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    Rainbow Rocks

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  • 1w, 2d
    Antifantasy

    I try to keep a pretty open mind when I'm reading, and I do like to read a lot--at the last sci-fi convention I went to I wound up with over 30 new books--but there's one subset of the fantasy genre that consistently fails to work for me.

    I call it antifantasy, although I'm sure it has a more technical name somewhere. It's the fantasy equivalent of cyberpunk, except it lost a lot of the heart that cyberpunk had. Antifantasy stories are stories about how fantasy sucks. How magic is just a cheap shortcut that can't compare to building with your own hands. How superpowers can't help you solve any of the real problems in the world, like famine, bigotry, or the destruction of the world's ecosystems. How the dwarves are drunkards and the elves are vain and the vampires and werewolves are just pathetic sad-sacks begging to be put out of their misery.

    I don't understand these stories. If I'm picking up a fantasy story, I think it can be assumed that I like fantasy tropes. Why would I want to read 300 pages about how much fantasy is just cheap escapism for folks who can't handle the real world? Who, exactly, is the audience?

    The thing that brought this to mind was I stumbled across another review of "The Magicians", by Lev Grossman. Now, I've seen a lot of reviews for this book, and they're almost unanimously positive. And they all have pretty much the same summary: "The Magicians is about a guy who feels that his life lacks meaning, so he goes to magic school. And at first he's happy thinking that he'll become a great wizard who performs amazing heroics and saves the world. But then he realizes that wanting to be a great wizard is a pathetic, childish fantasy, and that the right thing to do is to give up on his dreams of being a hero and get used to dragging himself to a boring job he hates for the rest of his life. In the end, he learns that a real 'hero' is a happy, content cog in the machine. Only the vainglorious and the immature dream of anything more." And so the result is that every positive, glowing review of this book that I read makes me increasingly less inclined to read it.

    I mean, why would I? I like a lot of tropes associated with magic schools. I like reading about how ordinary people adapt to obtaining new powers, how they learn to use them, what setbacks they have, how they resist temptations to misuse them (or don't). I like reading about people who were once weak gaining powers and becoming more capable of defending themselves and those they care about. I like seeing the nerdy characters geek out at learning magical spell theory, and the athletic characters screaming in exhilaration as they learn to ride broomsticks. Ultimately, I like reading about the nascent heroes who become folks like Gandalf, Harry Dresden, and Harry Potter. If I didn't like those things, I wouldn't read books set in those environments. So why would I pick up a book about how Gandalf and the Harries are just immature tossers, and so am I, for daring to be entertained by them? Why would I want a book which says that the real hero of Harry Potter was Vernon Dursley, because while everyone else was gallivanting about and waving wands at each other, he dutifully attended to his job and didn't dare let himself feel even a hint of wonder or imagination?

    (Disclaimer: in case it's not obvious from the above paragraph, I have not read The Magicians. I'm just talking about the reviews of it that I read, since those reviews convinced me to never, ever get anywhere near this book. I suppose it's possible that all the reviews could be wrong. That said, unless someone I trust actually reads the book and tells me otherwise, I'm not going to pick it up. After all, there's loads of books out there with premises I don't dislike on principle).

    There's other examples too, and by some otherwise really good authors. I'm usually a huge fan of Carrie Vaughn, for instance. Her Kitty Norville series is spectacular, as are her YA works "Steel" and "Voices of Dragons." She's even one of two authors for whom I get up early on the day her books come out so I can buy them before I go into work and read them over lunch. (The other is Jim Butcher, if anyone cares). But she wrote an antifantasy duology set in a superhero universe, and--in my opinion--it was almost unreadable. The first book is called "After the Golden Age", and the title's an apt description. The protagonist is the daughter of the world's two greatest superheroes, but the only tangible result of that is that she's taken hostage a lot. She's estranged from her family, because all the superpowers in the world can't mend real issues like familial rifts. Yes, in this story, the golden age is indeed over, superheroes have lost their luster, and our protagonist just tries to muddle through her days without dealing with any superheroes, villains, or powers of any kind. (Suffice to say I haven't picked up the sequel.)

