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Ehh, while I'm not a fan of the breezies, just felt like an excuse for a new toyline and to remove Fluttershy's assertiveness again, this was still a cute take on one of them.
This story makes for some of the most awesome crack. Seabreeze/AJ OTP.
That said, I'll be disappointed if someone (maybe the non-Element Hall of Fame crew, since they're the definite giant geeks) doesn't make an over 9000 joke at some point in Seabreeze's presence. Though there's a chance he'll do it himself.
"How long-"
"FOREVER!"
Took me half the chapter for us to realize they were both r63'd.
I wonder how long it will take for Equestria to make contact?
Keep going! ;)
Quite the crack pair indeed. There is not one fic on this entire site to have both AJ and Seabreeze tagged.
It was very confusing in the beginning with the characters not being identified, with the chapter starting in first person with a new character I was left lost as to whether I should now who the character is. Then the introduction of his wife, the part where this confused me was referring to Seabreaze as Applejack's wife then referring to as as a male.
The sudden perspective change didn't help either.
Good god... please let me fix that horrible german xD
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It's literately Google translate since I don't speak a lick of German except "Ich sproken nicht Dutch."
And yeah, I know that's basically "I not English talk."
Any help would be most welcome!
4283451 I'd be happy to help. Just send me the text in english and i'll translate it ^^
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PM sent.
I love this story so much, I find it better than the original 5s/4 one. Shame the rating isn't higher, this is one of those diamonds in the rough as far as reading based on rating goes. All the characters and their backgrounds, the drama with family and reasonable authority figures are what the original was missing (and part of the reason why The Last Crusade is one of the better canon 5s/4 stories when it keeps a single non-pony family member around).
I like the fact that cutie marks can be changed by having a very different upbringing and outlook on life (as opposed to magical cutie mark destiny as implied in the original and The Last Crusade).
Here's to hoping that the story continues, because you are certainly doing a good setup in this alternative retelling. Just getting back to Equestria ISN'T the goal here, there is so much that can come of this and many directions it can take. Any spoilers from the Hall of Heroes on who is who?
The whole first person thing you do seem to always have an issue with the reader being a bit confused as to who's talking.
1) he flow over and
flew
2) iant hickey were his face
where
3) weather around her actually
here
4) toast of my horn
off
5) i lifted a hoof
I
6) Without much fuzz
fuss
boop