Chapter Two: Decisions
Rainbow Dash blinked in surprise, assuming for a moment that she had misheard Twilight. The purple unicorn was standing before her, a very nervous and forced smile upon her face. Rainbow Dash could sense a lot of tense, built-up energy within her friend, whose hooves were noticeably fidgeting.
Rainbow Dash was so taken back by Twilight’s question that a few moments passed before Twilight hesitantly added, “So…?” There was a shaky quiver in her voice. In her surprise, Dash hadn’t even answered the question.
“Oh, um, gee Twilight… that’s kinda a big question you’re asking there,” Rainbow answered shakily, stalling for time. Is there a way to let her off as quickly and as easily as possible? she wondered.
“Oh, naturally,” Twilight answered quickly, nodding her head in agreement. “I wouldn’t blame you in the slightest if you need time to make up your mind. Obviously I’d, um, love it if you’d said yes –” The unicorn somehow managed to blush even deeper upon saying these words, and once more avoided Rainbow Dash’s gaze. “– b-but of course that’s up to you! No pressure at all! If you want to say no, just say it – that’s okay too and I’m definitely fine with that.” Twilight’s hasty speech was ended with yet another forced smile.
As tempted as Rainbow Dash was to simply tell Twilight her honest opinion, leave the library, and never mention the incident to anypony again, she was a better pony than that, and didn’t want to hurt Twilight’s emotions in so blunt a manner. “Well if you don’t mind, I might, uh, have to think about it for a bit,” Rainbow Dash said, avoiding Twilight’s eyes. “I mean, it’s a big question, and I dunno whether I can just answer it on the spot like this…”
“Yep! Sure! That’s fine by me!” Twilight said, nodding frantically once more. “Take as long as you need to make up your mind.”
“Yeah… sure, Twilight,” Rainbow replied, her ears drooping a little. Dammit, I wanted to let her off easily, but now I feel guilty for leading her on. “If you don’t mind I might, uh, go home for a little bit.”
“Of course!” Twilight agreed as the two ponies exited out the front door of the library. “You do what you feel you need to do in order to reach a decision. Take as long as you need!”
“Sure,” Rainbow said briskly, hovering into the air. She was about to zoom off for her home when Twilight cleared her throat.
“I, um, don’t suppose that you’ll come to a decision by later this afternoon, would you?” she asked, forcing herself to face Rainbow Dash with a hopeful smile on her face.
“Um… we’ll see,” Rainbow said, taking off before Twilight unintentionally made her feel any more guilt.
Twilight stayed outside the library, watching the receding form of the pegasus until it was no longer visible to her eyes. Her chest felt oddly tight, and she still had a lump in her throat, but she felt a bit more relieved knowing that she had done all that she could have in asking out the pegasus. As Twilight returned to the library, Spike entered the room.
“So? How’d it go?” he asked.
“Well, it went as well as it could have,” Twilight said. She was trying not to think it over too much – whenever she started to, she remembered how fidgety she had been, and how visible her blush was. “I just have to wait for Rainbow’s response.”
“See? I told you that she’d think about it!” Spike said confidently, punching the air with a fist. “And I’m sure that she’ll agree to go out with you once she’s given it enough thought.”
“Yeah… I’m sure she will,” Twilight said, allowing herself a small smile as she clambered onto a couch. This lasted for about ten seconds, before Twilight started to imagine what could be going through the pegasus’ mind, and started to fidget nervously.
“Twilight…” Spike said warningly, noticing the return of her nerves.
“…What do you think Rainbow thinks of me?” Twilight asked, a hint of worry creeping into her voice. “Do you think she likes me as more than a friend?”
“I’m not answering that,” Spike said, crossing his arms. “You’ve asked Rainbow Dash out, all you can do now is wait for her answer.”
“I suppose so,” Twilight reluctantly said, sighing and resting her head on her hooves. “But I’m starting to feel kinda helpless…This situation is now entirely out of my hooves!”