    "Hero", by Perry Moore, is another good example. The protagonist is the son of Batman (with a slightly different name to avoid copyright). But Batman was disgraced, because a mission went wrong and people died, and now he's a lowly factory worker who can only reminisce about the glory days and maim the occasional burglar. Meanwhile, the son also develops powers, but they won't help him deal with bigotry (he's gay), or redeem his family name, or anything else he really cares about. I got about 1/5 of the way into this one before giving up. Again, if I'm reading about superpowers, I want to read about superpowers being used for something, not about how superpowers are useless for anything that really matters. (I'm aware that this story was critically acclaimed and even won a Lambda award, but I just could not get into it.)

    And, for a more recent example, Sofia Somatar's "Selkie Stories are for Losers." It's a story about selkies, which means that it's calling the reader a loser right in the title. Smooth. And the story is pretty much just about how awful selkies are, how they leave broken families and shattered lives behind them, and how anyone who would ever want to hear about selkies must be out of their mind. Just what I want to hear when I sit down to read a story about selkies.

    (For those not up on your mythology: selkies are creatures that can change shape between a human and a seal body. They change shape by taking off or putting on their sealskin. Selkie stories usually feature a human stealing the skin and trapping the selkie in human form; the selkie then marries the human and raises a family with them, until one day they recover their skin. They then flee into the ocean, leaving the family behind. So yeah, out of the box they're pretty depressing, but interesting things can be done with them. They're not just for losers.)

    If I had to describe antifantasy in one word, it would be 'tired.' Because these stories always feel that way. They are stories that seem weary and beaten down, laden with cynicism, bitterly contemptuous of the idea that magic and whimsey could possibly affect anything real. They're stories that laugh at the reader for daring to seek enjoyment from them. They laugh, and then they lean in close to the reader and murmur that, while elves and werewolves and Kryptonians are all fine fantasies for a child, the reader is now an adult and should know that real problems can't be solved with a magical wand. They chide the reader for trying to enjoy genre fiction, ignoring that they themselves are genre fiction, and sigh that all the innumerable fantasy stories are just petty escapism, useless for anything except as diversions for fools who don't care to deal with reality.

    And, just speaking for myself, but when I go to read a genre story, I'd rather read one that doesn't insult me for it.

    That's about all I've got. Has anyone read books like this? Anyone know if there's a real term for it besides antifantasy? Any ideas as to why someone might like these?

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  • 6w, 4d
    You Can Call Me...

    Dr. GrassAndClouds2.

    I.e., the PhD thesis defense went well. :-)

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  • 7w, 3d
    Rejected Video Game Titles

    Five Nights with Fluttershy

    Rainbow Dash Six

    The Legend of Zelda: Twilight Sparkle Princess

    Amnesia: A Machine for Pinkies

    Pacmare

    Luna: The Blue-ish Star

    Derpyronpa

    Dragon: The Bruce Cheerilee Story

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  • 17w, 1d
    Afterlife With Archie

    ...continues to be awesome.

    That is all.

    (Oh, and really looking forward to the forthcoming "Betty: RIP" arc!)

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Eager to demonstrate that she's learning something about the magic of friendship, Trixie Lulamoon decides to help the nervous Fluttershy prepare for an upcoming concert. Not one to do things by half, Trixie arranges for Court Musician Octavia Philharmonica to personally come in and prepare Fluttershy for the show. Unfortunately, Fluttershy doesn't respond well to Octavia's demanding standards, and Octavia is quickly frustrated by Fluttershy's  inclination to drop out and hide rather than perfect and present her music. Can Trixie salvage their relationship into something harmonious? Or will the concert be drowned out by cacophonous bickering? Lunaverse story.

First Published
25th Oct 2013
Last Modified
11th Nov 2013

Looks good so far.

I love your Rainbow Dash, loyal and helpful to her friend but at the same time utterly clueless.

I'd say Trixie might be exaggerating slightly when she said she and Octavia go way back unless I'm misremembering the backstory, didn't she first meet her about 6 months ago in character?

Baronett Slimeball? Well that's a name that inspires confidence in your leadership.

