A short story about when Derpy grows bored one day, and decides to write a fan fic that makes 100% sense. *liarjack.png*
(NOTE: The fan fic part that Derpy wrote, is going to have HORRID grammar. This was done on PURPOSE.
THIS FAN FIC IS BASED OF A VIDEO, MADE BY EONSDARKLATIOS.
http://www.youtube.com/user/EonsDarkLatios
I have gotten permission from him
Please, Derpy fans, I do not want to cause offence by how Derpy writes, or how I called her in this story. )
LOL
That was funny!
Oh! First?
Umm...cute i guess.
EONSDARKLATIOS!(Is one of his many subs.)
And for Derpy's shipping fic see this:
equestria.fadri.org/comics/023-Mine.jpg
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It was just a short story I wrote for fun, because It popped into my head when I saw a video made by the youtuber "EONSDARKLATIOS"
I don't really expect anyone too actually think its like "The most amazing fan-fic ever!" .
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Possibly. I might try and write something like this, but I cant make any promises.
You know what? I just got an Idea!
I'm going to work on it RIGHT NOW!
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...Well, Pinkie Pie might write a story....
Don't worry. It won't be gory in any way... I think.
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I know, mass fourth wall breakage.
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Thats alot of fourth wall breakage.
Cute, but you randomly switch between present and past tenses.
I really dont like to slam fics...but...
Your spelling was bad, as well as well as grammar, the story has absolutely no details, it was short, providing no exposition, there was a pitiful amount of story to it in the first place and even that was still rushed. Dialect was skewed, and it did switch between past and present tense a lot.
It's an okay story idea, not a great one, but the writing butchered it.
Please, please, please, get a little more experience, and try this again. I know from experience that works, even when you have a really shaky start.
-CC
i did a dramatic read on your fan fic