“And you didn’t expect this when you first planned to ask her out?” Spike asked in a monotone. “Listen, Twilight, you’re a smart mare – you know as well as I do that there really is only one thing you can do right now – and it’s not worrying and panicking about what’s happening.”
“Yes, I suppose you’re right,” Twilight said. “There is only one thing I can do…” Spike nodded in agreement. “…and that’s to write up a flowchart to try and anticipate Rainbow’s reaction to my question, based upon what factors of the conversation she picked up on and her possible thoughts prior to me asking her! What do you think?” Twilight had already gotten up and retrieved a scroll of parchment and a quill.
Rather than giving a proper response, Spike chose to merely smack his face with a claw.
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Rainbow Dash opened the door of her house and headed up to her bedroom, less energetic than she would normally be. It was a good thing that today was her day off from work; she didn’t think that she would be able to concentrate enough to work properly today if she had to. Rainbow collapsed onto her bed, closing her eyes and sighing.
Twilight Sparkle likes me. It was an odd situation, one which Dash had nothing to compare it to. Sure, she’d had ponies who knew her from her various stunts and tricks develop crushes on her before – some of those had been mares, too – but that was different. Those were just random ponies whom Rainbow didn’t have much emotional attachment to, having never known the majority of them before. Twilight was different. Twilight was one of Rainbow’s best friends, someone who she knew and regularly spent time with.
For a minute, Rainbow Dash debated returning to the library right now, and telling Twilight her answer. That as flattered as she was, she just didn’t think of Twilight in the same way, and that she liked the two of them as they had been earlier – as friends. But even in Rainbow’s head, the situation bothered her.
She pictured Twilight’s ears gradually drooping as Rainbow revealed her thoughts. Of Twilight avoiding her eyes, probably saying that it was fine in an unconvincing voice. The disappointed mare’s expression as she returned into the library, no doubt to lose herself in a book in the hopes of forgetting her feelings… no, Rainbow Dash definitely didn’t feel comfortable telling Twilight that she didn’t want to go out with her, regardless of how sincere she sounded in her imagination.
But what was the alternative? Rainbow had never considered the possibility of dating any of her close friends, since that was all that she thought of them as – friends. Sure, now that she was thinking about it, Rainbow could admit that Twilight had a nice, smooth mane, and her coat was certainly warm and cuddly from the times that Rainbow had been in close contact with her. Rainbow could even admit that she had enjoyed the feeling of wrapping a wing around Twilight at the library the other week, managing to comfort and protect Twilight at the same time. All of that was fine. But dating Twilight? That was definitely not in Rainbow’s list of cool things to do.
“Urgh! Why can’t somepony else just tell me what to do, so I can get this over and done with?” Rainbow wondered out loud, frustrated. A moment or two passed before she thought her impulsive idea through. Sure, getting somepony to just tell her what to do was a stupid idea, but asking somepony else for advice in a situation like this? That could work.
Who to ask, though? That was the question. Pinkie was out of the question – the hypothetical best advice she could give Rainbow would no doubt be something insane and misleading. Rarity was out of the picture as well – Rainbow was sure that her advice would somehow lead to her and Twilight dining in a fancy five-star restaurant before the night was out. That left Applejack and Fluttershy.
After a few moments of thinking it over, Rainbow settled on Fluttershy. Applejack was a good friend, but she had as little experience as Rainbow in matters such as these. And besides, she’d probably end up teasing Rainbow about it, something the pegasus would rather not think about. Fluttershy was a much better choice – she was one of Dash’s oldest friends, after all, and was more likely to think over the situation properly than Dash.
Within a few minutes, Rainbow Dash had flown off for Fluttershy’s cottage. She had tried putting it off, but even in those few minutes she couldn’t help but wonder what to do about the Twilight situation. After a short flight, the pegasus was knocking on Fluttershy’s door.
