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My friend Whilst I am not a good writer I can tell good stories when I see them. This is good. I hardly noticed any spelling or grammatical errors. I think the large dislike is due to the genre. A lot of people hate humans being sub servant to ponies more so if the humans are intelligent. You keep at this and know I will continue to read this
4066802 There were some pretty ridiculously large spelling errors though.
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I have fixed that mistake.
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Thank you for your kind words.
Max respect for Luna. I never liked Braeburn anyway, he always struck me as a bit of an idiot.
Are the rebels walking into an ambush? Or am I missing something?
so Luna is the Abraham Lincoln of the ponies
I'm SO HAPPY this story will be continued
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The rebel's aren't walking into any traps.
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Now that I think about it, She is
4067699 Oh good. Just was worried that the slave ships would be a lot harder to capture now that they are armed.
Now for the violent fantasies that all of us are thinking :
Honesty, what I would do to Braeburn would make Cupcakes look like a story for 5 year olds. Filthy Rich would watch his daughter being killed before he got his death.
Nice character development by the way.
I was worried about this fic for a second there. It was taking a long time for a new chapter, I thought you stopped. Remember, if you need any help, don't hesitate to PM. Nice chapter by the way, it could use more visualizations and a few of the drawled words were wrong (ex: mah should be meh because mah sounds more like ma when read aloud.)
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Well this chapter would have been out sooner but my editor has been busy so he hasn't sent back any of my chapters I've sent him. As always thanks, I'll PM you if I need any help.
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Also, I love your profile picture
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Thanks, I found it over on deviantart, I thought it was cool and Gave me an idea for a story but haven't really gotten around to write it lol Been busy with my other stories.
4067489 doesn't mater, how do you think books look like before 5 up to 20 edits and proof readers go over and correct. Hell I read a chapter of the unedited version of harry potter and the spelling and grammatical errors were really noticeable. The thing is that we only have proof readers here to go on for good grammar and the only other option is paying pros but they are expensive and it is intimidating trying to give a paid professional pony fanfics
4070692 Proofreaders on the site should easily find these mistakes.
4071339 You are absolutely right but what I am saying is that we should not be so harsh on the writer. If they love writing but suffer when it comes to grammar and punctuation then all they have are the proof readers. Hell these people are not getting paid so I can understand that in some cases they will half ass. I don't think it is right if someone is willing to do something then they should always do it to the best of there abilities all I am saying is that always been lenient if a story has redeeming qualities.
Its needs a bit of a polish but get a good proof reader and I think this could be something great. What I have always tried to stress is that critics should be proof readers because I find they tend to be the best rather than finding random ones. If a critic likes the story but has concerns then you find that they are good as they have emotional investment and will work better than a proof reader off of the blue.
4071475 Who's talking about being harsh to the writer?
Grate chapter fc09.deviantart.net/fs70/f/2013/357/a/1/2_hoofs_up_by_comeha-d6z0lto.png
4072403 Not you specifically I was generalising about comments in general by other users. though i think some have removed them
Please write more!!! I've always liked stories with ponies and humans in them, but yours knocked my socks off! I may need help finding them......
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Lol I'm glad you enjoy this story, I'm working on other chapters and I think I found one of your socks, its on the moon.
Ill have to ask Luna to get it for me x_x
This is pure epicness which should never stop.
Sunset Shimmer? Okay, she's part of the resistance. If the EQG cannon stands here, she's also against Celestia so does that mean Celestia's pro-slavery? We know that Luna and Twilight aren't.
cloths - clothes
ageist - against
free a human that human is free - free a human, then that human is free
that, Next time I buy - next. Unneeded capitalisation
ageist - against
chuckled - chuckle.
Such a great story...
Such terrible editing...
Seriously your usage of apostrophes and using the wrong homophones (your & you're) is horrible. I wish I could upvote it, but I honestly can't.
As soon as I saw the thing with the rape stalls I wanted Braeburn to suffer the worst possible fate imaginable.
Props to best princess for fighting for the freedom of the humans.
Is any of that even possible?
What does that mean?
Wait what?
But, what’s stopping them from becoming slaves again?
Maybe she can’t.
I thought he was there with them.
F*ck the law.
Is it possible to fight back?