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sorry I had to
My only real qualms so far about this story is the spelling/grammatical errors (this chapter alone bothered me a lot because "trials" was repeatedly spelled as "trails"
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Back-to-back-to-back.)
The other thing that bothers me is how quickly the POVs change. There's usually like 3 paragraphs, and then switch, then 3 paragraphs, then switch, rinse and repeat. It's too quick and you forget where everyone is at because of it.
Anyways. That's enough of my rant. I do like the story so far, other than those few things.
Off to the next chapter!
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Phone freezes, universe explodes.
Either ‘‘any creature’’ or ‘‘anything’’.
castle
Trials.
You are on a typo streak with that one.
‘‘told you’’
Ohh. So this is a dragons way of saying hello. Interesting.
Wait, blaze and ember are siblings?
Wow, so they’re basically traitors?
Our?
Really?
Aren’t they supposed to do that themselves?