“Come in!” came the soft voice from within, to which Rainbow complied. As usual, Fluttershy’s house was filled with all manner of small creatures running around the place. The yellow pegasus herself was currently sitting on a couch, sipping some tea from a mug. “Hello, Rainbow Dash,” Fluttershy greeted as she took in her visitor. “What brings you around here? I thought you’d be at weather duty.”
“Nah, today’s my day off,” Rainbow said, walking over and sitting opposite Fluttershy on another couch. “As for why I’m here, well, I, uh… it’s kinda personal,” she said, feeling embarrassed as she recalled what she was going to talk to Fluttershy about.
“P-personal?” Fluttershy asked, blushing as brightly as Twilight had been all afternoon.
“Yep, personal,” Rainbow replied simply. “Y’see, earlier today Spike sent me a message saying that Twilight had something important to say to me. I went around to the library, and… well…” Rainbow faltered a little.
“Yes?” Fluttershy asked innocently.
“Well, Twilight sort of… asked me out,” Rainbow said bluntly.
“Oh my!” Fluttershy replied, blushing once more. “That is quite personal!”
“Yeah, I know it is,” Rainbow said, rolling her eyes. “The point is… I kinda don’t know what to say to her, and I was hoping you could help.”
“You mean you haven’t given her an answer yet?” Fluttershy asked, shocked.
“Well… no,” Rainbow said, rubbing her neck awkwardly. “That’s why I came around here – y’see, I need to -”
“Oh, but you simply must give her an answer right away!” Fluttershy interrupted. “If you don’t, who knows what Twilight might think? She’s probably beside herself with nerves right now!”
“You think so?” Rainbow asked, grimacing. She’d felt guilty enough about planning to reject Twilight’s advance – now she was also probably giving Twilight an anxiety attack.
“I wouldn’t be surprised if that was the case,” Fluttershy said, taking a sip of her tea. “What did you tell her when she asked?”
“I said that I needed time to think about it,” Rainbow explained. “That’s not that bad, is it?”
“Well… it’s not the worst thing you could have said, but it’s probably not the best,” Fluttershy said. “You should definitely give her an answer as soon as possible. What were you thinking about it?”
“I’m kinda torn,” Rainbow admitted. “If I say no, I’ll hurt Twilight’s feelings, and I really don’t wanna do that. But if I say yes, then I’m just lying to myself, and everything will fall apart sooner or later. I want to say no, but I don’t want to hurt her feelings.”
“Hmm…” Fluttershy gave it a few moments of thought, putting a hoof to her chin in thought. “I think that if you don’t feel the same way, you’ll just have to be honest with her. Tell her that you don’t want to go out with her, and that you just want to stay friends. I don’t think that there’s a way to reject her without hurting her feelings.”
Rainbow Dash cringed. That was the very last answer she had wanted Fluttershy to give. “Yeah, but… I feel so bad about making her upset. Seeing her unhappy… it’d make me feel pretty bad. Twilight’s a lot nicer when she’s happy, don’t you think?”
“Isn’t it better to let her know your feelings, and save her some heartbreak now rather than later?”
“I dunno… my head says that that’s the right thing to do, but my heart says that it’s wrong,” Rainbow said. “I know how confusing that sounds, but that’s how it is.”
“Well then,” Fluttershy suggested, “why don’t you say yes if you don’t want Twilight to be upset?”
“What?” Rainbow said, shocked. “Are you kidding? I can’t go out with Twilight!”
“Oh?” Fluttershy asked, taking another sip from her mug of tea. “Why not?”
Rainbow hesitated before answering. And hesitated some more, trying to think of what her reason was. Or any reason, really – there were dozens of them. So how come she couldn’t think of a single one right now?
“Well… I guess because she’s my friend?” she eventually answered. “It’d feel kinda weird, dating a friend.”
