Nopony's perfect, not even Princess Celestia, she has made mistakes in her past that she regrets.
One of those mistakes will soon return to remind Celestia that the past can never truly be forgotten nor should it.
Someone is causing trouble in Equestria, but Celestia isn't moving from her castle, instead she tasks Twilight and Cadence to handle the problem.
Who is attacking Equestria and why won't Celestia do anything, what secrets is she hiding from her faithful student and loyal subjects?
Chapters (6)
This needs work. We don't need to know who Twilight is or need to know what the Mane 6 are doing. You could tell us they're spending their day normally in Ponyville in one sentence. Also, the character tags only say the princesses and an OC. Lean into that and show us them. They're the main characters and we want to see them. You also need work on grammar and I think getting an editor is a very good idea.
Most of your sentences are choppy and you have a bad case of Telling more than Showing. So, your story wasn't that bad but it needs fixing.
Rainbow Dash would never say that.
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Thank you for the feedback
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Your welcome.
Aside from grammar mistakes and stuff, I like it.
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I........NEED.......MOAR!
MORE PLEASEEEE
Interesting fic/chapter and quite well written as well.
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It's an interesting story, but you should really get an editor.