(This story is a legacy story, meaning it's mostly been left up for archival purposes; I don't consider it a current indication of my writing skill, but I wanted to let it remain available. Please, have a look at my most recent story for my current best work!)
Time is an illusion. Teatime doubly so.
Maneverse Celestia and Lunaverse Luna get together for tea.
(A Lunaverse story. Not my best, I feel, but I'm happy to contribute to this amazing universe, no matter how inadequate my own addition is.)
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huh....
do more. seriously, have more discussions over tea.
The pocket universe idea is interesting, a little strange and somewhat roofless but interesting.
I did find it a bit confusing as to who was talking near the beginning but I got over that.
I think you should try more Lunaverse stories.
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Thanks! I might fiddle with that, see if I can get it to work a little better. If the inspiration strikes, I might just try another story.
But technically the ponies from the pocket universe don´t merely die, but will be erased from the fabric of reality; isn´t a bit...unsettling?
Interesting story. The concept is nice, although I found the digression on calculators and technology rather jarring. The exact tech level of Equestria (either one) is vague and that is in my opinion a good thing - leaves more elbow room for ideas.
As mentioned, sometimes it's hard to know who's speaking.
Other than that, a fun read. I liked the little nods to how some ponies are "in the background" and such, and I recognize the elaboration on the specific china from a certain other story about princesses and tea...
this gets a cublins Stamp of Approval
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Thank you for the comment! I agree, maybe the tech discussion was a bit unusual. I always got a bit more of a steampunk vibe from the Lunaverse, or at least an Industrial revolution-ish feel.
And yes, that story is where I got the idea, if not the execution, of the teacups. I do like those, and they fit Celestia so perfectly... Anyway, thank you. Like I mentioned, I'll fiddle with it a bit. Mind checking out my other stuff in the meantime?
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But, on the other hand, they wouldn't have existed in the first place had Luna not created the pocket dimension. (It's meant to be a little bit of a moral grey area.)
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Creating sapient beings with souls for a few hours, just to left them die and disappear is not in a grey area. It´s Discord´s level of godlike jerkiness.
It would have been a bit easier to set this conversation a thousand years in the future. That way, they could compare notes and see how similar their worlds have become.
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Sadly, I have to agree with Raistlin. The fact that they're so nonchalant about the fact that other intelligent life is being snuffed out is rather jarring.
Now, if they were meeting in a mentally projected realm, like a shared daydream, and the ponies around them were imaginary, that would be very different.
nice idea, btu the characters are to dispassionate.
Yeah, this is really incompassionate and frankly cruel on the part of the alicorns. Sorry, but this didn't work at al for me.
Nicely done! Love the whole Pocket-verse bit. Certainly put things into perspective as to why everypony was running here and there.
Again Great Job.
Is it weid that my biggest complaint (aside from Random Capitals) has to do with calculators?
In the 1800s, calculators werewell known and "computer" was a job descriptions. Mechanical calculators (since I assume Celestia displayed a four-banger) have certainly been around since the time period the Lunaverse emulates
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Eh, I probably have good reasons for all of the Random Capitals, if I was going to go find all of them. As for the calculator thing...
(Looks up the history of Calculators here.)
...Scheisse. Well, okay, we're both half-right. The most common calculator throughout most of the 1800s was hand-cranked, according to this, and for a species without hands, I'd think they try a couple other solutions first, eh? But yeah, for a victorian-era feel, It's not correct, at least not entirely. I'll have to add that to the list, then.
3048938 I gotta agree, here. Creating a pocket universe that would collapse and kill everyone inside of it.. for tea? Sorry, just really stretches things for me.
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Bleh.
I hadn't even thought about that when I wrote this; If I had thought it would be this big a deal, I would've written it differently from the get-go. As I've stated before, I'll fiddle with it a bit when I've the time. Thanks for the criticism all the same.
I like it. I haven't read
muchany Lunaverse before now, but I think I might like it. As for the whole Pocket Universe thing, I think that the dream metaphor works well. When you wake up, does it not "destroy" the world of your dream? I can understand that. Also, are you a Doctor Who fan? Because you described a perception filter exactly as it was in Doctor Who (everypony just ignores it because their subconscious says it's boring), and that's a little eerie if not a Who reference.3513363
Kinda Dr. Who, kinda Hitchhiker's Guide to the Universe. Of course, when you consider that Douglas Adams wrote a fair few Dr. Who episodes...
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Holy shit. Did he seriously? My world has just been completely redefined. I need a moment to cope with this.
¡Creating universe with all of those ponies, gryphons, dragons, diamonddogs, et cetera just to die a slow painful deaths is just terrible! The only redeeming parts of the story are the references to Inception, Doctor Whooves, and The Hitchhikers’ Guide To The Galaxy. You and Dave “Progenocide Antiscience” Polsky have much in common.
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I... beg your pardon? I'm not sure I get the joke, if this is one, and if it is it's not a particularly funny one. For one, yes, I agree that the whole alternate universe thing isn't entirely ethical, but that doesn't mean I support that sort of thing. Second, I'm not sure who this Dave Polsky chap is. A google search tells me he wrote a couple MLP episodes, but I'm not sure where you're coming from by insulting both of us. I'm sorry, but if this is a joke, it's gone the way of the clouds: right over my head.
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It is not a joke. I have encountered abusive parents who feel that it is okay to abuse their children because they created them. In your story we have an unstable pocketuniverse full of thinking feeling beings disintegrate, causing those in it to suffer and die, but it is okay because the alicorns created them.
I never said that you did personally, but it does paint the alicorns as tyrannical monsters with hearts of ice, unworthy of ruling Equestria. Because they control the Celestial Bodies, we are stuck trying to satisfy their whims.
I thought it would be obvious:
Dave Polsky wrote the old worst episode of MLP:FIM S01E15 "Feeling Pinkie Keen". The moral of the episode is that we should not try to understand our world. It is very antiscience. Then he topped himself by writing the new worst episode of MLP:FIM:
He wrote S03E03 “Too Many Pinkies”. Pinkamena Diane Pie thoughtlessly recreates a large number of thinking feeling duplicates. These duplicates tried to reason and exhibited the following emotions:
* Joy
* Depression
* Anxiety
* Boredom
The solution of Twilight Sparkle to dealing with the duplicates is genocide. Setting that aside, the test she uses to choose the Pinkamena Diane Pie to spare, is not designed to choose the original Pinkamena Diane Pie, but the most mellow Pinkamena Diane Pie:
The duplicates were only a few hours old. They had very few memories. Asking a few questions about shared events would have rapidly found the original Pinkamena Diane Pie. Instead, Twilight Sparkle makes the Pinkies watch paint dry. She murders all of the Pinkies except the least fidgety one. She treated this as an opportunity to trade in her old friend for a new and improved less annoying version. Twilight Sparkle does not care that she might murder her old friend.
The episode also shows casual animal cruelty when Twilight Sparkle turns a bird and a frog into oranges.
It is not a joke. If you ever have to interact with children abused by parents who consider them property because they made their children, you will understand.
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You might be reading a little too far into this, man. It's fanfiction of fanfiction based on colorful magic marshmellow ponies. It certainly seems like the author didn't intentionally put the message you're seeing here, judging from their comments and blog. And especially bringing up a topic like child abuse and comparing that atrocity to a fanfic goes too far over a line.
It's a short but interesting story.