“How so?” Fluttershy asked. “You two could still do the things you do at the moment, you’d just have more, um, intimate moments as well.” The pegasus blushed again and avoided Rainbow Dash’s gaze.
“With Twilight?” Rainbow Dash raised an eyebrow. “I dunno… I mean, sure, she’s a great pony, and I do like spending time with her. But I just can’t picture myself doing… that sort of stuff with her… although I guess it did feel kinda nice, being able to comfort and warm her up at the library the other week, and I guess she’d be sorta fun to cuddle with based on that…” Rainbow Dash blinked. Where did that come from? And why was she suddenly fiddling around with her hooves so much?
Fluttershy smiled knowingly. “Are you sure you don’t have feelings for Twilight?”
Rather than answer with a simple “no”, Rainbow Dash continued fiddling with her hooves as she considered the question properly for the first time since Twilight had asked her out. What was wrong with the idea of dating the unicorn? Twilight was a great friend, and she and Rainbow had had some great times together, especially after Twilight had introduced Rainbow to reading.
“I… I dunno,” Rainbow said. “Now that I’m actually thinking about it rather than immediately dismissing it, I don’t think that dating Twilight would be that bad… but I dunno whether it’d be a great thing either.” She flicked her tail in frustration.
The cottage was relatively silent (the various animals were naturally as noisy as ever) as Fluttershy pondered the situation whilst finishing off her tea. Even after she put her mug down on a nearby coffee table, the yellow pegasus continued to stay silent as she tried to think of a way to get both of her friends happy.
“I think you have to say yes,” she eventually said, summing the situation up simply.
“You really think so?” Rainbow asked.
“I do,” Fluttershy confirmed. “If you’re not sure about your feelings, it won’t hurt to at least try going out with Twilight for a little while. That way, if you decide that you don’t like her, you’ve at least given it a chance, and Twilight can take comfort in the fact that you did so.”
Rainbow thought Fluttershy’s proposal over. On the surface there was nothing wrong with it, and as Fluttershy had said, as she wasn’t sure of her feelings it wouldn’t hurt to try dating Twilight. “…Yeah, that sounds like a good idea,” Rainbow agreed. “Thanks, Fluttershy.”
“No problem at all,” Fluttershy said, smiling. “Would you like to stay for a mug of tea? I’ve still got some in the kettle, and I didn’t even consider offering you some when you arrived. Sorry,” she added quietly.
Hovering into the air, Rainbow grinned at her fellow pegasus. “Thanks but no thanks, Fluttershy,” she said. “There’s a unicorn I’ve got to go see.”
“Good luck, Rainbow Dash,” Fluttershy said as Dash flew over to the door and opened it. “I hope everything works out between you two!”
Dash gave Fluttershy a nod before flying out the door and in the direction of the library.
“Oh my, I hope that she does decide to stay with Twilight,” Fluttershy said to herself as she got up from the couch. “They’d be such a nice couple. Although I wish she had thought to close the door before she left.”
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Twilight was sitting on a couch in the library, re-reading an old Daring Do book. She had eventually given up on her new flowchart after realising that there were too many variables to keep track of. That, and the majority of options she put down somehow ended up leading to Rainbow Dash turning down her offer, which was something Twilight would rather not have to think about.
In spite of this being her favourite Daring Do book, Twilight could barely concentrate on the words on the page, as her mind kept flashing back to Rainbow Dash no matter how hard she tried not to think about the pegasus. Whenever she forced herself to concentrate on the book, she’d find herself in the middle of a page, unable to recall what had happened in the current scene. Twilight was about to give up on the book and find something more desirable to do, such as frantic pacing, when there was a knock at the door.
Heart pounding, Twilight leapt up from the couch and to the door. Although she was trying to walk at a regular pace, she couldn’t help but canter, in spite of the face that Dash having already made up her mind by now was highly unlikely. Keeping this knowledge in mind, Twilight opened the door, a lump forming in her throat, to see…
“Mail’s here!” said the mailpony as she opened the door. He opened a saddlebag and passed Twilight a few envelopes, some of which looked like bills.
