Commence Reading.exe

Comment: Fun. Nice. Cute. Funny.

Rainbow just can't get over being an egghead, but perfectly fine with being with an egghead.

And RD STILL cares more about being thought of as an egghead then being in a relationship.

I love it! Looking forward to more.

Please keep writing, I'll keep reading!

lol you've got me hooked!

Oh Rainbow Dash! Your reputation will never recover from that article by Gabby Gums.You may just come out behind the book shelves.

I hate really good one-shots, because I know there's no' MOAR' to shout for

This is funny.

More. Must nom on more this Twidash.

Bravo!

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Once again you have written something amazing.

I present this to you, for a job well done.

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Well done! I Twidash

Really fun, with some laugh-out-loud moments. More please!

Sweet.  Like... Pinkie Pie.  That kind of sweet.

Anyways, cute and funny.  Muy bueno, señor Steel.

   En español,

               ~Plyxe

Can't really say much. Shipping's not my thing, and outside that, there's really no story to it: too easy and clean and generic.

-Scott

>>13917111391711 Correct, its not designed for drama. It's just meant to be a little feel good one shot. But thanks for commenting.

>>13917191391719 Also, there looks to be a missing line-space before 'Twilight, please open the door?'

Have you considered using proper dashes instead of hyphens? I only really learned about it a couple of months ago, but it already looks weird to me.

This story was like a delicious cookie with all of my favorite ingredients!

But now I ated it.

GAH! it's not long enough

I want more!

It was short and sweet and although I think I prefer the somewhat longer stories with a little emotional tension this was great.

Oh, boy

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A fantastic little story, loved it.

>>13921181392118 I know!

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I killed a guy! With a trident!

Short, sweet, cute, and funny.

You nailed all of the characters' personalities, and the overall plot felt believable.

Good job.

Good story, love it.

>>13945531394553

One question: Why this story don't apear in my favorite list nor my read later list? I only can access from the post that you send to the followers of Green.

>>13952011395201 because its not officially visible to the site yet. its still waiting for approval.

TwiDash story from Steel Resolve? DONE. No need for the Read Later list, this one goes on top of the pile. Short and adorable, in character, believable, well written - all the hallmarks of the kind of fic I could read all day. Gold star & thumbs up for you!

Cute

>>13917191391719

Hey! You know, what you should do? You should do a one shot featuring Raridash!

Yes! What a great idea!

< -"That's an awesome idea!"

< -"The best idea!"

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Liked it.  Very cute.

great story but my favorite part was when you used the word cravenly. i love the word craven and you dont see it a lot today. So, thank you

Very cute, and very funny. A one-hit-wonder!

Brought here by DawnFade's recommendation, and it was worth it. I may have to take a look at Green.

>>13989251398925 It's a good read. If you try it out prepare your body for drama, cute, and sexy. In that order. Stretching is recommended.

Why do I feel so strongly that I've read this before? Have you posted this someplace else?

that ending

>>13989881398988 Nope, just finished it a couple nights ago.

>>13989981398998

...Curious.

Excellent, and almost overwhelmingly cute. But why does this have a comedy tag? It was a bit silly, but I didn't notice anything particularly funny about it.

A little sudden, but funny

>>13990231399023 Well... that was the direction I was going for when I wrote it. My main shipfic Green has some funny moments too, but no comedy tag because that's not the intent. With this I was going for a fluffy little romance about a couple just forming over a mutual love. One of them happens to be closeted... but not about her sexuality.

>>13989481398948 Hey, didn't remember that you were the So, you've grown wings author, I'm surprised I didn’t have you on watch before now. I will definitely have to give it a read.

lol

So how did you two meet?

- I was doing tricks!! Yep! Bonded over my awesome stunt flying and incredible acrobatics AND NOTHING ELSE!!

- Eh heh, yes that's right, nothing else...

A fun little read.

Especially since what Twi is saying about Dash needing to apply herself to the technical side of flying is absolutely true.

I'm not a TwiDash fan, but this was enjoyable enough for a quickfic.

Bravo

Books are now drugs... and Twilight is the drug dealer.  I could have been happy with the story left at just that little concept alone, with Rainbow sneaking out at night to read at Twilight's, but the romance was the icing on top of the cake.  Well done.

>>13992791399279 This... you get it. Thank you.

Not much to say about this that hasn't already been said, it was short, sweet and ludicrously cute.

I will add that Dash not caring about what anyone thinks of the relationship, but worried about being discovered studying fits her absolutely perfectly.

Yep, cute lil story, amazing characterization.  Bonus points for "fortress of blanketude."

>>13906721390672

#import reading.h

int main()

{

int count = 1;

while (count < 0)

{

// initiate the fun, nice, cute, funny loop

cout << "DAWWWWWWWHHHHH" << endl;

};

return 0;

};

D'aww that was so sweet!

