Sweetie Belle gets a 'love at first sight' crush on a pegasus known as Show Tail, who seems far more interested in everything else but her. Dealing with one's first crush is hard, when you have to beg for his attention. But if you persevere, just maybe, you can win a heart. Oh the woes of young love. Hope you like this better! I know I do!
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Can't say it much better then marine....oh on the story idk just one error stood out to me " I simply cant explain or understand it, but alas, he captured me, heard and soul with that charming smile!" about 3/4s down in the story. I think/know u ment "heart" when u put "heard" its just a scene where something like that sticks out but great story ^^
oh and "He took my first kiss... and other things. "
i c wut u did dere XD
This is some really nice Rarity and Sweetie Belle sisterly bonding right here. I really like the way you've described Sweetie Belle's feelings - neither too mundane nor too flowery. The fact that he's more interested in Scootaloo is a nice touch, too - it'll be interesting to see how the Crusaders' friendship copes with romantic competition.
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Stupid spell check.
Fixed! Why is it when you're done, half of the thing has spelling errors like that...
You made me DAAAW on the inside. And that in itself is an accomplishment.
See I'm normally very hard to touch. But this came close. A damn sight closer then most other stories. Well done.
Can't wait to see more. ^^
Keep up the good work!
Absolutely wonderful! You've described first love beautifully. Thank you for writing it!
Good! i'm liking this fic, keep up the good work.
D'aww, how sweet. It reminds me of when... Wait, this has never happened to me! foreveralone.jpg
This is really good, but it REAALY feels like we missed a chapter.
Oh, poor Sweetie Belle. I really love how uncertain she is of what to do, and Show Tail's obliviousness.
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Note, this is a week later, and yes, I like huge in between chapter time skips. Makes for more stuff to happen and I can skip more mundane things...
Like the third chapter, I plan...
Oops, no spoilers.
Is this supposed to be sad? Cause it makes me laugh. Silly little not daaw crap.
Great chapter though.
Wow, this is all getting to be so complicated and awkward. Jealousy and complications everywhere. I love it! Poor Scootaloo. Poor Sweetie Belle. Poor Show Tail. Poor everypony needs hugs.
AHAHAHAHAHAHAHA drama...
Nice chapter. Bit of a change in Scoot but I guess that's what you were going for.
Hey i've been liking the story so far, but i noticed some mistakes:
“Maybe you're taking this to seriously Tails."
"He couldn't tell if he was dreaming or dreaming." Unless repeating dreaming was intentional.
There must be more! quick, we need an update!
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O__O I just wrote this! I went through sleep deprivation for you guys! Derp. Fine. I will start tomorrow!
-Is glad that she didnt get stabbed (Yet or at all) for Pinkie Pie-
Poor Pinkie. She still loves Seuss but she knows what everypony would say when they found out he was her cousin. Here's hoping it works out for them in the end. Also, STOP TORMENTING SWEETIE BELLE!!!! SHE IS BEST FILLY AND DOESN'T DESERVE TO BE TORMENTED LIKE THIS!!!!
ps. loving this so far.
Ahahahaha. That was hilarious. Well done.
I'm really enjoying following this story! Watching the Crusaders and their peers taking their first tentative steps into romance is really sweet. I just hope Sweetie Belle doesn't throw away her friendship with Scootaloo for a colt, that would make her a silly pony indeed.
The very first one I decided to track, because I knew I had to see what happens next. ^_^
I made a user now just so I could track this story <.<
A very good story. This is an expertly written gem that surely deserves more attention. A solid 5 stars from me!
She made the first move! Did not expect Sweetie to be so up front, but it fits perfectly. Now Show just needs to find out the truth about Scootaloo, and then Show and Belle forever!
Very good chapter! Liked the back stories of AJ and Rainbow's first crush.
Awesome job Brony
Great Chapter,
for Sweetie Belle for Kissing him.
I'm really impressed with this chapter. There's just so much going on here. I love your characterization of Snails, how he's basically figured out the entire plot of the story but can't express himself properly. The Scootaloo-Tails-Sweetie love triangle is just getting more and more awkward, and I really liked Applejack and Rainbow Dash's stories, too. I'm really enjoying this!
Fight, wait wat? Did I miss a chapter?
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No. Off screen fighting in the time gap. They be jelly of the colt getting Scoots attentions.
Woot Update!
Great Chapter, I was wondering what would happen between Sweetie and Show Tail. Kind of sad that he was ignoring her, but as the chapter went along, I can see that he likes Sweetie but can't seem to bring himself to openly admit it. Almost like he's scared to admit Scoot is not the one, almost.
At least that is my opinion. Great Chapter! Awesome Job!
Grats on getting featured, Tira! ^^
straight shipping? DO NOT WANT
I'm proud to say I have been here from the start. Grats on the feature. You deserve it.
Dick move Show Tail.
Dick move.
I LOVE this!
Though I'm team Sweets.
I can't beleive i'm saying this but... I HATE scootaloo right now! Team Sweetie Bell WTF!!!
RARES! BUT!... BUT!... NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO! /manlytears.jpg
S-sh-she, she, she won't... She hasn't even READ the letters?! /cryforever.jpg
~ Magical Trevor, Minstrel of Equestria
YEAH! GO RARES! Things had better go better for her, or Trevor swears he'll find out where you live and skin you alive! YOU HEAR ONE?! *Shakes a hoof at Author*
~ Magical Trevor, Minstrel of Equestria
p.s. ... BUCK! Trevor is enraptured by this fic! TO THE NEXT CHAPTER! ~ALLONS-Y!~
YEAH! GO RARES! Things had better go better for her, or Trevor swears he'll find out where you live and skin you alive! YOU HEAR ONE?! *Shakes a hoof at Author*
~ Magical Trevor, Minstrel of Equestria
p.s. ... BUCK! Trevor is enraptured by this fic! TO THE NEXT CHAPTER! ~ALLONS-Y!~
Whai do we all love reading about teenager angst? WHAI?! Anyhoof... ~ALLONS-Y!~
~ Magical Trevor, Minstrel of Equestria
YAY! 8D *Rushes onto the next chapter*
~ Magical Trevor, Minstrel of Equestria
Stupid stupid Tails. Loving this so far.
Wow... He's really stupid... Not so sure if Trevor wants them to hook up or not at this point...
~ Magical Trevor, Minstrel of Equestria
This is honetsly one of the best FIMfictions EVER.
( U mad Bro?
)
When is next chpter coming out? I swear, I will check
EVERY.FRICKING.DAY.
~ Magical Trevor, Minstrel of Equestria
Now, onto the next... Wait a second... NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!! *Echoing*
How could you do this to Trevor?! HOW?! *Starts crying* You have to keep writing! Please! Trevor has to find out of things get patched up with Rares! (And dat ending.. 'Be careful with your horn!' ... XD Almost died laughing! XD)
I told you that you deserve it.
Yay! good job Tira!!!
amazing. Truly amazing fic. This just might be the best ship fic I've ever read. It just might
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Thank you both so much. Means a lot... Hah. Back to work.
I felt bad for Tails's 'mom' for hitting him, but after what he did to Sweety, I hope he gets hit twice as hard
Keep up the good work. I'm loving it so far!
/TRACK
“Be careful with your horn!” lol
sip enjoys this fanfiction... will wait for the next chapter of this.. nice Belle fic... keep it up.. ^-^.. X3