“Oh, um… thank you,” Twilight said, levitating the envelopes from the stallion and placing them on a nearby table. Her ears fell as she turned around to return to the couch. She felt like an idiot – what were the chances that Rainbow had made up her mind so quickly?
“Hey! Twilight!”
The purple unicorn spun around as quickly as she could. She wasn’t imagining that, was she? Her question was answered when the most beautiful pony she had ever laid eyes on swooped through the still-open door. “R-Rainbow!” Twilight exclaimed, her voice shaking. Her heart rate had slowed down when she had opened the door to find the mailpony, but upon seeing the pegasus it sped right up again.
Rainbow Dash landed on the ground, beating her wings a few time to reduce the landing impact. “Kept you waiting, huh?” she asked, grinning at Twilight.
“Y-yeah, you did,” Twilight replied, forcing herself to laugh. Was Rainbow’s grin an indication of good news for her?
“So anyway, I had a think about what you asked me,” Rainbow began, smiling the whole while. Twilight’s body tensed up, and she swallowed.
“Y-yes?” Twilight asked. A moment later she realised how quietly she had spoken, and repeated the question.
“Look, I’m gonna be honest with you,” Rainbow said, looking to the ground. “I- I’m not one hundred percent sure how I feel about you in… y’know, that way.” Twilight’s ears drooped. “But I know that I like you enough that I’m definitely going to give you a chance, Twilight.” Twilight swallowed once more. Was Rainbow Dash about to say what she thought she was? Twilight’s heartbeat was sounding incredibly loud to her.
“S-so…?” Twilight forced herself to ask. It was all she could manage at the moment.
“Sure thing, Twilight,” Rainbow said, smiling gently at her. “I will go out with you.”
If Twilight had any doubts that her heart rate could increase, they were dismissed as her pulse sped up to the point where there were hardly any pauses between beats. “Yes yes yes yes yes!” she shouted. As tempted as she was to jump around Rainbow in joy, she restrained herself enough to hug the pegasus instead, albeit with a very strong grip. “Thank you so much!”
“Pretty darn happy there!” Rainbow commented. “Maybe I should have thought this over more – I can’t have my marefriend be having more energy than me!”
Twilight immediately released the pegasus, her ears unexpectedly falling. “I- I’m sorry, Rainbow,” she said. “I didn’t realise that you- ”
“Uh, Twilight?” Rainbow interrupted. “That was a joke.”
“Oh,” Twilight said, awkwardly rubbing the back of her neck with a hoof as she looked to the floor in embarrassment. “It’s just that I’ve never dated anypony before and, um, when you said that you’d go out with me I thought you wouldn’t mind but I guess that since you said you were joking it is okay so I shouldn’t have overreacted and –”
“Twilight,” Rainbow interrupted again, putting a hoof on her new marefriend’s shoulder to stop her rambling. “It’s okay. Calm down – you don’t have to worry about things like that.” It occurred to Rainbow that she should probably avoid teasing like that in the future in case Twilight took her too literally. “Just say what’s on your mind,” she added, to help calm down the unicorn.
For some reason, this caused Twilight to blush. She hesitated before saying, “Well, I was thinking, it would be nice if we could… I-I mean, I’ve never kissed anypony before, so would you, um, like to, uh, kiss?” She finished with an awkward smile, which Rainbow was already beginning to realise was quite cute.
In response, the pegasus flashed a grin. Buck it, I’ve already said I’ll date her, and it’s gonna happen sooner or later. “Ready when you are,” she said.
Wait a moment, did she say she was ready when I was? Twilight wondered, taken aback. She had hoped that Rainbow would have kissed her, not the other way around. Well… I guess I can’t back down now, she thought. Taking a step or two closer to Rainbow Dash, Twilight moved her lips in closer to Rainbow’s, and then after another brief moment of hesitation, closed the distance and planted her lips over Rainbow’s.
