Alright nice chapter so far i injoy the detail you put in when she tells us that she hasnt been out the brothal in years got right in my heart man
what did i tell you about acting like you know shit damn it! You dont know anything but to be a slave to our queen now come here!
im sorry plz master dont beat me again plz dont beat me!
no you get over here and take it like a man damn it!....sorry about that...my mind goes places i wish it didnt

I missed this fic. I'm glad to see you back!

Was definitely suprised to see this pop up as updated. Great job. I look forward to more, but take your time and go at the pace your comfortable with. I'm sure everyone whose waiting will still be here.

Oh my god.

... I will read this later tonight. I suddenly feel a little hope in my heart.

While I know this is a clopfic, you have me interested enough in the villainy that I want to read more and the clop no longer matters.

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Huh, that might be the biggest compliment I've gotten on this story...

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Totally.
And its nice to have some more content of that mad mare.

This is my comment. There are many like it but this one's for you.

I'm also in this story as much for what's going on as for the smexy bits. And not just Marelevolent's... I want to know what Marelevolent is actually up to and how Trick is going to save her lovely, "evil" rump from Mild Mannered Not-Sparkle the Deffinitely-a-Reporter-and-Nothing-Else. Because sympathetic villains are cool like that.

Got a bit of the feels towards the end there. It's heartfelt when a, er, working mare wants to look nice when she's never been given the opportunity.

I'm also curious how she's going to help rob the place when she's dragging in a million bits. Maybe I'm just not thinking evil but putting money into the Mint isn't robbing it... although it's still illegal... somehow. I suppose it's technically littering?

The whole plan seems as flimsy as one of the lacy things back at the brothel.

Mmm, then again, most supervillain plans are. The fun, entertaining ones anyway.
I'll just wait till it all blows up like an overinflated mare-doll.

The chapter was good, but it shows something important as well - your writing skills haven't gotten rusty. Despite how much shorter it is compared to the first chapter, a lot comes out here, and leaves enough for the reader to want more, which hopefully comes sooner rather than later.

So yes, this was a good chapter. I'm really glad you got around to writing this.

Excellent. I'm loving this story. Very engaging plot and a very well developed main character. This would get a fave and a like from me even if it weren't a clopfic. Please continue.

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He nodded, a bit flustered. “Oh, um...yes. So I came a few days ago, and...well...you were there for that bit.” He paused, seeming to recall the memory. “While I had figured out what the restaurant was for, I had no idea that the Madame was one of Maretropolis’s many supervillains. Now that I know...it seems blatantly obvious, but still everyone seems to remain blind to it.”

“Tell me about it.” I huffed internally.

That remind of other certains villains who's is obvious:
The Hooded Claw:

And Dan Backsilde from the cartoon "The Dover Boys of Pimento University"

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THIS.

Aaaah, I am so very, very happy to see this update! It was a pleasure reading it. Trick is the kind of wonderfully written character who deserves a hundred works of fanart of her. The reader really feels for her, y'know? I can just feel the tenderness of these moments when I'm reading what's going on in her mind: when she reflects on how thankful she is to the Madame Trick for taking her off the street and for accepting her no matter her orientation; that awkward, odd-feeling realization that after staying inside the brothel for so long she's forgotten that ponies don't normally wear clothes; when she tears up at being able to look and feel nice for the first time in her life. . . . This is quite a touching story. Trick is a beautiful character. I can't stop smiling after reading this chapter!

Oh! And a couple typos: "I paused as I reached the stares" misspells the word "stairs", "might bit" should be "mite bit", and you need to capitalize the word "he" at the beginnings of the sentences "he shrugged." and "he got even more bashful than usual". Also, you misspelled Madame Marelevolent's name in the title of the fic!

Commence read.

Alright. Robbing a bank. Neato.

3060871 Common Sense: So rare, it's a super power.

You should add the mane-iac tag to both stories.

Do you have any updates planned, clop or otherwise? The only way there could be clop in the near future is if she has to seduce her way out of the mint. Or it goes off without a hitch and the mane-iac gives a nice thank you (hopefully she stays awake longer if so). I'd be happy either way, both kinds of plot are nice.

I bit my lip and clamped down on that thought like a bear trap. I was about to help rob a mint. I didn’t need to be getting wet right now.

Nonsense~

Wonderful and sweet. Trick is endearing in so many ways. I love the setting, the spirit of it all.

Just read the last story and this one, and I'm hoping that this one will be finished someday!

Your writing is notably good.
I've been really excited to see Trick getting intimate with some of her co-workers sometime soon, since her daydreams teased me as a reader pretty good, but oh well. Maybe someday you're coming back to this story