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protip: P.O.V. or "Point Of View" is dictating what that character is seeing through their eyes and thoughts, and is narrated by said character.
When writing a P.O.V. it is often a good idea to write it in First-Person
and
this isn't necessary as the whole story is already in third-person. The only way this would be accepted where you've put it is if it was through the eyes of a third character. However, nowhere in the story does it state there is a third character present.
I've been reading this on FF.net and I love it. I'm so happy its coming here to Fimfiction.
switching p.o.v.'s are a bitch to write.
i have published friends who have had trouble flipping them.
the breaks always seem like a good idea but they break the flow a bit.
i like this so far,upvoted and given where this tale seems to be heading and that likely no punches will be pulled in the story,im giving this a fav as well. don't wanna miss any updates, I'm impatient that way. gritty emotional realism in a ship fic? i am intrigued and look forward to more.
I'M CRYING SO HARD RIGHT NOW!!
Oh my gosh!
I'm so happy to see this here! Awesome! 
Wow! This story is great keep up the good work.
I've been thoroughly enjoying this on That Other Site, and I'm glad to see it's moving here where it's much easier to follow.
Are you planning on stretching out the chapters that are already present there over time, or posting them all at once?
Really liking it so far!
yup just as I'd hoped. awesome
I still want to cry over the things Shy did to herself in Chapter 2
You sir deserve all the likes and favourites! ALL OF THEM
Wow what a nice surprise to see all the interest in the story. To fferror, I have been trying to read through them to fix mistakes I was too tired to notice, but then about half way of each chapter I get lazy and post it.
Bad me. Someone offered to proof read these for me, so that will help. 
But yeah I will port all of the chapters I have so far, and will continue to post the new chapters for both sites. Thanks again everyone! I love thesee pony face icons, especially this one!
Classy.
Thank goodness all that gore and dark stuff are gone from now on!
...Dammit, now I'm crying again.
A very sweet Flutterdash story. I have nothing but great things to say here. :)
Im scared... but I'll keep on reading. This was a very ...impactful chapter.
This is impressive. As someone who has not read this on any other site, I like where this is going, despite its brutal start. Keep up the good work. You have earned a upvote and a fave from me.
Hey, glad to see this on FimFiction! I've been reading it on FanFiction.net for quite a while now
Nice chapter. I look forward to more.
Both the nurse and doc were well done, as was RD's treatment of Red Heart.
Here's hoping for some more Flutterdash action soon. (Like RD to break a few rules... sneak in etc)
I'm really liking this story, and I am a person of very high standards, and loves few a story, but it seems to me the only flaw you've made, is that when a new person is talking, you need to start a new paragraph, now other than that, this story is okay-ly written.
Now Love and Tolerance to all!
~Ilovesparklez13/OverToneAPegaSister
2917170 hey i will totally volunteer proof read for you, it would be awesome!
Now Love and Tolerance to all!
~Ilovesparklez13/OverToneAPegaSister
Can I say really fast that I just love these stories with self injury in them? So hard to find.
Very impressive, many Flutterdashers often shy away from the dark tone for fear of having their stories bashed.
I like how Fluttershy self mutilating her wings wasn't ntirely an overeaction, she did consider worse option but was rational enough to deny them. I even like Rainbow's dedication to help heal her friend and of course the tender moments are good too and their working their way through the story. I'm glad you didn't them confess or kiss... yet.
Anyway this is good I'll be reading more soon. If you're not too busy to ignore this of course.
Oh yeah and uh here, have a
Actually you know what forget about the
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Very good so far :) Please keep writing :)
So I read more of this on fanfiction and this is just amazing.
Have a like, a fave, and a follow
Some thoughts on it:
-Your writing is really good. I think I saw maybe one or two grammar error.
-The paceing is slow and I think it's good that way.
-Everyone is writen in character.
-Some times having to instead of too in the later chapters is wierd
Can't really say anything else without giving spoilers,
so
Thank you for writing this, and I'm eagerly waiting for more
Good stuff.
Hi Everyone! I am so so sorry I haven't updated or anything recently. My beloved yet stupid internet was on hiatus for about a week and a half (Felt like forever)
But I got it back on, although I might look for something more reasonable. To the perspn pffering to proof read, thanks, that's very nice of you, I could use all the help I can get. Well, I'm off to work, but I shall be back and try and get the chapters I already have together. Thank you for reading and commenting and such. 
i was glad to see this updated.
definitely like the story and frankly with the subject matter dark is necessary.
the only thing that bugged me, and its a small stupid thing that even to me doesn't really matter.
the psychiatrist's name. i hate shrinks as much as the next guy who was forced to routinely see one but shrink adink.
wow.
great story though.