This looks like it'll be a pretty interesting story.  With you and writing something music related things almost always work out really well so I look forward to seeing how this develops.  Characters did feel a little overly saccharine and caricatureish at points though.  But I'm sure things will get more complicated shortly.  Thanks a lot for sharing.  Added to my favorites and email alerts.

Another G&C2 musical Lunaverse story? Hell yeah.

You know, I'd like to believe that Baronet Slimeball is such a great pony he left the Night Court to better focus on his philanthropic works. Names aren't everything!

No Trixie, you've doomed us all! Don't you know better than to say things like that? Don't temp the Great and Terrible Murphey!

>>3396738

I think there's a touch of sarcasm in there, although they've certainly been through a lot over the past year.  I'm pretty sure they go back at least as far as the Ice Palace incident.  From Octavia's point of view, it would be "When did Trixie first become a burr in my saddle?"

I assume Baronet Slimeball = Greengrass?

And once again, Rainbow Dash shows just how much she understands her best friend, one she's had since foalhood.

>>3397247

I think she's trying partially I think it's a sort of tough love thing, it she doesn't give Fluttershy a kick in the plot she'll never do anything, :rainbowdetermined2: and partially just not recognising that other ponies actually like different things. Rainbow herself would love to show off to a crowd so doesn't understand why Fluttershy doesn't want to. :rainbowderp: At least she picked a charity Fluttershy would get behind 120% and something she might get outside of her comfort zone for.

The only bit that seems off to me is her then running straight off, that was a bit to cruel / heartless to me I'd think she'd hang around to help Fluttershy although maybe she thought Lyra, Carrot Top and Trixie would be better at it than her.

I'm surprised Lyra didn't have anything to say about Octavia coming. She's known her for years and years longer than Trixie, after all...

>>3397220

No, Greengrass is a duke. Baronet is significantly below that in terms of noble ranks, and in fact is the lowest noble rank, only slightly above the gentry (Lord/Lady and Knight/Dame): Baronet/Baronetess, Baron/Baroness, Viscount/Viscountess, Count/Countess, Margrave/Margravine, Duke/Duchess, Archduke/Archduchess, Viceroy/Vicereine, Grand Duke/Grand Duchess, Prince/Princess, King/Queen, and Emperor/Empress.

Baronets are also distinct in that even though their title is heredity, unlike the titles of the gentry, baronets are not members of the peerage (the nobility as a collective whole) (which in Lunaverse terms probably means that they are never direct members of the Night Court, though of course they may have means of influencing it).

>>3396738: Trixie's exaggerating slightly. That said, I wouldn't be surprised if Trixie had bumped into Octavia while she (Trixie) apprenticed to Luna; Octavia was trying to perform for Courtiers at that point, so she might have occasionally gained access to the castle. Certainly she was at the Ice Palace, as >>3397220 said. For that matter, I wouldn't be surprised if Trixie (who was kind of a jerk back then) had bragged about her relationship with Luna and compared it to Octavia's then-nonexistance prospects of performing for the nobility/Luna.

But yeah, Trixie's exaggering a bit for Fluttershy's benefit.

>>3397220: Nope. Slimeball's his actual name. Greengrass is still on the Court, with his seat and everything. He won't be appearing in this story, though.

>>3397247: She did the same thing on LNLD, and unlike some of the other characters she hasn't been through all that much development, so I think it's reasonable to assume she'd do it again.

>>3397273: But this as well. She's honestly trying to help Fluttershy out. She's just not terribly good at it.

>>3397452: Good point; edited in a line from Lyra enthusing about Tavi possibly coming to town.

As for the nobles, I see that 'grand duke' is now below 'archduke' in the list you just posted, when before grand duke was above viceroy. Did something change?

>>3397660

Nope. Slimeball's his actual name.

That family must share a similar mindset with the ones who would name their children "Stinkin" and "Filthy."

>>3397692: Maybe it's a last name. :-)

>>3397660

Probably not, the wikipedia pages on nobility/royalty are just really inconsistent from page to page. Lemmie check my list from LNLD...

Ah, yes, you're right. Okay, I'll make some edits.

