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Yes, I speak English.
3372141 archive.heinessen.com/boards/mlp/thumb/0085/80/1361722462501s.jpg
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Wanna try again?
3372181 Yeeeah, you don't appear to have ever encountered the English language in written form before.
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I have.
3372198 Keep telling yourself that.
It has potential, just please for the love of god, find an editor.
I will follow this along and see where it goes :D but I must agree that you need to find an editor
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I am in the middle of looking for a editor to help me out.
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Good onya :D
Interesting idea, can't actually say that I've read anything like this before. Bit of room for improvement language wise but other than that it was alright.
I'd be happy to read over your chapters before you post them if you want.
~Tschloken~
interesting story. I can't say I have read something like this before. looks good.
Phantom Writer are you going to be able to make chapters for this story and on the another stories that are not complete on your account at the same time and i like this one
Interesting.
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Yes, I can still write on the other story's I have up.
3373698 ok
Hey Phantom Writer, this story is very interesting. It's true that it needs an editor but I've read stuff with much worse grammar and spelling. I'm looking forward to reading more. Good luck
What's with all the down votes? This is quite good for a first chapter.
3377601I'm with you on that. I like this story a lot already. Keep it coming.
more plz
I don't see why this has so many downvotes...its good!
MOAR! http://mylittlefacewhen.com/f/321/
(btw I'm calling it now! rarity's going to be a Pony supremacist)
Hahaha! I like how Braeburn, a southern-like pony gets a human slave from Appleoosa, a southwestern-like town, and gives him to Applejack, another southern-like pony. There's a message somewhere in there if I've ever seen one.
But anyway, grammer mistakes aside, I really like this story so far.
Also, go Applejack!
this has apparently been done already in the last comments but at the beginning of the story it says that he was bought to help an old GUY pony but then you say it was a MARE you got your genders mixed up but its a simple fix
3427848 I'll second that. There is probably an editor group out there!
4 words came into my head after reading the chapter.
"I had a dream"
You really need an editor. I didn't get much further than one hundred words before I could no longer deal with the incorrect word usage and grammatical errors.
You need an editor but I'm loving the story so far
I remember reading this a long time ago on a different site. I enjoy the premise, and plan to reread the entire tale. Now I realize that others have hounded you about this but, I think it would aid you greatly to run this through a spellchecker to weed out the simple errors and such. Perhaps read it out loud to find ones that a spellcheck will miss. Spelling and grammar errors like these in the second paragraph...
...while not too horrid, most of us have seen far worse and it was written at least three years ago, it should be corrected. I believe it would sound much better as such,
"For as long as Matt could remember he was raised to obey ponies. His life had always been harsh growing up, beatings were a common punishment when he failed a task and sometimes just because he was a convenient outlet for the pony to vent their frustrations on. His owners only tended to fed him the bare minimum required and even water would be withheld at times. He was sold several times before an elderly pony purchased him at the age of nineteen. She needed assistance to care for her, and humans were cheaper to purchase and train than paying for a qualified pony caretaker."
Now, keep in mind, I actually like this story. I also know that many folks have likely down voted it simply due to spelling and grammar errors in the first chapter. I hope this encourages you. In any event, I will continue to reread the story and enjoy it. I will also not make any further mention of spelling nor grammar.
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It’s nice to see there are some nice ponies.