That was so cute it was stupid.

AND I LOVE STUPID!

Loved it

It's just so cute, I think I'll die.

>>13994991399499

I don't quite think infinite daaaws are necessary, but some are indeed necessary.

I got exactly what I expected from this.

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And I love it.

I... CAN'T... LOOK... AWAY!

wait... the story... it ends there?

FFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFFUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUU

uh... i... just really hate it when stories end like that.

-pokerface

Execute brain.exe.

commence task: read storry.

Task completed.

Execute task: mind blown

EROR DEEP CORE FAILIURE. INITITATING EMERGENCY SHUTDOWN.

IT STOPPED ITTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTTT

Wonderfull work. may we get a sequel please?

>>13994991399499

Reading.exe had crashed!

Error Report: Just can't handle it...!

That was very well done its a shame it was a one shot it was very well written just like green I do hope you make more Twidash and continue with Green cause I'm loving everything in that story Keep up the great work

Short, but hilarious.

Love it!

Is it just me or has there been a influx of Twidash recently?

Not that I oppose. It's my OTP.

All those wingboners....

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This was hilarious, too bad its only a one-shot. For the highest honor, I give a fav, thumbs up, and a watch.

>>14004011400401 Well you know, if you happen to like the style, I have another fic that is much longer. Granted it doesn't have Twidash, but it has twinkie, appledash, and flarity.

>>13995291399529 Oh you too?

I read the entire thing in Adam Jensen's voice. Best. Story. Ever!

-Glassed

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God, that was so gay, my rainbow mane is on fire!

(Just kidding.)

It was a cute lil' tidbit. I'll give you a proper breakdown of thoughts, opinions, and highlights, because I'm in that kind of mood today.

1) Rainbow Loves Reading. Definitely a good device to use in order to cook up this kind of situation. It's the most logical type of thing, and though I feel Twi would've tried to put Dash's nerves to ease about "eggheadery" way earlier on, she's also the kind of person to 'leave it alone' if she's making someone uncomfortable. You also gave good background on the rate these late-night studies have been going, which makes the featured event more believable, as there is background.

2) Denial Thoughts. While these may work in some situations, I'm finding them too commonplace and cheap-shot. Unless it's followed up by a narrative clue that they're only thinking it as reverse-psychology, acknowledging their true feelings while 'disguising' them, I don't like seeing this. It's geeky; I know and have known too many geeky, alternative/scene, socially awkward kids who've done stuff like that, and it's just not Rainbow's style, whereas vehement denial definitely is her game.

Another thing that has to be pointed out is that "denial thoughts" like those are cheap because they're very quick, revealing "telling" statements, whereas the reader gains a much better sense of transportation into the story through showing. Instead of Rainbow thinking that she's not attracted to Twilight as a prod to the reader, a much, much better technique would have been a short scene of Rainbow admiring Twilight's form, or thinking about the things that light her up.

That's the real thing about show vs. tell, everyone:

Tell: "Pinkie Pie was overexcited."

Show: "Pinkie's fluffy tail whipped back and forth, slapping the wooden floor panels. She bit her lower lip and trembled every few seconds, bright eyes darting back and forth like giant blue blurs. As Rarity approached, her lips quivered, and she pressed her hooves into the floor.

You can tell how Pinkie's excited for sure because I've shown it--I never had to write, "excited." You weren't just given information, "Pinkie's excited," you saw it for yourself, having the mental vision generated step by step, and in letting your visual be guided along, you probably felt her excitement, as well.

Here's a big clue for everyone out there: You know writing works when descriptions of character actions make you mimic them or want to. If a character is excited, you feel excited; if they are afraid, you feel goosebumps; if they cringe, you find yourself cringing, too. This is fully willful transportation into the story, submitting oneself to the described reality.

(Yes, that's why erotic fiction works when it's written correctly--the writing is of such good quality, it creates a sensory illusion. And people like pleasure, so, there ya go.)

3) If You Build It, Bronies Will D'Aww. Like I said in the other TwiDash fic I commented on, the best way to get stuff to work for a reader is to build anticipation through successive moments in the story. Moving too fast will crash the train. See, if you keep leading people in the direction, "They're gonna bone," and keep putting in moments that build character connection, strengthening it and intensifying built-up emotion, the reader will be more wound up to see things finally 'pop' between the two. That's why foreplay is key, ladies and gentlemen. The longer you wait and the more the author teases you, the more you want to see it. That's why it took seven books for Harry Potter to pimp-slap Voldemort face-to-face.*

*Events described may or may not have actually taken place.

4) FORTRESS OF BLANKETUDE. Honestly, I just had to point out that line, because I loved it. Also, through imagining that "fortress of blanketude," I got the absolute best impression of the scene. That's a magic sentence, right thar--you gave an impression of what was there without even describing it. Sometimes, less is more; balance is a tricky thing.