Remember that Equestria doesn't have any Grand Dukes/Duchesses, anyway. Those are usually sovereigns in their own right.

Comment posted by GrassAndClouds2 deleted at 5:02pm on the 25th of October, 2013

>>3397702

Whats his first name, Total? Wonderful? Not A? Absolute?

Great. She can get Twilight to file this under "Words", sub-section "Last", sub-sub-section "Famous.":facehoof:

(Failing that, she can start wearing a pink baseball hat and adopt the catch-phrase "What could possibly go wrong?")

Just a point of reflexion: while Trixie is genuinely trying to honor her Element of Friendship and become a better pony, she may be incidentally helping her career by helping the daughter of a powerful member of the Night Court, just as she did with Twilight (Although I´m not sure if Night Light already knows about the events of Crisis on Two Equestrias, or the recent friendship between his daughter and the Elements)

Note: I´m not saying Trixie is aiming for a profit, just that she is getting herself good karma (the positive side of "actions have consequences" on the Lunaverse)

>>3398340: Flutters isn't Posey's daughter, I don't think. To my knowledge, the relationship is unspecified but has been generally assumed to be a niece. (>>3397753, am I getting this right?)

That all said, I'd like to think Trixie has genuinely pure motives here.

>>3398483  Yes, and the fact that Twilight is right behind her and gaining has nothing to do with Trixie's sudden burst of speed... :pinkiehappy:

Trixie's being helpful! Bringing the Court Musician of Equestria in to train a small-town animal choir conductor seems like a bit of overkill, but Trixie and Lyra do both have a personal connection with Octavia, so it makes sense.

It will be interesting to see how you write Octavia and Fluttershy together in the Lunaverse, compared to the Cadanceverse. C!Fluttershy seems more assertive and extroverted than M!Fluttershy, whereas L!Fluttershy is less so.

>>3396950 You know what? I agree with this. Maybe the name is indicative of a talent in... ear, nose and throat medicine?

Anyway... Dash. *Clenches fist* Get a clue. Mane or Lunaverse, sometimes your head's thicker than a concrete wall. Anyway, good on Trixie. I hope this ends up going well for everyone involved, Dash excepted. :rainbowhuh:

>>3398483

I think it has been said that Fluttershy is Posey's niece, but also that she hasn't got any kids of her own (It might be my imagination but it might even have been stated that she was not likely to have any) and Fluttershy was being groomed as the heir-apparent. Given that clearly hasn't worked out as planned I don't know whose set to inherit.

>>3399116: If not Fluttershy, there is only one other pegasus in Ponyville who has the dignity, intelligence, and passion to take on the role.

Namely, Scootaloo. :-)

More seriously, I don't think we've specified who is set to inherit.

“This is gonna be great,” murmured Trixie, as she drifted off to sleep. “Everything’s going to be perfect.”

And Trixie just invited in Murphy for tea and crumpets. Hmm... You have have now written the same characters in three different universes. How have all three imploded on your head, author?

And...

Darn it, Rainbow!

>>3398483>>3399116

Yeah, Gala solidified Fragrant Posey as Fluttershy's aunt. Fragrant has been having trouble having foals, so she for a time had Fluttershy named as her heir apparent. The expectations of that coupled with Thundering's expectations for Fluttershy to inherit his controlling share of the weather factory in Cloudsdale was a bit too much for Fluttershy, though, which is what lead to her isolating herself in Ponyville.

Fragrant and Thunderous didn't realize that Fluttershy wasn't quite equipped for everything they were loading on her and felt awful after her nervous breakdown, and both have been trying to make things up to her.

Fluttershy has brothers and sisters (presumably younger ones, mentioned in Family Matters, but at least one is old enough that Fluttershy mentioned that he or she is somehow involved in managing the family's finances), so the Posey family as a whole isn't in any danger by Fluttershy abdicating from the weather factory or taking Fragrant's title.

