old staff with which she's used to work with and who know their way around the house and stuff, isn't it?^^
And those who say "nope, don't care if women or not perverted I stay out of this house. FOREVER!" those can be replaced by new ones. Though I expect Rarity to take charge there instead of Twi as she will be busy with the company, maybe Twi has the final call or something like that. :)
Twilight being a futa kind of caught me off guard, but it makes so many sexy possibilities for this fic now! :3
Twilight is a bit more terse and cold than I remember. But whatever. I'm enjoying it so far.
Okay, there is probably something wrong in my head if I wasn't surprised about the Futa thing. then again, Anypony who knows what r34 is wouldn't be surprised either.
good so far, Onward to the next chapter!
This really needs incest and foalcon tags. Not that I have any problem with incest, (I do have one with foalcon myself, but I can deal. Not having a warning however was not cool.) but it's very much not good to have strong triggers like that without giving warning.
Now that that is out of the way, HUZZAH FOR TWICOCK!
3545289 *Shouts huzzah while jumping into the air*
That was a funny sweet chapter.
6053515 My thoughts exactly