When Helicity's research on weather is torn apart by a professor, Featherprop decides to set up a surprise for her birthday. With the help of some Wonderbolts, a few bits of cloud, and a stack of pies, he wants to give her a chance to try the ideas she believes in.
When he springs the surprise, she takes a chance, but will the results be worth the risk? There's danger in storms, and even ponies who know what they're doing get caught unawares sometimes.
Yes yes, I know, there's OCs, but she's still cute, at least! Anyway, you should all read this story and then go wish Helicity (@helicityponi, Helicity here) a happy birthday, 'cause I wrote it for her. There's a little bit of romance, but nothing beyond some kissing. Come on, everyone's seen kissing, right?
If anyone sees typos or other errors, please point 'em out- I went past my deadline on this and I'm ashamed to say I didn't edit as closely as I'd like to.
Dat ending. Awww...
What a nice little story. I was sent here by a Mister Cynewulf and was not disappointed.
And since you asked, here are the errors I found:
Extra period here.
Extra spaces throughout this passage.
Extra period again here.
Incorrectly place apostrophe.
"Looked" should be “looking” to keep the same tense.
Space needed after "and."
Several errors here.
I enjoyed the story, and I hope whoever's birthday it is, has a FANTASTIC birthday.
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Thank ya muchly for being so thorough!! I'm glad you liked it!
3141010 It's what I'm here for.