Anyway, to answer the other question, I don't think Fragrant can't have foals, she's just been having difficulty with getting pregnant and carrying one to term for whatever reason (maybe she had a miscarriage halfway through one pregnancy that was somewhat traumatic and put her off the idea of trying for awhile). I like to think she'll succeed in the near future, though. Perhaps with a certain earth pony baron she seemed to have gone to the Gala with. It'd be nice if something genuinely, unabashedly positive could be said to have come from that fic...

>>3400275: Heh. I like that idea. A Posey/Max romance could be amusing. And they're good nobles; they deserve happiness. :-)

>>3397660

Oh no, I understand that. It is in character for RD to essentially barge into Flutters house, announce that she signed Flutters up for something without telling her first(Forgetting that Flutters was having a breakdown the last time she was signed up to do the exact same thing), and then fly off to do her own thing instead of sticking around and see if she needs any help.

I'm just finding it increasingly silly that they are best friends, which should involve a degree of understanding between them better than someone who just formally met Flutters a couple hours ago at most.

Great. She's like someone who jumped from the seventieth floor and, upon passing the fifth, said "So far, so good."

"So... you're saying I shouldn't tell her about the little shrine to Thrash Metail I built in the back of your residency?"

That's a bit worrying, maybe he and Vinyl could go on a 'mission impossible' type thing to liberate the 'guitar of instant raves'?

What exactly is in the suitcase that Pokey has to protect? Ponies don't ware many clothes so I wouldn't think Octy would carry too much, maybe it's just full of hundreds of bow ties. The only other thing I can think of is Octy's Cello but I doubt she'd leave that with anyone else.

I see you're keeping the cant eat sweets sub plot in there.

"Baron Max, from Nulpar... the province they just created a year ago when they found those villages that weren't on any actual map. I don't think he's actually on the Welcoming Committee, but Princess Luna mentioned to me he's trying to get involved in more Committees and Ministries. I suppose that was why he was there."

Yep, no other reason that Maxie boy should be there, he better treat Thundering right or he might find out if the stare is genetic or not.

>>3407183:

The suitcase has everything Octavia took with her except for her cello (which is in a separate case on Tavi's back). So that would be not only her bowties but also a formal dress (in case she is called upon to give an impromptu concert) toiletries, maybe a book for the train, music books, records if she wants to listen to something while in town, and so forth.

Heh. Pokey and Vinyl, breaking into the Canterlot equivalent of Warehouse 13. I sense hijinks!

And yes, Pinkie's subplot was too much fun to discard.

Yep, no other reason that Maxie boy should be there, he better treat Thundering right or he might find out if the stare is genetic or not.

I think you mean Fragrant, but otherwise, I can imagine him learning exactly where Thundering get his name...

"You made my sister cry!" *summons thunderstorm*

Everything's going perfectly. I am a good friend.

Damn it, Trixie!

REPRESENTATIVE LULAMOON BLAMED FOR SOME REASON

:rainbowlaugh:

It's your life, Trixie. You figure it out.

>>3407380

Yes I did mean Fragrant, oops, although that would be interesting....

Anyway, you've sort of made me want to write something akin to Pinkie and Bluie for Maxie and Fragrant (Smellie?). Something to add to my list of things to write if I ever get time.

You really need to have Vinyl, Octavia, Lyra, and Fluttershy all get together and make some really different piece together.  The mechanics of that would probably be pretty damn fun.

Anyway, nice to see a little bit more of this, and to see where things are probably going to start fraying apart.  Could have maybe used a bit more descriptions, and reactions and less dialogue.  But overall very nice well written chapter.  Thanks for sharing!

And underneath, in the sub-heading: REPRESENTATIVE LULAMOON BLAMED FOR SOME REASON.

Poor Trixie, it's not her fault she was born with bad karma.

>>3407559 Hopefully that's not a harbinger of things to come. Trixie being the butt monkey so much gets rather wearing for me.

Anyway, good chapter. Hope things don't bit Trixie in the flank too hard here. I sense Fluttershy is either gonna lock down or go full "YOU'RE GOING TO LOVE ME!" mode.

>>3408363  Hopefully that's not a harbinger of things to come. Trixie being the butt monkey so much gets rather wearing for me.

While Trixie is probably summoning squawking doom upon her own head with that last thought, I think it is definitely reflective of the progress she made since coming to Ponyville.