A shiver ran down Twilight’s spine as their lips contacted each other. For some reason, Twilight had expected Dash’s lips to be rougher somehow - as it was, they were soft and delicate, and responded eagerly to Twilight’s exploration of them. Twilight hadn’t realised how sensitive her own lips could be prior to this, each nerve tingling where Dash’s lips made contact with her own. For a few moments, the two mares continued to explore the physical side of their new relationship, before Rainbow Dash eventually pulled back.
Twilight’s felt her cheeks heating up as she reluctantly pulled herself back, tempting as it was to lean forwards once more and continue to kiss Dash. “So, um, how was I?” she asked self-consciously. “I mean, that probably wasn’t that good for my first kiss, but I’m sure that I can improve over time if I experiment more and…”
Rainbow rolled her eyes as Twilight started her babbling once more. There was only way to stop this. “Hey Twilight?” she asked, grinning mischievously.
“…chemicals released in the brain and – yes, Rainbow?” Twilight couldn’t help but smile as she looked at Rainbow and reminded herself that yes, this beautiful mare was her partner.
“Think fast!” said Rainbow, leaning forwards to embrace Twilight in a kiss. For the next few minutes, the two ponies kissed each other, happy to be in each other’s presence.
And neither would rather have it any other way.
The End
Huzzah for bad endings unable to live up to the apparently-good standards set by the first chapter! 
Because seriously, I don't think that this is anywhere near as good as the first chapter was (and that was fairly flawed as it was).
Nevertheless, hopefully you've enjoyed A Magical Spectrum, my first TwiDash shipfic. Thanks for reading! 
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I wonder why most insist on having Fluttershy as the 'councilor' for love advice.
It's effective, yes, but done a lot.
Anyway, love how you ended this. But is it truly over? Or just for now?
And don;t be so hard on yourself. You'll learn how to do it soon enough.
~Skeeter The Lurker
ok, i gotta be honest about this. when i first read that ending, i thought you were joking. then i read the authors comment, and went back to the main page to see if it really was complete. it was. and that saddens me a whole lot, cause this be much longer, and a VERY good story. in other words, i'd suggest making either a sequel, or continuing this story, cause it has so much potential!
meh
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I was actually originally thinking of having Rainbow go to all of her friends for advice to do, but then I decided that it would get repetitive and it would basically be padding out the story, so I decided to just settle on Fluttershy.
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Nah, I don't think I'd be that good at dragging out something like this. I was actually originally going to just do this as a one-shot, but then I decided that Rainbow would probably need time to think over Twi's offer. Plus it gave me an excuse to end the first chapter on a cliffhanger. In addition, the reason I pretty much ended up doing this was because I wanted to write a scene with Twilight being jittery and nervous about asking somepony out, and since I've accomplished that, I see no need to drag this out meaninglessly.
Thanks for the kind comments!
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Makes sense. And it works.
~Skeeter The Lurker
Wait... What?
That's it?
Wat.
Uh... wut. I mean.... wat. I don't.... huh?
Seriously? That's it? Dude... I mean... really? As true as it is you've done what you apparently wanted to do, you can't just end a story like that out of the blue. With the beginning I was getting myself ready for an actual Twidash STORY that didn't end after the "yes". I mean... great story/chapter but... Seriously? That's IT?
Wat
Seriously... There's hardly a story here. It's a good first fic, but keep in mind that plot is a pretty important piece of a story; if the only conflict is that Rainbow doesn't know how to respond, maybe there are other forces out there that sway her judgement? Perhaps there are situations that occur while they date that make Rainbow question her decision?
I'm sorry if this comes off as rude--I don't mean to be--but this isn't a story, my friend. It's the beginning of one.
... It's over...?
Oh well. A good read nonetheless. Thank you for giving me some new TwiDash to enjoy, even if it was ephemeral.