3166284 This story originated on fanfiction.net, if you cant wait and want more of this awesome story you can always go see it there, today The Queen Baby just added chapter 19 to this epic story ^^
At first I was like
Then I was like
In the end I was like
WE WANT MOAR!
Yes, we need more!
How final is the version on fanfiction.net?
Because if it is, I'm heading over there to get more.
Hi guys, thanks for reading. First, I know, Shrink Adink. It's even worse than the other doctor, Dr. Fixit. I was too lazy to think of a better name, and since ponies usually have such painfully obvious names, thus was born Shrink lol. Second, yes, I have it posted at Fanfiction.net, it is pretty final over there. Someone suggested on this site that I fix any errors because people are more keen on things like that here. But yes, you can read it at both sights if you really like!
Things will lighten up and become fluffy in a few chapters, so keep an eye out. Thanks again!
OH MY GOSH I FOUND THIS!!! I read it on fanfiction.net so I'm pretty psyched.
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Great chapter.
In some ways you remind me of how I love to write Flutterdash (but I think you write them even better). Its fun to read and I'm looking forward To seeing them finaly become a couple.
Angel is a great way of breaking up their little moments
and its fun seeing him included so much in the story.
It will be nice to see the others, especialy if they think that flutter and dash are in a relationship now.
I can't wait to see this continued. Especially if there are a few upcoming cute scenes. I wonder.... Will the reason for this being a mature story be revealed soon as Fluttershy and rainbow dash get closer? Or was it mostly because it got dark?
Thanks everyone!
>> FlutterDash7
Yes I love writing Angel, and I use him for most of the comedy as he is jealous of Rainbow stealing Fluttershy's attention away. There is just so much you can do with him. And I decided that yeah there will be some of that mature stuff, but a while later though. Although some heavy themes will occur, just not as dark.
Keep your eyes open. More is a coming!
Pinkie Promise
I laughed so hard several times this chapter. First at pinkie's humour and the reaction it got and then pretty much all the way though the pegasus wings part. Poor Scoots...
It kinda sucked that Dash flipped Fluttershy off so harshly and I look forward to seeing the trip into town. It will be 'interesting'... I can't complain about it though, you did a good job with it and I found everypony to be engaging and believable the whole time.
I have no problem with the mature stuff as long as its kept to just Flutterdash. Oh and you set up for any such later scenes between Fluttershy and Rainbow Dash well because of what Twilight said about Pegasi...
Keep up the good job
At first I was like
And then I was like
And then I was like
"they're"
3173056 I had noticed that about the dialogue as well.
Not to be rude or anything, but I've noticed a lot of grammatical errors in this. One of the biggest being that when you change between different character's dialogue, you're supposed to start a new paragraph. There's also the misuse of the word "to." When it is spelled "to" it is defining a direction. (ex. "I'm giving the leftover steak to Jeffery.") You seemed to be confusing it with "too," which is used to mean 'also' or 'as well' (ex "I'm going to give Jeffery some of the Salad too.") There were a few other's like saying "no" instead of "know" here and there; and the occasional use of the incorrect form of "there." But still a very good fiction, none the less! I'm looking forward to future chapters.
hey there,
i've been following this story for quite some time now on fanfiction, and i'm pleased to see that you have brought it over to fimfiction. I hope you can get the other 10 chapters uploaded soon :) once again i love this story.
Very cute ending there. Lots of feels even though the proofreading could have done a bit more to smoothen things out.
That end... How do those two not know they are way past what two best friends do each day...? Oh well, it makes for entertaining reading and I hope for more wingboner oriented silly fun to come in future chapters.
Oh dear... Pinkie Pie. i'm betting all kinds of chaos will come from this.
Keep going please
I'm wondering what Dash's problem is...
:3
It's kinda comedic to see those two unable to voice their true feelings for eachother.
And yet it fills my heart with diabeetus
Makes me forget what Shy did to herself.
I'm loving this store its cute and very well written I am totally looking forward to more!!!!
Have 5 hearts on me
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I think that we are the third character. We see the whole story, but let's say we're just background ponies. I wanna be Applejack!