Rainbow Dash is excited when Spitfire asks her to teach flying lessons.
But when a filly outsmarts her,secrets are revealed.
And now she needs to save the day.
What will it take to show she wasn't what the secrets said?
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You need to put spaces after periods (or full stops), as well as commas. Since you haven't, your story looks poorly formatted, and just a mess in general.
3361400That is just plain hurtful.This is my first story, and trust me,I will do better.
3364262 Plain hurtful? That was constructive criticism. Hurtful would be me saying that your story is shit and that you should stop writing. It's not shit though, it just needs a bit of work.
3365418That is true.Thank you for pointing that out(you dont think that about my story,do you?)
3377829 nevermind my last comment