Rainbow Dash gets mad at her own mistakes and takes it out on Fluttershy. After apologizing she realizes the extent of damage she caused. She promises to never hurt her again. They soon discover their feelings for each other.
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protip: P.O.V. or "Point Of View" is dictating what that character is seeing through their eyes and thoughts, and is narrated by said character.
When writing a P.O.V. it is often a good idea to write it in First-Person
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this isn't necessary as the whole story is already in third-person. The only way this would be accepted where you've put it is if it was through the eyes of a third character. However, nowhere in the story does it state there is a third character present.
I've been reading this on FF.net and I love it. I'm so happy its coming here to Fimfiction.
switching p.o.v.'s are a bitch to write.
i have published friends who have had trouble flipping them.
the breaks always seem like a good idea but they break the flow a bit.
i like this so far,upvoted and given where this tale seems to be heading and that likely no punches will be pulled in the story,im giving this a fav as well. don't wanna miss any updates, I'm impatient that way. gritty emotional realism in a ship fic? i am intrigued and look forward to more.
Thanks so far guys. And thanks for following from the other site DarthSylar12. If I remember correctly the first chapter is the only one where I put the POV breakers, it will flow much more smoothly afterwards. Thanks again
I've been thoroughly enjoying this on That Other Site, and I'm glad to see it's moving here where it's much easier to follow.
Are you planning on stretching out the chapters that are already present there over time, or posting them all at once?
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I think that we are the third character. We see the whole story, but let's say we're just background ponies. I wanna be Applejack!
The cool thing about writing in 3rd person omniscient is the lack of need to dictate who's point of view the narration is in, because it's in everyone's point of view. The narration should be clear enough based on dialogue and thought process that you shouldn't have to actually say who's narrating at that point.
3280503 Or we are the narrator, and we see all!
Um.
This has been stated before, but the P.O.V. 'changes' are kinda irrelevant, the whole thing's in first person.
So yeah. P.O.V. changes really only work when switching from first to third, y'know?
Dear god, I'm FINALLY re-reading this and it's longer than ever!
AWESOME!
~ Wywint