3121427 It's probably a good thing that you didn't go with the whole "asking everyone" thing. That whole thing is old and tired...
I really enjoyed this one! There isn't enough short & simple twidash lately. I especially enjoyed the super-nervous and flustered Twilight!
I see these comments are full of "that's it??" But don't let all that get to you, you did a great job! Though if you do plan to continue it or do more twidash, I'd recommend avoiding the other old and tired trope of throwing in a bunch of conflict that gets between them and yadda yadda yadda. You've got a lot of room for cute flustered Book Nerd stuff that doesn't get explored that much~
WE THE PEOPLE DEMAND MOAR!!!!!!!
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With due respect, I did mention earlier in the comments that I did originally envision this as a one-shot, and the only reason I stretched it out to a two-chapter fic was so that Rainbow would reasonably have more time to think over Twilight's question. To be honest, I don't think that I could write a decent shipfic detailing what happens after the relationship is started, particularly as there are so many shipfics out there. So I'd find it quite hard to do stuff with mine to keep it unique from others.
I'd also like to point out that both Private Study Sessions and Letters From a Secret Admirer are both fics which are entirely about setting the relationship up, not what actually happens afterwards.
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Thanks for the support! Glad to hear you liked it!
3122351 didn't read the comments. Anyway, this doesn't read like a oneshot. It reads like something longer. The ending seems really abrupt. It's all rising action.
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I read the comments beforehand, and I know what you intended. What I'm saying is that you set it up for something much more than what you intended it to be.
Not much of an ending but it was rather sweet and really cute.
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I do agree I wish there was more too.
I do wish there was more, but on the other side it was cute and short. You did what you set out to do, which is better than many of the 1000+ fics in my watching list that aren't complete yet. Good job.
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I think that what the others were saying was that it isn't bad to have the story about the get-together (heaven knows that's all I've ever done and that's what the majority of shipping fics are, like the one's you listed), just that the way this was set up in the first chapter and the way it read in the second suggested that it was going to be at least a few chapters longer. Perhaps going into Rainbow's perspective as they dated and re-evaluating what she talked with Fluttershy about or something (at least that's what I was thinking was going to happen over the next couple of chapters). The ending is a bit abrupt, as others have said, but I feel myself agreeing more with Skeeter here. I enjoyed it, had fun reading it, and am just wondering if this is truly over or if it's just done for now
Not bad, not bad at all! I liked & i had fun reading it, you succeeded in your task
I can see your reasoning behind ending it there, was still a nice read. Bravo!
The flowcharts had me chuckling for quite a bit, as had Twi's freaking out in general.
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I can see where you guys are coming from, but again, this was only ever intended to be a one-shot (before evolving into a two-parter), so any implications of it being longer are completely unintentional. If I feel like it I may come back and write a sequel to this, but I've got quite a few other ideas in my head at the moment, so don't count on it.
3125283 Intent is all well and good, I'm just letting you know that you've failed to make it as short a story as you wanted. It's not the fact that the story is supposed to be about the beginning of a relationship. Those are fine, I've read plenty of them. But that's not what was presented here.
I'm not entreating you to write more if you don't want to. Do what you want. Just realize that from where I stand (and I'm betting plenty agree), your story kinda goes rising action -> rising action -> full stop. It's incomplete. If you wanted something short, self-contained, about the beginning of a relationship, it'd need a pretty hard re-write. There was setup with no resolution.
Um I know that this may seem strange but I expected Fluttershy when her and Rainbow to stop talking to say something along the lines of "So hard telling youre youre crush to go out with someone else" but now that I se that it's short I can see a reason other than Something along the lines of that's stupied... Eep im sorry that this made little to no sence.