And if that doesn't help up her bear up to what follows she can always fall back on the wallowing in self-pity and M. Bourbon.

Or, to put it more accurately, Trixie makes something of a worse botch of things because she's dealing with a perfectionist and a naive adult child who equates being yelled at with being hated.

Poor Fluttershy...

But no, this does not mean anyone has actual firearms.

Bending the tech level for the sake of Pinkie is pretty much par for the course; I didn't think you were trying to imply such, in other words. :twilightsmile:

Of course, that means she doesn't really take failure well.

Also, she doesn't seem to realize that controlling the celestial bodies is basically like breathing for Luna. Luna likes to make a show of bringing in the night, 'cause that's who she is, but the actual required effort is minimal. No, Luna can't just 'take a day off' from the Sun and Moon, but they place so little strain on her that she wouldn't ever need to.

My thought has always been that Equestrian tech is a bit odd to begin with, since hooved critters that walk around on four legs most of the time are just going to have different needs, so will develop things at different rates.  Thus why they seem to have video games in an otherwise lower tech world.  As for guns, my go to answer is the griffins invented them.  Since they fly a claw held weapon with a trigger is a perfectly sensible sort of thing for a griffin, unlike even pegasi who still have the hoof issue.  That's why until you pointed it out in the note I didn't even think it was weird.

I have a feeling Trixie is going to just make things worse. She's great at that. Just leave this to Carrot and Lyra. They can fix this.

"For instance, you might hesitate for one single moment, and the next thing you know the most handsome, fashionable, and eligible bachelor of the Night Court is dating the town baker instead of yours truly... but I digress."

You'd think she was bitter or something.

Oh Trixie, you were doing so well trying to use your powers for good and only being a touch dishonest to all you met, come on you can fix it all you just need to realise that this isn't all about you, as hard as that is for you.

Octy came off as a touch harsh, I guess she doesn't know Fluttershy as well as we do.

How common an instrument is a flock of birds in Equestria? There's got to be some limits to what they can actually do and how well Fluttershy can control them, its a miracle they can conceptualise something like semitone. Octy could probably take that into mind.

Although something I thought about for the Cadenceverse is that a good mimicking bird (Parrot or similar) could be used like a tape recorder to copy music by another instrument or group of birds which could be in turn recorded by another bird allowing you to mix 'tracks' together. The right mix of birds would give you a phenomenal range, particularly given how their lungs work.

This Luna is also a Princess of Dreams, right? I want to believe that the opening of this chapter involves her messing with Trixie.

"Wedding shotgun?" repeated Trixie.

:pinkiehappy::trixieshiftleft:

"Wait, give me that." Trixie yanked the muffin off the platter and bit into it with gusto. "Mmm. Now you can go."

Seize the moment!

Rarity on decorations, Dash on weather duty, all for free, this is going too well to be a proper Trixie plan.

Ahhh, there's where we finally go off the tracks, it had to be coming.

This was... painful for me at the end, and not in a good way either. Once again it's all Trixie's fault, even while trying to do a good thing for everyone. And Octavia was a complete asshole. No if's, ands or buts about it. She has a stick up her flank and it needs removing, then bludgeoning her over the head with.

>>3417584

Ignoring that you're flat out wrong, and that it is collectively Trixie, Carrot Top, Lyra, Octavia and Fluttershy's fault that this one aspect of the concert isn't going perfect at the moment, ignoring that Trixie is obviously over-stating her own failure here, and ignoring that you seem to care more about your vendetta against anything being Trixie's fault ever then the plot of the story, I'm rather surprised that you don't care much that Trixie just conned Rarity out of a significant amount of free decorations. I'd like to think you care more Grass not letting his hatred of one particular action Trixie did against a colossal dick make it so he writes her as a colossal dick to a pony who considers her a friend and has done nothing wrong to her, but apparently that's okay.