5) Shh! Don't Tell... Rainbow's only real worry in regards to their activities was a cute way to end the story and really put a nice cap on things.

And that is an Inky Analysis. Carry on, brony.

Fortress of blanketude. My day hath been made.

Is TwiDash becoming the new LyraBon (or OctaScratch?)  Not that I mind, not at all (though I do prefer the Twilight/Rainbow/Pinkie threesome)

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I'll read it later, too much homework -.-

Sweeeeeet!!!

Not bad. Could use more "teh funniez". Maybe work some of what they were reading into being derailed by their thoughts or something...

Well played intro made it seem like something else was going on from the start.

*sees no more chapters* FUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUCK

Need more

>>14004261400426 Meh, not very big on Appledash or flarity. But I'll give it a look later nonetheless!

So... freaking... adorable.

Short, sweet, cute, in-character, and wonderfully wirtten.  Well done, good sir!

I only wish there was more.  That's the problem with these sensational one-shots.

>>14004011400401>>14004261400426 For TwiDash: try Building Bridges, (or for those wanting clop scenes too, Wind Beneath Her Wings).

My absolute favorite Twidash has to be Flying High, Falling Hard though; it's practically a novel in my opinion.

(unless you are looking for humanxSpitfirexRainbow, don't read Flying High, Getting Hard. If you are, that fic is probably the best humanxSpitfirexRainbow fic you will ever read)

Gah, AppleDash is the one true pairing*. No doubt about it in my mind.

Why then, do I keep reading these TwiDash fics and find them so darn adorable every time??

*For the record, AppleSoarDash is the one true threesome.

I liked it. I thought the awkwardness between the two was well done, Twilights overcalculating and overthinking was in character and just like her and the whole concept of Dash being in the "closet" about liking books was really funny! Keep up the good work!

>>14003091400309

secret, but fun.

edit: sorry

>>14014561401456

Ow. Not so bright a color please.

Ah, what a nice little one-shot.

>>14006831400683

That is a very nice outlining of thought and statement,

>>13994991399499

I chuckled at what I thought was an inclusion of a joke header, then I saw this...

#import reading.h

int main()

{

int count = 1;

while (count < 0)

{    

// initiate the fun, nice, cute, funny loop

cout << "DAWWWWWWWHHHHH" << endl;

};

return 0;

};

Twilight/Dash.....always a winning ship combo.... Bravissimo!+=

>>14013351401335 Indeed. Couldn't have said it better myself! Also, about your avatar...

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Rainbow in denial is always fun

>>14017281401728

C++ is a little rusty, haven't used it in years, please excuse any errors. Im right now learning Obj-C for iPhone programming. And yes, I know that if that were to compile, it would result in an infinite loop. Forgive me programming professors!

>>14015261401526

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ohhhhhh! the feels! they hurt and yet are so good!

Hmmm...color me interested. Adding to read later list.

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REALLY LIKE THIS PART:

Just kiss her already! Think of it as an experiment. Just... testing a hypothesis. Studying the fascinating interactions of two distinct bodies, particularly given the immense, seemingly magnetic properties possessed by one of them. I would merely have to provide a little action, and wait for the reaction. A body at rest would remain so unless an outside force acted on it, after all... She nodded to herself; couching her dilemma in scientific terms somehow made it sound more rational. And then maybe we could switch to some fluid dynamics...

it is super awesome how you wrote it and i find i connect to it as i think in rather scientifically ways to problem solve even the simplest of things, kinda like twilight did.

It feels short and rushed.  But I kinda like it.

Well buddy, you strike gold again. Or i guess crude oil to lubricate your crude humor.

But yeah. This rocked. You already know my critiques so just dropping the obligatory praise here.

Don't hide shit from me no more

I have to wonder where spike is?

>>14041921404192 in Canterlot on royal business.

maybe mention that next time. still a good read though.

I've been waiting since Read It and Weep aired for a fanfic like this.

I give this eight out of ten derpys. good job dear sir.

Egghead. xD

Nice read, thank you so much~!

>>14022151402215

Bah, I'm not worried THAT much about the infinite loop (Your intention is to spend the cycles allocated to your program Dawing only right?), I'm just sad to see the logical flaw in it; "1 < 0" will always return false because 1 is never less than 0, thus the loop will never be executed, and since you are rusty in C++ and not programming in general (you are currently learning objective-c), I can't really excuse that little obvious conundrum.

Also, be a dear and compile this for me would you.

#include <iostream>

using std::cout;

using std::endl;

int main()

{

  bool rainbowIsReading = true;

  while(rainbowIsReading){

    cout << "DAWWWWWWWHHHHH" << endl;

  }

  return 0;

}

I've never been more surprised to load a story with a title like that and see the "Everyone" tag.

(RIL'd.)