Wow, very nice story, and agree with the others coments, this should continue.
doesnt matter has SWAG!!!!
it was a short ending but still good in my eyes well done
Thank you so much. There is this girl I want to ask out and I've been my iner self ( Twilight self not Fluttershy self ) but now I need to just fallow spikes advice. Thank you
It's not too bad for a fic this length. I did like the first chapter better. Keep at it.
3141107 It has what now
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Never the less, about this story, well I always prefer for TwiDash to be long, but long or short its simply impossible to NOT to like it.
A fun story to read, hope for more TwiDash in the future
3156630 yes to answer the word was SWAG
Even though this was a short fic,(I prefer long 20-30 chapter stories. HOORAY FOR READING) This is possibly one of the greatest TwiDash I've ever read. Good work man.
That was adorable. Good work!
And behind the window, the mailpony would be seen staring at the cupcake in the kitchen.
Don't be hard on yourself, this was great story.
An analysis of this story: it was touching, and it was a pretty decent ship, despite the drop in quality to the second chapter. Nevertheless, I don't exactly agree with this ship myself, but I found it to be great.
In one word: "D'ah!"
(I hope that all made sense. Or not. Anyway just know I liked it. Well, the first chapter atleast.)
MORE???
Uh i mean... please continue!
This ship just became a thing for me because of this story. lol. Now I'm gonna' go look for more twidash. xP
3778083 And then you wrote a story I see.
3957495 I did, indeed. A pretty popular one, in fact. It surprised me. Lol.
3778083 I see I've found the fic that introduced you to Twidash! Kind of a cool find!
4253627 Lol. Yep. Before that, I was really only into OctaScratch and Twixie.
4254075 Was the opposite for me (minus the Twixie). I was a Twidasher since I found my first fanfic, Building Bridges. Then, one day, I decided to see what the top rated stories on the site were, regardless of tag or group, and Vinyl and Octavia: University Days was right near the top. Read it, became an instant Octascratcher. I accepted it before, but now... I LOVE IT! Thank you for reading my completely unnecessary back-story
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4254324 Lol. I see. Well, we should probably stop spamming Doctor Spectrum's comment box.
You write OctaScratch AND TwiDash?
That is so awesome I don't even know what to say except
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Glad to see you appreciate it, although to be honest I've been having such fun with The Vinyl and Octavia Series recently that I doubt I'll write any TwiDash for a while.
4355891 That's completely okay with me! Totally loved that series. Read it in a day. Literally. Like, over a total period of maybe a few hours of actual reading. Today.
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Well, glad to see that my works entertain you so much! I've got a nice idea for the next in the series, so hopefully after a bit of brainstorming I'll be able to get the first chapter out soon-ish (no promises though).
3121025 I think it's because Rarity is a romantic, Applejack would tease, and Pinkie Pie, is... Pinkie Pie. When TwiDash ships are present, the only real option for a somewhat unbiased opinion is shy. In Stories where homosexuality is a issue, Applejack usually plays the traditionalist, which is an issue, Rarity, while usually accepting, is the romantic, and just expects romance, all the time, and Pinkie Pie, while a good backup, is still usually too hyper/random for a consistent gauge of romantic judgement. It can be done, but Shy is simply easier. She's a romantic, but also kind, and reserved. She wouldn't be overzealous, nor would she reject an opportunity to help her friends, even if she doesn't morally agree with them. She can think of decent advice, and is willing to think what she says through.
This was a pretty nice read!
What I particularly like about this story, is that it seems to have a lot of thought put into it, and actually focuses on the thought processes that go through both Twilight and Rainbow's heads. It's somewhat rare to have that happen enough in stories. Love is, contrary to popular opinion, also a thought process, and not just a raw emotion. Having a balance of the two is important to make it both seem real and be gratifying. This story did that well.
TwiDash on!
First reaction: OMG I miss Killryde so much (LOL)
Second reaction: CUTENESS!!!!
I really like how this turned out! You explored the the process of Dash realizing that she might like Twilight after all very well, and the ending was freaking adorable
thumbs up and fav'd!