>>3418823

Ignoring that you're flat out wrong, and that it is collectively Trixie, Carrot Top, Lyra, Octavia and Fluttershy's fault that this one aspect of the concert isn't going perfect at the moment

What did CT and Lyra do wrong? Trixie asked them to let her handle this one and they agreed. I don't think they should have refused. ("No, Trixie, we know you're a crappy friend who'll screw this up, so we're going to take over and sideline you.")

Lyra's the Bearer of Loyalty. She's going to stand by her friend Trixie when Trixie wants a chance to show that she knows what she's doing. And CT's the Bearer of Generosity, she'll give Trixie a chance to prove herself any time.

I'd like to think you care more Grass not letting his hatred of one particular action Trixie did against a colossal dick make it so he writes her as a colossal dick to a pony

This was drafted (including this scene in particular) back in early February, before AtGGG had reached the extortion scene (which, IIRC, was when it finished). I didn't post it because S2 of Lunaverse didn't open until late July, at which point I was trying to write more S2 stuff (Exam Jitters) as well as some independent stuff (novel draft, short story submissions). I've only gotten to this now, but all the core ideas were conceived of over a month before the extortion.

There's a few minor updates regarding Gala fallout (the mention earlier of Slimeball leaving the Court, the reference to Max working harder, Fragrant now explicitly being Flutters' aunt, etc.) but Trixie was always going to run into trouble by not keeping a closer eye on Octy and Flutters here.

>>3419054

What did CT and Lyra do wrong? Trixie asked them to let her handle this one and they agreed. I don't think they should have refused. ("No, Trixie, we know you're a crappy friend who'll screw this up, so we're going to take over and sideline you.")

Lyra's the Bearer of Loyalty. She's going to stand by her friend Trixie when Trixie wants a chance to show that she knows what she's doing. And CT's the Bearer of Generosity, she'll give Trixie a chance to prove herself any time.

Because, Like Trixie, they did not properly warn Octavia of how utterly fragile Fluttershy was. Also, If I'm correct, Lyra commanded almost all of Octavia's attention from when Octavia got there to the end of Octavia's first day, so she had the best opportunity to inform her teacher, who she should know would have an incompatible teaching style to Fluttershy, due to Lyra having been told at most a few days ago that Fluttershy was increadibly fragile, and she would be aware of how Octavia teaches, as she was her student.

This was drafted (including this scene in particular) back in early February, before AtGGG had reached the extortion scene (which, IIRC, was when it finished). I didn't post it because S2 of Lunaverse didn't open until late July, at which point I was trying to write more S2 stuff (Exam Jitters) as well as some independent stuff (novel draft, short story submissions). I've only gotten to this now, but all the core ideas were conceived of over a month before the extortion.

There's a few minor updates regarding Gala fallout (the mention earlier of Slimeball leaving the Court, the reference to Max working harder, Fragrant now explicitly being Flutters' aunt, etc.) but Trixie was always going to run into trouble by not keeping a closer eye on Octy and Flutters here.

At that point, I was only referring to what she did to Rarity, which was so utterly dickish, I just assumed that that was you doing what you promised. I apologize that this was not the case.

"Octavia made it sound like they'll have a long night ahead of them. But she also said she'd try to stop by and give me an update at dinner time. Which..." Octavia looked at her clock. "She should be coming along soon."
This is slightly strange.

Please, just accept that Octavia doesn't even sweets--
I think you need a 'like' here unless you were making a 'doesn't afraid of anything' reference.

You wouldn't like if somepony shot broccoli at you, would you?"
Missing an 'it'.

Pretty great chapter! I love the Trixie dream sequences. Everything seems to be wrapping up well for a nice feel-good ending.

>>3423949: Edited, thanks for the notes!

The dreams are fun. I like writing them. :-)

>>3423969 Np. I can be pretty nit-picky, so I notice small stuff like that often.

It's good to hear they're as enjoyable to write as they are to read.

Trixie cried out as she fell out of the bed, cracking her horn again. Ow! Stupid dream with oddly specific logistics!

Okay, that has got to be Luna messing with her.

“Okay,” she said to herself. “They’re just chickens. How bad could they be?”

Then she found out.

Wow. I was laughing so hard at this and the immediate follow up scene that it took a few minutes before I could focus on the rest of the chapter.

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